【12.7】不同还是同

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Since success is one thing that we are all longing for, the fastest access to it is wondered by nearly every person. However, there is no obvious answer. Some people states that you should be the same as others while others argue that you should be different in order to being succeed. I would prefer the latter one for the following reasons.

First, one must gain better command in doing certain thing than ordinary people. One can become a famous pianist only if playing piano better than most of common people; otherwise, he or she would just be a piano amateur because people won’t buy tickets to listen to someone who is not playing better than themselves. Being distinguished is a key to obtain great fame and incomes. It is also can be supplied to product’s sale. A successful product usually has a feature of being different with others either in the appearance or functions or both. One who makes their product much better than others can occupy an advantaged place in competition.

In addition, doing something never done by others enables one reach the goal of success much more efficiently than doing something that has been done before. Contrary to that one should make great efforts in an old field for the competition is very severe, it is less complicated to obtain success in a brand-new field with rare rivalship. And in history, musical history, scientific history and so on, it is the first one who is written in the text book and remembered. Therefore, to doing something different, especially being a precursor in certain expertise will lead you to success.

As a conclusion, doing similar things with others will decelerate your steps to success. Due to the fact that nowadays, the public emphasizes on creation and specialty, doing some unique things or doing certain things better than others serves as a catalyze to promote your career to a successful summit.

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Since success is one thing that we are all longing for, the fastestaccess to it is wondered by nearly every person. However, there is noobvious answer. Some people states (state)that you should be the same asothers while others argue that you should be different in order tobeing succeed. I would prefer the latter one for the following reasons.
   First,one must gain better command (此处表达不清，换词？)in doing certain thing than ordinarypeople. One can become a famous pianist only if playing piano betterthan most of common people; otherwise, he or she would just be a pianoamateur because(so that) people won’t buy tickets to listen to someone who isnot playing better than themselves. Being distinguished is a key toobtain great fame and incomes（income）. It is also can be supplied(applied) to product’ssale. A successful product usually has a feature of being differentwith others either in the appearance or functions or both. One whomakes their product much better than others can occupy an advantagedplace(point) in competition.
   In addition, doing something never done by others enables one reach thegoal of success much more efficiently than doing something that hasbeen done before. Contrary to that one should make great efforts in anold field for(which) the competition is very severe
, it is less complicated toobtain success in a brand-new field with rare rivalship(句型不错，但读着比较绕。。。). And inhistory, musical history, scientific history and so on, it is the firstone who is written in the text book and remembered. Therefore, to doingsomething different, especially being a precursor in certain expertisewill lead you to success.
   As aconclusion, doing similar things with others will decelerate your stepsto success. Due to the fact that nowadays, the public emphasizes oncreation and specialty, doing some unique things or doing certainthings better than others serves as a catalyze to promote your careerto a successful summit.

文章内两点理由的论述还是比较充分的，但是有些句子表意不是很清晰。另外，再多一个论点是否更好？