10.27作文，欢迎拍砖

helen85UID: 2312103

Nowadays ,when you take a subway , you can find many people there are reading  e-books through MP3,MP4,mobile phones . Or , you can always be asked by the question that :"Hi,do you have electronic editional book with the book named X ? If you do ,pass it to me through email ." It seems that it is an trend that e-books will be replace the printed books . However i do think printed books will disappear some day forever .
Admittedly , the e-book has a lot of advantages for which the readers would like to read it . It is convenient for every individual . We can carry with ebooks whenever and wherever we like to read . We can read these ebooks in the size and color we like .And it accelerate our devolopment of humanbeings' mind  ,which just suits the mainstream of modern - high-speed . The imformations carried by the e-books can spead all over the world in a minute . These different informations conflick with each other and then new ideas are inspired . At last ,some times we can get some free ebooks from friend or internet.
By the way ,some people will say that the printed books will consume the source of woods a lot .This could break our ecological banlance and make humanbeings be in trouble. But the situation can go in the good the positive direaction . Now many new kinds of paper-subsistition will come out . And we can use the recycled-paper to print book .
However , the printed book will not step out its stage . First of all ,the printed book and ebook go in the different styles. As i have said speed is the topic of our day , everything wants to reach its highest efficient . People seldom step slowly and are used to say "I am busy and have no time  " .In this high-speeding world ,printed books can help people slow down and give them different but quiet world ,where people easily look inside of their heart . Touching the papers ,readers will feel more real and confortable .

Additionally,people like old things .Printed books are more older comparatively .People are always full of the curiosity of history. I think this is why the museum .Maybe someday printed books disapear for a while .At that time , when people once find an old printed book ,people would like to use it and reconstruct the book-world which may be  much like today . Of course the printed book may be used in different way ,such as being a part of adornment . It will not exinct for ever ,just as an 18th centry-construction in 21th centry world .
Even if there are no above good merits of the printed book , the printed book will not disappear .As we know ,the tools we use to read our ebooks can give out some dangerous electromagnetical radiations . If we are close to these radiations for a long time ,these radiations will damage our body health .One of these most appearant damages is eye-disease . We can see this from the computors workers almost of whom are myopic .What's more, the ebook-tools ,computor will send out carbon dioxide which can damage the environment . Health and environment are  the  first choice ,if we should choose.
Considering good merits of the printed books and health of humanbeings , i think the printed book will not disappear ,which can coexist for a long long time .

ice--breakerUID: 2717367

1# helen85 文章中小错误挺多的，a与an ，动词的形式，主动与被动，还有拼写错误页挺多的。语言表达不比较的中式化，很多观点都挺新颖的，但这些都有很多地道的表达。建议多看看好作文。划线部分标明了你两个不同的观点，有点迷惑你是赞成还是反对，从后面看应该是反对，前面可能少了个NOT吧

Nowadays ,when you take a subway , you can find many people there are reading
e-books through MP3,MP4,mobile phones . Or , you can always be asked by the question that :"Hi,do you have electronic editional book with the book named X ? If you do ,pass it to me through email ." It seems that it is an trend that e-books will be replace the printed books . However（这里不是转折吧，前后的意思一样） i do think printed books will disappear some day forever .
Admittedly , the e-book has a lot of advantages for which the readers would like to read it . It is convenient for every individual . We can carry with ebooks whenever and wherever we like to read . We can read these ebooks in the size and color we like .And it accelerate our devolopment of humanbeings' mind
,which just suits the mainstream of modern - high-speed . The imformations carried by the e-books can spead all over the world in a minute . These different informations conflick with each other and then new ideas are inspired . At last ,some times we can get some free ebooks from friend or internet.
By the way ,some people will say that the printed books will consume the source of woods a lot .This could break our ecological banlance and make humanbeings be in trouble. But the situation can go in the good the positive direaction . Now many new kinds of paper-subsistition will come out . And we can use the recycled-paper to print book .
However , the printed book will not step out its stage . First of all ,the printed book and ebook go in the different styles. As i have said speed is the topic of our day , everything wants to reach its highest efficient . People seldom step slowly and are used to say "I am busy and have no time
" .In this high-speeding world ,printed books can help people slow down and give them different but quiet world ,where people easily look inside of their heart . Touching the papers ,readers will feel more real and confortable .
Additionally,people like old things .Printed books are more older comparatively .People are always full of the(多余) curiosity of history. I think this is why the museum （？）.Maybe someday printed books disapear for a while .At that time , when people once find an old printed book ,people would like to use it and reconstruct the book-world which may be
much like today . Of course the printed book may be used in different way ,such as being a part of adornment . It will not exinct for ever ,just as an 18th centry-construction in 21th centry world .
Even if there are no above good merits of the printed book , the printed book will not disappear .As we know ,the tools we use to read our ebooks can give out some dangerous electromagnetical radiations . If we are close to these radiations for a long time ,these radiations will damage our body health .One of these most appearant damages is eye-disease . We can see this from the computors workers almost of whom are myopic .What's more, the ebook-tools ,computor will send out carbon dioxide which can damage the environment . Health and environment are
the
first choice ,if we should choose. ^
Considering good merits（不要good） of the printed books and health of humanbeings , i think the printed book will not disappear ,which can coexist with the e-book for a long long time .

heqiang_1001UID: 2607349

Nowadays ,when you take a subway , you can find many people there(who) are reading  e-books through(by) MP3,MP4,mobile phones . Or , you can always be asked by the question that :"Hi,do you have electronic editional book with the book named X ? If you do ,pass it to me through email ." It seems that it is an trend that e-books will be(去掉，不是被动) replace the printed books . However（你要是同意前面的观点，就不用转折了啊，还是你后半句写错了，想说I don't think？） i do think printed books will disappear some day forever .

Admittedly , the e-book has a lot of advantages for which the readers would like to read it . It is convenient for every individual . We can carry with ebooks whenever and wherever we like to read . We can read these ebooks in the size and color we like .And it accelerate our devolopment of humanbeings' mind  ,which just suits the mainstream of modern - high-speed . The imformations carried by the e-books can spead（be spread?）all over the world in a minute . These different informations(information不可数) conflick with each other and then new ideas are inspired . At last ,some times we can get some free ebooks from friend or internet.（最后两句说的是什么意思啊？）

By the way ,some people will say that the printed books will consume the source of woods a lot .This could break our ecological banlance and make humanbeings be in trouble. But the situation can go in the good the positive direaction .（？有问题吧？） Now many new kinds of paper-subsistition will come out . And we can use the recycled-paper to print book .

However , the printed book will not step out its stage . First of all ,the printed book and ebook go in the different styles. As i have said speed is the topic of our day , everything wants to reach its highest efficient . People seldom step slowly and are used to say "I am busy and have no time  " .In this high-speeding world ,printed books can help people slow down and give them different but quiet world ,where people easily look inside of their heart . Touching the papers ,readers will feel more real and confortable .

Additionally,people like old things .Printed books are more older comparatively .People are always full of the curiosity of history. I think this is why the museum (没说完啊？).Maybe someday printed books disapear for a while .At that time , when people once find an old printed book ,people would like to use it and reconstruct the book-world which may be  much like today . Of course the printed book may be used in different way ,such as being a part of adornment . It will not exinct for ever ,just as an 18th centry-construction in 21th centry world .

Even if there are no above good merits of the printed book , the printed book will not disappear .As we know ,the tools we use to read our ebooks can give out some dangerous electromagnetical radiations . If we are close to these radiations for a long time ,these radiations will damage our body health .One of these most appearant damages is eye-disease . We can see this from the computors（computer） workers almost of whom are myopic .(这个从句有点问题啊)What's more, the ebook-tools ,computor（computer） will send out carbon dioxide which can damage the environment . Health and environment are  the  first choice ,if we should choose.

Considering good merits of the printed books and health of humanbeings , i think the printed book will not disappear ,which can coexist for a long long time .


最大的感觉是思维太混乱了……呵呵，别介意啊。
有很多高级词汇，但是有一部分语法错误，还有很多表达感觉是从中文直接翻译过来的。
结构上：第二段写 ebook的好，第三段的 by the way 是补充上文么？好像又是在反驳ebook。后面列了赞成printed book的3个观点。
真的不是很明确究竟是平衡观点还是赞成printed book
第二个例子里，old好究竟体现在了哪儿呢？并没有说清楚。你看了ice--breaker的文章么，至少她指出来，old 好是因为很多过去的书籍和信息我们不能全面的从电子资源中找到。
可以不用写这么多字，在结构和论证方面再努努力恩！

helen85UID: 2312103

In the energy-emergent time ,all humanbeings are caring about our future . Different propositions are suggested  by the ecologists and socialists .And there is an idea that the only effective method to conserve the energy is to increase the price of gasoline and electricity . This idea seems to make some sense .However ,i do not agree for i think there must be some other more effective methods .
First of all ,increasing price of gasoline and electricity is not the only way to conserve the energy .In this high-tech world, scientists are non-stop looking for new energy, which is cheap , convinient and inpolutional ,to replace the old and decreasing energy .Take solar energy for example .We have used solar energy in some field .Such as we use it to boil water or heat the house .Anddionally ,some cars can use the solar energy to move in the sunny day . Another example is there some places, such as Holand ,use the wind energy to produce electrity . What is deserved mentioned is that some scientists want to use the tidal energy as a kind impetus of machines .
Secondly ,with the development of techonogy, new inventions are disigned into energy-saving style . Take cars for example . Many producers disign a lot of cars which uses much less gasoline . It is in the same situation to the electronical tools . Such light uses less and less electrity .
At last , the increasing price may not be effective to conserve energy . Increasing price can limit the energy-use from  the poor or persons who can not afford .But for rich persons ,this is useless .Maybe they will use much more than before,since our new energy-consuming tools are more than before . But we can improve out careness on the energy and use the energy in a non wasteful way .
To conclude , we can and should try a lot of methods which may be more effective . Accually ,we do .  It will be more effective to  invent  energy saving things and retrench the  our use of energy than to increase the price of gasoline and electrity.

eeqkchenUID: 2644469

In the energy-emergent（这个表达我没有见过，crisis of energy 比较好吧） time ,all humanbeings（human beings 要分开写） are caring about our future . Different propositions are suggested  by the ecologists and socialists(这两个词记得很清楚，好) .And there is an idea that the only effective method to conserve the energy is to increase the price of gasoline and electricity . This idea seems to make some sense .However ,i do not agree for（用as， for是介词，后面只能跟名词性短语） i think there must be some other more effective methods .
First of all ,increasing price of gasoline and electricity is not the only way to conserve the energy .In this high-tech（考试最好不要用这样的缩写） world, scientists are non-stop looking for new energy, which is cheap , convinient and inpolutional ,to replace the old and decreasing energy .Take solar energy for example .We have used solar energy in some field .Such as we use it to boil water or heat the house .Anddionally （additionally）,some cars can use the solar energy to move in the sunny day . Another example is there some places, such as Holand ,use the wind energy to produce electrity . What is deserved mentioned is that some scientists want to use the tidal energy as a kind impetus of machines(好的表达) .
Secondly ,with the development of techonogy（technology）, new inventions are disigned into energy-saving style . Take cars for example . Many producers disign a lot of cars which uses much less gasoline . It is in the same situation to the electronical tools . Such light uses less and less electrity .
At last , the increasing price may not be effective to conserve energy . Increasing price can limit the energy-use from  the poor or persons who can not afford .But for rich persons （riches）,this is useless .Maybe they will use much more than before,since our new energy-consuming tools are more than before . But we can improve out careness on the energy and use the energy in a non wasteful way .
To conclude , we can and should try a lot of methods which may be more effective .
Accually ,we do .  It will be more effective to  invent  energy saving things and retrench the  our use of energy than to increase the price of gasoline and electrity.

写的满不错的，细节的一些表达值得商榷，再就是再贴上来之前先在word里面自己检查一遍单词，不然要别人帮忙改单词是件很痛苦的事。
例子都举得很好，值得我学习。

helen85UID: 2312103

Admittedly, our society is becoming more complex . Is it  essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize ? The answer depends on the situation .

The first answer : it is neccesary and basic for young people to obtain the ability of organization , when these young people want to living in a complex and competitional world ,such as the high developed city . Morden time brings both wonders and competition to complex place. The reasons are the followings .

On one hand ,competition forces young people to organize themselves well .For example , nowadays a young man must fight for  a lot of hard or not easy things ,such as job-proposion , house , the tuition for children to go to a good school , social relationship.All these things must be planned . If they plan and organize well ,then ,when the chance comes , they will be more competitive for these things . If they do not orgnize well , they probably be defeated by their competitors . Wonders also need young people to organize well.

On the other hand , wonders also need  young people to organize . Since the transports  are convienent , youngs  like to travel or hike . Youngs like  to go to club .Youngs like to make friend on the Internet . If they do not plan all the things well , then they may waste time on the Internet or ignore their jobs and study

The sencond answer: the ability of organization is not considered ,if young people want to live in a simple way . Since one has chosen to live in a simple way , one do not need to plan . For example ,my favorate teacher who teach mathematics lives in a very simple way .And he do everything in the nature-going way instead of planning . He is so simple that he only has two piece of each kind of cloth . Because if he wash one piece ,then he just wear another piece.Another example is ,one famous painter ,whose name i forget ,he does not plan anything either . All of the painter's thing is managed by his mother . Only thing he need and like to do is to go out from house and look for the painting material .


To sum up , the ability of organization and plan depends on one's choice . So the only thing one should do is to clarify what kind of like he or she want and then chooses to organize or not .

eeqkchenUID: 2644469

Admittedly, our society is becoming more complex . Is it  essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize ? The answer depends on the situation .
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2 ^+ v( {# J& T7 n9 DTo sum up , the ability of organization and plan depends on one's choice . So the only thing one should do is to clarify what kind of like he or she want and then chooses to organize or not .

主要的问题：
（1）如果考试的时候采用你这种divergent attitude是比较冒险的。建议讨论性质的问题，最好还是给出确定的单向答案，并举例论证；
（2）语句的表达能力还需要加强，多分析长难句对这方面能力的提高很有帮助；

其他方面还不错，继续努力！

helen85UID: 2312103

11。4

It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in

books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with

knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more

important? Why?

Today,we are living in a information flourishing world .Everyday

,we deal with all kinds of information spaning from the books to

the Internet . The importance of learning from the books ,however,

can not overweigh that of learning from the experience .

As we know , much information we learn from the books is developed

from the experience . For instance , the theory of geometry

originates from surveying land by the ancient egyptistians after

the Nile's flood . And a lot of pieces of  physical theory are

found though the experiments .Besides the scientific field , the

things we learn from the books are also formed from experience .

Take the two oposite philosophical ideas ,which are "Human nature

is good  " and "Human nature is bad ",for example . Philosophists

who argue for the human nature's good are convinced by the real

things which some people experience ,while those who argue for the

human nature's badness are convinced by the things which happen in

the reality .

Not mentioned to the above importance of experience ,what is more

important is all the things must be tested by the experience . All

the information from the books or other written material presents

the ideas from some special persons ,which may be wrong to other

persons .  Such as some writers support the natural selection

while other writers argur against the natural selection .So the

experience to find the evidences to support one's idea  will be

useful .

What's more the experience can help us to learn from the books.

For example , i want to learn to drive a car . So i go on the

Internet and down load some instructions .And when i read through

these instruction , i will take a real car to practise ,which

makes me not only to understand the instruction ,but also to learn

the skill .

To sum up ,admittedly ,we are now facing the written informations  

. We still read these information , think it in a critical way and

test it  the importance of learning from the experience much more

outweigh that of learning from the books . All these make the

experience more important.

canlanxingkongUID: 2623477

Today,we are living in a information flourishing world .Everyday

,we deal with all kinds of information spaning (spand)from the (去掉)books to

the （去掉）Internet .这两句衔接不太好吧，前句都没有提到experience,提到重要性很突然 The importance of learning from the books ,however,
can not overweigh that of learning from the experience .
As we know , much information we learn from the books is developed

from the experience . For instance , the theory of geometry originates from surveying land by the ancient egyptistians(egyptians) after , the Nile's flood . And a lot of pieces of  physical theory are found though（through） the experiments .Besides the scientific field , the things  (knowledge) we learn from the books are (is)also formed from experience .
Take the two oposite （opposite）philosophical ideas ,which are "Human nature
is good  " and "Human nature is bad ",for example . Philosophists (philosophers)
who argue for the human nature's good are convinced by the real
things改为evidences比较好which some people experience , 可以改为 which are proved through experience of people. while those who argue for the human nature's badness are convinced by the things which happen in the reality .

Not mentioned to the above importance of experience ,what is more
important is all the things must be tested by the experience .
the information (comes)from the books or other written material presents the ideas from some special persons ,which may be wrong to other
persons .  这句是什么意思？表达不太清楚Such as some writers support the natural selection while other writers argur （argue）against the natural selection .So the experience to find the evidences to support one's idea  will be
useful
What's more the experience can help us to learn (knowledge)from the books.
For example , i want to learn to drive a car直接说learn driving 就行 . So i go on （to）the Internet and down load some instructions .And when i read through these instruction , i will take a real car to practise ,which makes me not only to understand the instruction ,but also to learn the skill . 读了之后为什么有这种想法了可以写写，增加说服力

To sum up ,admittedly ,we are now facing the written informations  去s
. We still read these information , think it in a critical way and
test it  the importance of learning from the experience much more
outweigh that of learning from the books . All these make the
experience more important.
文章结构框架合理，词语运用上要加强，似是而非的句子以后我们要克服，加油

guoatjituoUID: 2629146

Today,we are living in a information flourishing world .Everyday we deal with different kinds of information spaning(删掉) from the books and experience . In my opinion, The importance of learning from the books ,however, can not overweigh that of learning from the experience .
As we know , much information we learn from the books comes from the experience . For instance , the theory of geometry originates from surveying land by the ancient egyptistians after the Nile's flood .
以一二段举例，你的思路很清晰只是语言上缺乏严格的逻辑，建议你把李笑来的作文中比较经典的文章反复品读几遍，考场上做到句子流利，而不是断断续续。