园丁的综合写作

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In the lecture we can find that Checalier de Seingalt writed a good memoir which includes some famous people in history. Though he himself is not so famous , his meeting of famous people makes his memoir more valuable.

There are some debate on whether his memoir is reliable and accurate. One example is that from the reading part we can find that some do not believe Checalier was rich when he was in Swizerland .He just borrowed money from Swiss friends for party and gambling. However we can still hear from the listening that some people think that he was not poor but just lack of cash.




Another one is that Checalier once escaped from a prison by a piece of metal making a hole in the ceilling. Some people think that it is not true, and he was saved by his friends who bribed the jailers. But from the lecture we heard , we find that some detail evidence shows that even there were some prisoner who were with more powerful friends , did not escaped by buying the jailers. And there is some words leaved in the notes says
the room was repaired after he was freed. And that means he truly escaped from the prison , not by bribing the judge.

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In the lecture we can find that Checalier de Seingalt writed a good memoir which includes some famous people in history. Though he himself is not so famous , his meeting of famous people makes his memoir more valuable. （最好不要这样开头，可以先用一句话概括一下阅读材料的中心意思，再用一句话说听力材料中教授驳斥了上述观点云云。。。很程式化的）
There are some debate on whether his memoir is reliable and accurate. One example is that from the reading part we can find that some do not believe Checalier was rich when he was in Swizerland .He just borrowed money from Swiss friends for party and gambling. However we can still hear from the listening that some people think that he was not poor but just lack of cash.（论证的时候要注意紧扣听力材料，另外要具体化。这段的主要论点应该是说他并不缺钱，只是需要时间周转，因此他才会去向瑞士商人借钱）
第二个要点你遗漏了，是关于回忆录里他与伏尔泰谈话的部分，最好能结合听力重新做一下。
Another one is that Checalier once escaped from a prison by a piece of metal making a hole in the ceilling. Some people think that it is not true, and he was saved by his friends who bribed the jailers. But from the lecture we heard , we find that some detail evidence shows that even there were some prisoner who were with more powerful friends , did not escaped by buying the jailers. And there is some words leaved in the notes says the room was repaired after he was freed（escaped）. And that means he truly escaped from the prison , not by bribing the judge.(这一段也要注意论述的方式，最好不要出现we这样的字眼，紧扣听力材料，用材料中的观点)

综合写作主要是考察你对阅读材料的理解和听力材料要点的把握。其实难度不算大，相信你通过多次练习，应该能掌握解题思路，写出很好的文章。加油！！

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In the lecture we can find that Checalier de Seingalt writed a good memoir which includes some famous people in history. Though he himself is not so famous , his meeting of famous people makes his memoir more valuable.（这个信息貌似和住址没有太大关系吧？还记得咱们老师说的结构么？一句总结阅读内容，一句说明听力的观点。我觉得那个就很好用呀！） : d& }/ S% W4 r" u8 W2 Z  ]1 l

There are some debate （数不一致。这里建议用单数，直接说的a debate）on whether his memoir is reliable and accurate. One example is that from the reading part we can find that some do not believe Checalier was rich when he was in Swizerland .He just borrowed money from Swiss friends for party（缺少动词，可以说joining party） and gambling. However we can still hear from the listening that some people think that he was not poor but just lack of cash.用来论述听力内容的部分少了点。
整个就没有第二点了。:L 到时候没听出来可以猜一下嘛！我不会就总是乱猜，总比空着不写好。:D

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Another one is that Checalier once escaped from a prison by a piece of metal making a hole in the ceilling. Some people think （这个已经出现两次了，尽量换种说法，如，critics state ）that it is not true, and he was saved by his friends who bribed the jailers. But from the lecture we heard , we find（不知道为什么要用逗号，而且这里we最好换一下，一般lecture里面的信息我们都默认是professor在陈述，所以可以用些客观点的词，什么证据观点之类的都可以说是教授说的） that some detail evidence shows that even there were some prisoner who were with more powerful friends , did not escaped by buying the jailers. And there is some words （注意数的问题，虽然是小毛病，不太影响综合写作，但是足以看出你的独立写作也会犯这样的错误;P ）leaved （left）in the notes says
the room was repaired after he was freed(free). And that means he truly escaped from the prison , not by bribing the judge.

貌似今天我又带刀来砍人了;P ，血淋淋一片啊！
总体来说自已有把握的地方写得不错，而没有听明白的地方就基本上就放弃了。个人觉得TPO的综合写作资料很珍贵，每次练习应尽量认真完成。
语法小错误较多，这个也要注意啊！
今天话有点说重了点，看在同学的份上，园丁就不要和我计较了哈！:lol 明天到我们学校玩得愉快！

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2# shiwei83
谢谢，其实我倒是听懂了大概的意思，不过我听力对细节的把握不够，现在困惑的是我是否要都按照自己理解来写，还是说尽量靠近原文语言。

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3# happyfaith2008 谢谢了，我感觉已经比上次少了，哈哈哈哈，幸亏有人帮助批改，要不有些小细节我真就没注意过，平时可能太不小心了，所以做题的时候也注意不到