12.2 家里还是电影院看电影

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12.1 It is more fun to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home.

Whether it is more fun to see a movie in cinema with other people than at home is a controversial issue in recent years. Considering the merit of enjoying a movie at home is preponderate the advantage of seeing a movie in cinema, I agree with the statement that it will be more fun to appreciate a movie at home.

First, there're much uncountless benefits of enjoy movies at home on the condition that our audio facilities using at home are dramatically improved nowadays. For one thing, it is more flexible than enjoying in cinema. As we know, cinema has its own broadcast schedule to put on movies, the movies not classic but prevailing. Taking one of my hobbies for instance, I am fascinated in watching some classic movies. Lion King, a name of a Disney film, is a classic carton worth to see, but can not be enjoyed in cinema for this reason, whereas I can buy its videos and watch it at home without restriction, such as the schedule I mentioned above. For another thing, I found that sometimes cinema is too chaos to enjoy my favorite movie, especially setting with some unfamiliar audiences. For example, the sound of eating popcorn can not be tolerated, as well as the abrupt crying or laughing by other spectators. In contrast, I can enjoy a movie without disruption at home, even lying in my bed, which can bring me more fun.

Second, some inconvenience brought by going to cinema can not be overlooked. It, of cause, will have a negative impact on this entertainment. It is difficult to find a place to park in cinema parking lot. Also, we need to queue up to buy a ticket for a feverish movie. With those exhaustion, we will feel tedious to see a movie, though it is wonderful, no less to mention any joy. Another reason is more obviously to find in my former statement. Sometimes, certain audience will chat and make comments frequently during the movie, without regarding any existence of someone else. To some extent, I will absolutely be affected when I am deeply immersed in the movie in this case.

Judging from what I analyzed above, I think it is a wiser alternative that not to see a movie in cinema, but have enjoyment at home, which will bring us more fun.

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12.1 It is more fun to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home.. C+ ^3 y4 B4 ?! f

8 P& `& Q9 f: P% n) ^( qWhetherit is more fun to see a movie in cinema with other people than at homeis a controversial issue in recent years. [这句几乎是宇宙通用的模板了，你这样用没错，能变通一点点，融入点自己的风格就好了，显示你不是在背模板] Considering the merit ofenjoying a movie at home is preponderate[is去掉，变单三] the advantage of seeing amovie in cinema, I agree with the statement that it will be more fun toappreciate a movie at home.( I1 Z  _. Q+ B& l+ E& p' D; c6 M
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First, there're much uncountless benefits of enjoy[enjoying] movies at home onthe condition that our audio facilities using at home are dramaticallyimproved nowadays. For one thing, it is more flexible than enjoying incinema[what is more flexible?时间还是啥的？用it 强调句，后面不是应该对应that吗]. As we know, cinema has its own broadcast schedule to put onmovies, the movies not classic but prevailing. Taking one of my hobbiesfor instance, I am fascinated in watching some classic movies. LionKing, a name of a Disney film, is a classic carton worth to see,[注意句子主干，a name is a carton，不通] butcan not be enjoyed in cinema for this reason, whereas I can buy itsvideos and watch it at home without restriction, such as the schedule Imentioned above. For another thing, I found that sometimes cinema istoo chaos to enjoy my favorite movie, especially setting[sitting?] with someunfamiliar audiences. For example, the sound of eating popcorn can notbe tolerated, as well as the abrupt crying or laughing by other spectators. In contrast, I can enjoy a movie without disruption at home, even lying in my bed, which can bring me more fun.
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, l1 m# m4 S5 h  d: `+ _5 uSecond,some inconvenience brought by going to cinema can not be overlooked.It, of cause, will have a negative impact on this entertainment. It isdifficult to find a place to park in cinema parking lot. Also, we needto queue up to buy a ticket for a feverish movie. With thoseexhaustion, we will feel tedious to see a movie, though it iswonderful, no less to mention any joy.[你想表达的这个意思，用简单的句子就能说清了，建议这里别用插入语] Another reason is more obviously[形容词，obvious]to find in my former statement. Sometimes, certain audience will chatand make comments frequently during the movie, without regarding anyexistence of someone else.[这里与上一段那个例子完全是一个意思] To some extent, I will absolutely beaffected when I am deeply immersed in the movie in this case.
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Judging from what I analyzed above, I think it is a wiser alternativethat not to see a movie in cinema, but have enjoyment at home, whichwill bring us more fun.
上一段提过的“在电影院太吵、受干扰”，也算是inconvenience的一种，应该移到本段来。上一段就纯说在家的好处吧。

你既然决定分开两段写在家的好处与电影院的坏处，那两段用的论述和例子一定要分得清清楚楚，混了就不好了。楼主快要考试了，我的建议是，列提纲的时候不仅定下来每段的论点，并且想清楚哪些阐释哪些例子分别用在哪一段，然后写的时候坚决执行你定好的原则，免得跑偏。玩不转的长句不要冒险，宁可老实点。自己不能判断的时候，用短句，毅然用短句。写完了如果有时间再检查一下，每句的主干，主谓宾之类的。

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it is more flexible than enjoying incinema[what is more flexible?时间还是啥的？用it 强调句，后面不是应该对应that吗]. 这里不是强调句,it 在句子里面担任成分的指代在家看电影这个事情,更加有 flexible ;
而强调句中的IT 是没有指代和担任成分的,所以后面又要THAT 引出来...这2个Q要区别看啊.

LionKing, a name of a Disney film, is a classic carton worth to see,[注意句子主干，a name is a carton，不通]  a name of a Disney film是同位语做插入语啊 ,前后有,隔开的;句子的主干是 LionKing  is a classic carton worth to see.

玩不转的长句不要冒险，宁可老实点。(俺觉得俺没有写啥长句啊~~~~~都是很基本的句型变化了下;句子主干结构还是很健全的呵.还是QQ没读明白句子的结构所以觉得不好?)整个文章我觉得不能就是满是简单句

我觉得T和G的文章不同就在于是主要看应用能力,过分强调例子的逻辑性把层次拉的太高了;说实话 我觉得老美的脑子就是糨糊,根本转不过弯,不会象我们去把例子分析那么透彻

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it is more flexible than enjoying incinema那里，明显前句没有指代“在家看电影”的名词性短语。所以用it 不对。代词不是你assume指代啥就是啥的，前文必需有严格的对应。
lion king那个，你主干既然说lion king是个卡通，就不能在插入语里又说它是个名字。说啥好呢，一个句子不是你把每个语法无毒的位置都安上一个相应的词就行了。范读多一点吧，读多了就知道啥样对啥样错了。培养语感，别把语法用死了。
可能你写的句子和托福作文比不算长吧，但是量体裁衣才是最重要的。反正，多读多感觉吧，语言这东西，太较真了不好。
也别把美国人想得太低了，你看人家给的范文，确实比我们的水平高。OG多强调逻辑啊，何况我们文采本来就不行，再把逻辑说拧了，还有什么可看的。逻辑乱套，应用能力就更谈不上了。多读读范文吧，忠言逆耳。

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对了跟咱俩一组的哥们谁呀，怎么玩失踪。怎么你也没给他改，他也没给咱俩改。这不乱套了么

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是啊 他失踪了~~~~

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我觉得不会写的时候还是应该以不写错句子为主要出发点,在允许的情况下变换下句式,按照惯用语法来;至于语感,我觉得不是牛牛就别跟着这种语感走.否则错的更加离谱.
看看ETS的文章 比如TPO 不可能有让你的的顺口的句子,经常是主语完了扯一堆其他结构,谓语要转到第2行末尾才能找到,我觉得这个确实是他们写作的习惯;
我觉得在逻辑安排上过分较真了;因为就我考GMAT里面的逻辑来看,老美的逻辑思维方式和我们真的差别很大;换句话说,说什么都可以关键是可以饶回来 前提充分就可以(我觉得中国的人逻辑就是太强调充分必要了)