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回复gaofei作文11月12日的:
Every time we make a choice to decide which courses would be selected in each beginning of a new semester, we probably take two things factor 会不会更好?into consideration, whether the courses could give us practical knowledge, which at the same time means they are more difficult than usual ones, or others in which we highly possible to get a top grade without应该是with吧? less effort. In my point, I prefer the former ones as following reasons(the reasons are as follows).
The first reason to support my point is that it is the practical knowledge and skills rather than top grade are the most crucial things we have to achieve during the college. Therefore, even though people have to suffer(bear) heavy burden to move on, in the end they would definitely become more eligible than others to undertake harder work, which would expand the chance to enter a famous company, earn desirous payment and more eminent social state. Just as my physics teacher told to me:” the payment in your college life would be repaid to yourself ten times back when you step into the society, so just don’t choose something everybody are capable to accomplish, but what is so hard that most people would not like to do.” So, if you want more payment back in the future, you need to select the things which require more endeavor now.
In addition, it is a precious spirit that facing the difficulty directly instead of avoiding it. When you are still students, it is possible to choose some classes you like or easier to finish, but it wouldn’t happen when you became aan adult and work for supporting your family. At that time, you have to take the assignment your boss ordered no matter it is comfortable or sufferableinsufferable, and as usually it would much likely to be the latter ones. This work may cost 10 hours per day to visit your customers or lock you in the office until until去掉every late night to make design of a new product. But, unfortunately, you couldn’t say” no” because your family must have food, your children need to go to university and your parents need money to go to hospital in case. So it is necessary for everyone to be trained as strong as possible in the campus, namely select the hardest courses to learn. Thus, they would be quicker to adopt(adopt this competitive societymore quickly) this competitive society.
Admittedly, a part of students are not as mature as adults are, so just compelling them forcibly to undertake too much unbearable tasks may be not helpful. To those students, they should be encouraged to selected challenging and difficult courses费解, but it is important to protect them from losing confidence or becoming depression in front of these works. Otherwise, they may earn less than they would lose.
In conclusion, selecting difficult and challenging courses would be a clever choice since it would train you becoming more capable(train sb.doing可以这样吗?)in your area and cultivate a stronger heart, as long as the potential danger, losing confident or being depression, is protected from. 费解
1.文章结构还是比较完整的,但是表达还是偏口语化。。。
2.部分语法错误
3.第四段,就是以admittedly开头那段感觉没有什么意义,你写的是一边倒的作文吗?还是70%支持,30%反对?看你结尾好像还是 一边倒支持的,但是第四段又好像让步了。。。confusing... |
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