11月2日作文 by ice--breaker 多谢修改

ice--breakerUID: 2717367

11.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
反对
理由：1父母是老师，其他人也是老师，比如说hailun
2 父母是老师，不好的父母自己做的不好
3 有些方面父母是达不到的
Admittly ，parents are our primitive teacher ，the ones who told us how to speak the simple words“ABC”and how to communicate with the complex society when we went out for the first time，and how to get along well with your first boyfriend or girlfriend。However，we are to grow up and there are someday we find people around us will edify us more than our parents in various ways that may effect all your life。 And the parents are not perfect all in all，so they can not be the best teacher all over the time。
First and foremost ，under no condition should we deny the importance role that parents play when we are children and immature 。But from the moment we left to the honey home stay in the dormitory far away and maybe only see our parents for one or two days every year，those who are close to you ，such as our roommate ， our teachers， our boss and our colleges，may affect us more as to our future。The teacher distracted wou from the confusion about your occupation and help you find the best of you ；the boss made us the best qualified employee by criticizing us again and again；…Without her teacher ,rather than her parents,who changed her whole,Halen can not become the famous writer.
Many a good cow hath a bad calf, On the other hand,some parents have some bad behavors ,such as addicting drugs,qurralling with each other all the time and even commit the crime,which can give bad examples to their children form the whole life.The Chinese famous star Edson Chen who ruined himself by the photo scandal is the exactly insistence that his parents’s unregular sex custom lead to his mistake.
What is more,the parents can not gain the academic knowledge in the field we are interested in.In that point ,the professor and our coworkers can be our best teachers. Only with their patient instruction and inspiration can the scientist achieve great success in the science research work.
Form the above factors,we can safely draw a conclusion that your parents are not the best teachers.Everyone can be your teacher since everybody has his advantage in some degree. And there are many teachers all through your life,who may more better than our parents.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

Admittly ，parents are our primitive teacher ，the ones who told us how to speak the simple words from“ABC”and how to communicate with the-->in this complex society when we went out for the first time，and how to get along well with your first boyfriend or girlfriend。首句长 However，we are to grow up and there are someday we (will) find (that) people around us will edify us 2个us 有点重复 more than our parents in various ways that may effect all your life。 And the parents are not perfect all in all，so they can not be the best teacher all over the time 有点决定吧..therefore, not all parents could be the best teachers in people's life.

First and foremost ，under no condition should we deny the importance role that parents play when we are children and immature 。But from the moment we left to the honey home staying in the dormitory far away and maybe only see our parents for one or two days every year，those who are close to you ，such as our roommate ， our teachers， our boss and our colleges，may affect这是哪里的谓语? us more as to our future。这句是比较长的, 但是实际是简单句子拼起来的. 不如写成简短精悍的短句子.The teacher distracted wou from the confusion about your occupation and help you find the best of you...不要从中国话直接译 ；the boss made us the best qualified employee by criticizing us again and again有的时候是找茬Boss才你会在乎你, 他们在乎的是你能带来多少利益；…Without her teacher ,rather than her parents,who changed her whole,Halen can not become the famous writer.怎么突然来个海伦..?想说他的例子前面也要有过度这样太突然

Many a good cow hath a bad calf, On the other hand,some parents have some bad behavors ,such as addicting drugs,qurralling with each other all the time and even commit the crime,which can give bad examples to their children form the whole life.The Chinese famous star Edson Chen who ruined himself by the photo scandal is the exactly insistence that his parents’s unregular sex custom lead to his mistake. What is more,the parents can not gain the academic knowledge in the field we are interested in.In that point ,the professor and our coworkers can be our best teachers. Only with their patient instruction and inspiration can the scientist achieve great success in the science research work. 不积极的最好不采用

Form the above factors,we can safely draw a conclusion that your parents are not the best teachers.Everyone can be your teacher since everybody has his--with their advantage in some degree. And there are many teachers all through your life,who may more better than our parents. 句子有些欠佳, 消极的最好不写. 句子不用这么长除非是很完整的复杂句

liberlyUID: 2570733

Admittly（admittedly），parents are our primitive（我不知道primitive能用在这个语境不，用initial也可以） teacher，the ones who told us how to speak the simple words“ABC”and how to communicate with the complex society when we went out for the first time，and how to get along well with your（这个汉语式代词，而且代词不一致，前面是we，这咋就变成your了） first boyfriend or girlfriend。However，we are to grow up and there are（will be） someday we find people around us will edify us more than our parents in various ways that may effect（affect好一点） all your life（还是那个问题，代词不一致，all one's life不太好，最好是one’s whole life）。And the parents（冠词不太好，the是特指了，直接parents就行） are not perfect all in all（all in all是个副词短语，不能be "all in all",may be u want to say “at all”），so they can not be the best teacher all over the time(重复，all the time就行)。5 s" C3 K  P7 O' t( X6 p1 t
First and foremost，under no condition should we deny the importance role that parents play when we are children and immature。But from the moment we left to（没有to，leave及物） the honey home stay in the dormitory far away and maybe only see（这个改成stay with吧，see是个动作，不能做一段时间） our parents for one or two days every year，those who are close to（如果是close to的话，close是动词，前边的are应该去掉） you，such as our roommate（复数），our teachers，our boss and our colleges，may affect us more as to our future。The（特指） teacher distracted wou（不认识） from the confusion about your（同上） occupation and help you find the best of you（这句话，没说清意思，虽然我看明白了）；the（同上） boss made us the best qualified employee by criticizing us again and again；…Without her teacher ,rather than her parents,who changed her whole,Halen can not become the famous writer.
Many a good cow hath a bad calf（这是个allegory吧，不过再怎么样，many和a也不能连用）,On the other hand,some parents have some bad behavors（behaviors） ,such as addicting drugs,qurralling（quarreling，这个词不是重度闭音节，不双写） with each other all the time and even commit the（同上）crime,which can give bad examples to their children form the whole life.The Chinese famous star Edson Chen who ruined himself by the photo scandal is the exactly insistence that his parents’s unregular sex custom lead to his mistake." A8 f# H3 Z" [& R/ f- Q
What is more,the parents can not gain the academic knowledge in the field we are interested in.In that point ,the（同上） professor and our coworkers can be our best teachers. Only with their patient instruction and inspiration can the（） scientist achieve great success in the science research work.（scientist出现的太突然了）（n2 o( L' z6 g9 @! Q0 g
Form（from？） the above factors,we can safely draw a conclusion that your（） parents are not the best teachers.Everyone can be your teacher since everybody has his advantage（优点merit） in some degree. And there are many teachers all through your life,who may more better than our parents.
结构有点头重脚轻，最好能头尾均匀一些，另外，写英文作文尽量注意汉语的代词使用习惯，再不是真的谈论自己的时候，还是少用we i you…………那个还有就是，语病实在有点多……其实很多时候在语感不发挥作用的情况下，语法还是很重要的判断标准……