10.1 作业（进军美利坚）

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In the recent years, there is a general controversyover the issue that whether good looks and dresses are more important for successthan good ideas. Although some people claim that people’s opinions can betterreflect the truth of their inside world, I prefer to support that goodappearances are indispensable and I will provide concrete evidences todemonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that in thefiled of art, good looks and apparels are the prerequisite for success. It iswell known that with the help of appropriate costumes, people can better devotetheir emotion during the performance. For instance, the musician who plays atraditional instrument such as the flute will absolutely wear differently witha modern guitar player, since each kind of wearing style is conducive to makethe audiences better understand their music. What is more, in the movieindustry, the directors need to choose actors or actresses with good outsideappearances to play roles in their films. As movie is such an art form whoseultimate goal is to make profit for the company. Only when people acted in thefilms look nice, can the movie attract more audiences, which is definitely thebasic rule of this market. It is easy to understand that everybody wants tospend money enjoying some beautiful persons to perform in the films.

Second of all, in the areas of sports, excellentdresses will benefit the athletes in many aspects. Along with the rapiddevelopment of technology, there is a growing number of high-tech materialsutilized in the sports games, which promote the achievements of sportsmen. Forexample, in the swimming pool, some swimmers wear the clothes made from theskin of shark, with the help of which the resistance of water is largelyreduced. Moreover, certain runners wear special designed sneakers to enhancetheir running speed in the track field, which will offer them more opportunitiesto win the game. Accordingly, it is obvious that perfect wearing is also veryhelpful in the athletics.

Last but not least, in the job hunting process, goodlooks as well as clothing again play a significant role. It is universallyacknowledged that during the interview, employer can only judge an applier fromtheir outside looks. Then those who own more perfect appearance are prone tosuccess in the job market, this is the reason why nowadays the plastic surgery becomesso popular.

To sum up, taking into account of the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise andreasonable for people to pay more attention on their looks and dresses.

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这篇严重超时啦

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In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue that whether good looks and dresses are more important for success than good ideas. Although some people claim that people’s opinions can better reflect the truth of their inside world, I prefer to support that good appearances are indispensable and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that in the filed of art, good looks and apparels are the prerequisite for success. It iswell known that with the help of appropriate costumes, people can better devote their emotion during the performance. For instance, the musician who plays a traditional instrument such as the flute will absolutely wear differently with（from比较好） a modern guitar player, since each kind of wearing style is conducive to make the audiences better understand their music. What is more, in the movie industry, the directors need to choose actors or actresses with good outside appearances to play roles in their films. As movie is such an art form whose ultimate goal is to make profit for the company. Only when people acted in the films look nice, can the movie attract more audiences, which is definitely the basic rule of this market. It is easy to understand that everybody wants to spend money enjoying some beautiful persons to perform in the films.   `, Q5 c( q7 N# X" o

Second of all, in the areas of sports, excellent dresses will benefit the athletes in many aspects. Along with the rapid development of technology, there is a growing number of high-tech materialsutilized in the sports games, which promote the achievements of sportsmen. For example, in the swimming pool, some swimmers wear the clothes made from the skin of shark, with the help of which the resistance of water is largely reduced. Moreover, certain runners wear special designed sneakers to enhance their running speed in the track field, which will offer them more opportunities to win the game. Accordingly, it is obvious that perfect wearing is also very helpful in the athletics.

Last but not least, in the job hunting process, goodlooks as well as clothing again play a significant role. It is universally acknowledged that during the interview, employer can only judge an applier fromtheir outside looks. Then those who own more perfect appearance are prone to success in the job market, this is the reason why nowadays the plastic surgery becomes so popular.

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To sum up, taking into account of the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise andreasonable for people to pay more attention on their looks and dresses.

结构很清楚，理由很明确，有一点小错误，无伤大雅
第二点是说的那些衣服 不一定是good looks，所以感觉可以换一个

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谢谢

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粉色的lz不用理会，是我觉得写的不错的

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue that whether good looks and dresses are more important for success than good ideas. Although some people claim that people’s opinions can better relect the truth of their inside world, I prefer to support that good appearances are(感觉这个地方应该单数的) indispensable and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that in the filed of art, good looks and apparels are the prerequisite for success. It is well known that with the help of appropriate costumes, people can better devote their emotion during the performance（我总觉得应该是devote to吧）. For instance, the musician who plays a traditional instrument such as the flute will absolutely wear differently with a modern guitar player, since each kind of wearing style is conducive to makethe audiences better understand their music. What is more, in the movie industry, the directors need to choose actors or actresses with good outside appearances to play roles in their films. As movie is such an art form whose ultimate goal is to make profit for the company. Only when people acted in the films look nice, can the movie attract more audiences, which is definitely the basic rule of this market. It is easy to understand that everybody wants to spend money enjoying some beautiful persons to perform in the films. 楼主的方向选的不错，但是例子我觉得选的欠佳。比如电影的例子，是根据角色来选择服装的，绝对不能全部都是good appearance得，而应该是suitable。还有那个musician应该也一样

Second of all, in the areas of sports, excellent dresses will benefit the athletes in many aspects. Along with the rapid development of technology, there is a growing number of high-tech material sutilized in the sports games, which promote the achievements of sportsmen. Forexample, in the swimming pool, some swimmers wear the clothes made from the skin of shark，with the help of which the resistance of water is largelyreduced. Moreover, certain runners wear special designed sneakers to enhancetheir running speed in the track field, which will offer them more opportunitiesto win the game. Accordingly, it is obvious that perfect wearing is also veryhelpful in the athletics.

Last but not least, in the job hunting process, goodlooks as well as clothing again play a significant role. It is universally acknowledged that during the interview, employer can only judge an applier fromtheir outside looks（这句的感觉不太有道理）. Then those who own more perfect appearance are prone to success in the job market, this is the reason why nowadays the plastic surgery becomesso popular.

To sum up, taking into account of the discussion mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonable for people to pay more attention on their looks and dresses.

因为不知道最原始的题目是什么，不过就这次题目来说，我们的理解是有偏差的，我理解的good appearance是好看的外形，包括气质，穿着；而你的理解确实衣服的实用性
还有就是完全没提good idea啊，起码也要做点对比吧。因为题目不是：你觉得good appearance中部重要？

除此之外就是一大堆的优点了，词句，结构层次，内容都是很好的，要多多向你学习了。

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多谢各位提意见了，

joyceliuUID: 2477232

First and foremost, there is no denying that in thefiled of art, good looks and apparels are the prerequisite for success. It iswell known that with the help of appropriate costumes, people can better devotetheir emotion to the performance. For instance, the musician who plays atraditional instrument such as the flute will absolutely make the audiencesbetter understood his music when he could wear a suit with traditionalcharacteristics. What is more, in the movie industry, the directors prefer tochoose actors or actresses with fine outside appearance to play roles in theirfilms. As movie is such an art form whose ultimate goal is to make profit forthe company. Only when people acted in the films look nice, can the movie attractmore audiences, which is definitely the basic rule of this market. It is easyto understand that everybody wants to spend money enjoying some beautifulpersons to perform in the films.

joyceliuUID: 2477232

论证第一段稍改了一些，King兄意见有道理