【红尘笑看沧桑】互改小组第一次作业 by luxixi09

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Issue 1

I always believe that people can get benefit from those agreeing with our ideas and those who hold opposite opinions. Acutally, it is difficlut to tell from whom we can learn more, as they both provide helpful thoughts no matter from the same or different angles.

There is no doubt that we can get something from those who share the same views with us. It is easy to understand that people are more opt for accepting the opinions which are similar with which of their owns. And there are examples of handshakes from various kinds of areas, among the people who have the same believes and stand behind each others. Based on the common believes, people can discuss the possible drawbacks of their thoughts and make the solutions, then win-win situations are generated. Though the progress, the orginal opinions can be improved.

However, disagreements can also generate innovations, not just causing stress, as the author said. Although there may be some conflicts in thoughts among the people who have converse views deeply rooted in their minds, the comflicts can be the sources of new ideas. The various kinds of discuss and debates, for example, are ususlly reagred effective ways to find the solutions of some tough problems. In fact, the disagreeement is another way to broaden our horizon, so that people can think about the issues roundly from different aspects.

In addition, if the opinions have some faults in the foundatmental knowledge, the reasonal disagreements can help us avoid going further in the wrong direction. There are numerous examples in the history. When the new and innovative opinion that gastritis are caused by bacteria was made public, few medical scholars accepted it was the truth, but this seemed odd idea was right and was accepted by the public gradually.

Furthermore, whether the stress coming from those who have different ideas from ours would necessarily inhibit learning? The answer is wrong. Even through the debates we still hold our own viewpoints, the disagreements from the others will surely urge us to find additional documents to approve our opinions, from which we can have a deeper understanding about the question on which we argue with the others.

Overall, we have to be faced with disagreements from others, no matter in the fields of science, politics, or bussiness. The key element lies in how we cope with the contradiction. Only with a modest attribute can we learn from the others.

Argument 1


Although the result of the plan sounds encouraging, we have to think twice before we take action to build a new store in Plainsville. And after careful examination, it is not difficult to find out that both the evidence and the reasoning are problematic.

To begin with, the reasoning and suggestion are based on the previous experience that our stores are more profitable if the nearby residents pay attention to healthy lives. Whereas there is no evidence to further support that the success of these stores are due to the lifestyles of the residents. We may wonder: Whether there are less competitors in these areas and the consumers have to buy our products as no more choices are available, or there are some other characteristics of our chain stores attract the consumers, such as lower price? If these are the cases, we certainly cannot contribute the success of the stroes in these areas to the residents. And we cannot assert that we will benefit much from the new store in Plainsville.

Secondly, let’s focus our eyes on the business circumstance in Plainsville. Our vice president assumes that the merchants report is reliable and the popularity of running shoes and exercise clothing is an evidence that health food and other health-related products will also be popular there. But there are two points we are suspicious with. The first one is whether the report is valid and accurate, if the report was not gived by authorized institution, maybe the report is not reliable. And the other one is we cannot make sure our products can ben accepted by the public even if the running shoes and exercise cloths are really well sold. It is perhaps that the residents just like exercise, and are not fond of other health-related products.

In addition, there is no close relationship between our business with that of the local health club. The success of weight training and aerobics classes can just indicate that more people prefer to taking exercise, but can not tell us that our products will also be popular.

To conclude, the suggestion of our vice president is very well-grounded, and we should not be hasty to bulid a new store in Plainsville just according to the current evidence.

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Issue 1

I always believe that people can get benefit from those agreeing with our ideas and those who hold opposite opinions. Acutally（actually），it is difficlut （difficult）to tell from whom we can learn more, as they both provide helpful thoughts no matter from the same or different angles.

There is no doubt that we can get something from those who share the same views with us. It is easy to understand that people are more opt(apt,应该是跟to do)for accepting the opinions which are similar with which(这个which指代不清,而且需要宾语作为修饰的对象，虽然你想表达的是指自己的view of point但这里没有说明，可以用ones 但还是读起来不太爽~~) of their owns. And there are examples of handshakes from various kinds of areas, （这里的example具体指？没有明白想表达的意思，是指不同领域的握手是这样一种体现吗，放在这里用and连起来不太合逻辑）among the people who have the same believes and stand behind each others. Based on the common believes, people can discuss the possible drawbacks of their thoughts and make the solutions, then win-win situations are generated. Though the progress, the orginal opinions can be improved. （需要解释一下为什么在共同认知的基础上，他们可以讨论出可能的缺陷
并进而改进达到双赢的局面。为什么在disagreement的情况下就不可以，作者没有回答，需要完善，最好用例子说明，或者对比得出这个观点）

However, disagreements can also generate innovations, not just causing stress, as the author said. Although there may be some conflicts in thoughts among the people （个人觉得thought是不能among people的还是直接把thought归属于他们得了，一家之言
非重点~~~）who have converse views deeply rooted in their minds, the comflicts（conflicts） can be the sources of new ideas. The various kinds of discuss（discussion） and debates, for example, are ususlly（usually） reagred （是 reflected吗？）effective ways to find the solutions of some tough problems. In fact, the disagreeement（disagreement） is another way to broaden our horizon, so that people can think about the issues roundly from different aspects.（还是需要说明为什么disagreement可以带来新的idea而agreement不可以，需要例子或者具体的解释而不是泛泛谈~~）

In addition, if （有一点中式英语的说法，要表达存在时要习惯用there be句型~~）the opinions have some faults in the foundatmental（fundmental） knowledge, the reasonal（这个词似乎不存在
用rational吧） disagreements can help us avoid going further in the wrong direction. There are numerous examples in the history. When the new and innovative opinion that gastritis are caused by bacteria was made public（可以用in public
public无adv的词性）, few medical scholars accepted it was the truth（要么加that要么去掉it was true）, but this seemed（apparent表面上
seemed无此表达） odd idea was right and was accepted by the public gradually. （这个例子不对啊
你的观点是不同的意见能阻止人刚愎自用，在错误的路上固执起见，但是例子是说明在disagreement面前要坚持真理）

Furthermore, whether the stress coming from those who have different ideas from ours would necessarily inhibit learning? The answer is wrong. Even through（though） the debates we still hold our own viewpoints, the disagreements from the others will surely urge us to find additional documents to approve our opinions, from which we can have a deeper understanding about the question on which we argue with the others.（老问题~~后面的which修饰的对象缺失）
Overall, we have to be faced with disagreements from others, no matter in the fields of science, politics, or bussiness.（business） The key element lies in how we cope with the contradiction. Only with a modest attribute can we learn from the others.

有一个问题：最后到底是agreement学的多呢还是disagreement学的多呢？还是两个学的都差不多关键是心态呢
没有说明啊~~~如果重点是心态的话前面的文章必须都讨论下disagree和agree的优缺点，然后分析下错误的心态是怎样不好，正确的心态是怎样学到好的
最后才能总结出这个观点，不然modest attribute出来的很突兀~~~）

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红色表示语法和拼写~~~鲁西西你打字不要紧张哦~~~好多拼写错误很可惜的~~
绿色是我对你的逻辑上的一些问题~~~

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Argument 1


Although the result of the plan sounds encouraging, we have to think twice before we take action to build a new store in Plainsville. And after careful examination, it is not difficult to find out that both the evidence and the reasoning are problematic.

To begin with, the reasoning and suggestion are based on the previous experience that our stores are more profitable if the nearby residents pay attention to healthy lives. Whereas there is no evidence to further support that the success of these stores are due to the lifestyles of the residents. We may wonder: Whether there are less competitors in these areas and the consumers have to buy our products as no more choices are available, or there are some other characteristics of our chain stores attract the consumers, such as lower price? If these are the cases, we certainly cannot contribute the success of the stroes（store) in these areas to the residents. And we cannot assert that we will benefit much from the new store in Plainsville.
(除了没有明显的证据显示是由于居民关注健康生活导致高收益这个攻击点以外，也可以考虑下这样过渡，就算是因为居民关注健康生活导致高收益成立，那么也没有证据说明Plainsville的居民是这样的一群人，如果是出于以下理由（就是下面买鞋子衣服俱乐部……）认定居民是爱健康的的话，那么这些理由均不成立，然后继续写，这样就在逻辑上把当地情况和这个假设联系在一起而不显得孤立了。~~）
Secondly, let’s focus our eyes on the business circumstance in Plainsville. Our vice president assumes that the merchants report is reliable and the popularity of running shoes and exercise clothing is an evidence that health food and other health-related products will also be popular there. But there are two points we are suspicious with. The first one is whether the report is valid and accurate, if the report was not gived(gave) by authorized institution, maybe the report is not reliable. （这里这个理由有点芝麻的感觉，不是很有利，毕竟每次质疑别人的充分性尤其用authorized institution这个理由会让人觉得你迷信权威~~一家之言）And the other one is we cannot make sure our products can (be)ben accepted by the public even if the running shoes and exercise cloths are really well sold. It is perhaps that the residents just like exercise, and are not fond of other health-related products.（你可以质疑一下，衣服和鞋子就一定和健康啦运动有关吗，可能是因为衣服鞋子比较流行比较帅，就像日常生活中我们喜欢穿nike啦等等并不一定表示你要运动~~）

In addition, there is no close relationship between our business(businesses) with that of the local health club. The success of weight training and aerobics classes can just indicate that more people prefer to taking exercise, but can not tell us that our products will also be popular.（未解释原因，为什么这么说我们的产品不会popular，无充分理由说明，这条不好，至少也提出一种其他情况或例子来证明下也许产品会不popular）

To conclude, the suggestion of our vice president is very well-grounded, and we should not be hasty to bulid a new store in Plainsville just according to the current evidence.（这个还没结束啊，怎么能这么早就结论了呢  小孩的问题呢？还有健身俱乐部推出的那个也许现在很热门但并保证以后产品还是很热门等等，还有很多方面可以说哦）