12.2号的独立作文，狠批

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Nowadays,with the rapidly economical development,the standard of human life improves.More and more people can afford to purchase movie tickets to see movies in the cinema with their friends.They may
think that it is more funny to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home.Well I donot agree to their opinion,I feel that seeing a movie at home is more funny than in the cinema.
First of all,in a homestay program,you can choose any movie you like to see,and there is no restriction for you feel at home.For example,you not only can eat something delicious regardless of anybody during your seeing the movie,but also can scream loudly when you see the splendid part of the movie,you know the two points mentioned aboved cannot be allowed in the cinema.What's more,with a family close by,the atmosphere is so familiar to you that you'll feel relaxed.
Second,many people always complain that the sanitation in cinema sometimes is so bad as well as the quality of the film.They usually regret parting with money to see the movie.Another drawback to seeing a movie in the cinema involes the possibility that many people there eat food and talk loudly,it is so noisy that exetremely affects your feelings,even sometimes you cannot listen clearly.
Even though there are still many people seeing a movie in a cinema,the cinema has received more praise and abuse and it may be accepted that cinema will still play an essential role in modern society.I feel that when you want to see a movie,you might as well choose to see it at home,you may find that it is more funny to see a movie at home than in a cinema,because it makes you feel at home emotionally and enjoy yourselves during the process.

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1# michael_beyond


Nowadays, with the rapidly economical development, the standard of human life improves. More and more people can afford to purchase movie tickets to see movies in the cinema with their friends. They may think that it is more funny to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home. Well I donot （do not）agree to their opinion, I feel that seeing a movie at home is more funny than in the cinema.
4 b0 e/ N! x, [9 _( C% O* mFirst of all, in a homestay program,(homestay不太适合用在这吧， homestay是特指家庭寄宿 就是你出去旅行住在当地居民家) you can choose any movie you like to see, and there is no restriction for you feel at home. For example, you not only can eat something delicious regardless of anybody during your seeing the movie, but also can scream loudly when you see the splendid part of the movie, you know the two points mentioned aboved（above） cannot be allowed in the cinema. (如果要这样写最好另起一句 其实用一个while these two cannot…就可以了 )What's more, with a family close by, the atmosphere is so familiar to you that you'll feel relaxed.(with a family close by是想表达什么意思？)
% v# o. ~) p2 c% J2 d  tSecond, many people always complain that the sanitation in cinema sometimes is so bad as well as the quality of the film. They usually regret parting with money (是paying吗~)to see the movie. Another drawback to seeing a movie in the cinema involes(involves)the possibility that many people there eat food and talk loudly, it is so noisy that exetremely(extremely) affects your feelings, even sometimes you cannot listen clearly.+ p2 [3 H9 E$ L; |6 D0 X
Even though there are still many people seeing a movie in a cinema, the cinema has received more praise and abuse (整句话语义有点乱 前后分句内容似乎并没有很明显的转折关系~)and it may be accepted that cinema will still play an essential role in modern society. I feel that when you want to see a movie, you might as well choose to see it at home, you may find that it is more funny to see a movie at home than in a cinema, because it makes you feel at home emotionally and enjoy yourselves during the process. （两个以you打头的分句间要断句了 否则这个句子结构就乱了 还有一个小建议~最后because引出的两个reason最好是前文总结 这样全文就更有力一些~）

呵呵~看的出有些地方比较容易把口语表达的方式带出~这时要多多注意句子结构啦~毕竟英文作文很重句子的型嘛~