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发表于 2010-2-2 21:07:52 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
2.2号的综合写作
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The reading passage raises the issue that if employee chose a four-day workweek, the companies with has more benefit and they can save a lot of money, since they just paid 80 percent salary of five-day workweek to four-day workweek employee. However, this statement is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides that companies will spend more money if let employee to just work four day a week. Because of companies have to train new employee and also have to spend money on buying computers. More workers mean more space, so companies will rent more offices.

Though it was said in the reading passage that if companies decide to let employee work in four day then means companies need more workers, and then also mean the number of unemployed will decrease. But the lecture disagrees with this stand point, which demonstrated in the reading passage, the professor point out that in order to save money the companies will not hire more workers and they will just let four-day workers to do the same amount of work as five-day workers. So there are no addition positions to unemployed.


Finally, the reading passage asserts that four-day worker will have more time with their family, and also the change will increase their standard of lives. Nevertheless, the professor illustrate that the quality of lives will not increase but decrease. Companies like five-day worker instead of four-day worker, since five-day worker will produce more production, more production means more profits companies can have. They want the worker can work at an entire week. So maybe the companies will fire the workers who like four-day workweek.
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发表于 2010-2-3 23:01:28 |只看该作者
The reading passage raises the issue that (我随便划的,没问题,你的模板吧)if employee chose(s  单复数要注意) a four-day workweek, the companies with(would) has(have) more benefit(s) and they can save a lot of money, since they just paid 80 percent salary of five-day workweek to four-day workweek employee. However, this statement is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides that companies will spend more money if let employee to(不要TO) just work four day a week. Because of companies have to train new employee and also have to spend money on buying computers. More workers mean more space(不要照抄听力里面的), so companies will rent more offices.

it was said in the reading passage that if companies decide to let employee work in four day then means companies need more workers, and then also mean the number of unemployed will decrease. But the lecture disagrees with this stand point, which demonstrated in the reading passage, the professor point out that in order to save money the companies will not hire more workers and they will just let four-day workers to do the same amount of work as five-day workers. So there are no addition positions to unemployed.

Finally, the reading passage asserts that four-day worker will have more time with their family, and also the change will increase their standard of lives. Nevertheless, the professor illustrate that the quality of lives will not increase but decrease. Companies like five-day worker instead of four-day worker, since five-day worker will produce more production, more production means more profits companies can have. They want the worker can work at an entire week(这个是病句, 有2个谓语,WANT和CAN,一个句子里面只能有一个谓语,你可以把它变从句). So maybe the companies will fire the workers who like four-day workweek.

SUM UP
不要基本完全照搬听力材料里的,要会ORGANIZE THE IDEAS。你完全是按那个教授说的顺序(我只的是细节的顺序)来说
还有一些语法错误。
其他OK~!
不行 我以后评论要用英文啦~~!!加油~~!!

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发表于 2010-2-4 12:39:39 |只看该作者
2.2号的综合写作
The reading passage raises the issue that if employee chose a four-day workweek, the companies with(will) has more benefit and they can save a lot of money, since they just paid 80 percent salary of five-day workweek to four-day workweek employee.(跟我犯一个错误了,把阅读叙述过多) However, this statement is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides that companies will spend more money if let employee to just work four day a week. Because of(of去掉) companies have to train new employee(复数) and also have to spend money on buying computers. More workers mean more space, so companies will rent more offices.(少了个 medical benifits,这个很细,比我好多了)

Though it was said in the reading passage that if companies decide to let employee work in four day then means(that)companies need more workers, and then also mean (that)the number of unemployed will decrease. But the lecture disagrees with this stand point, which demonstrated in the reading passage, the professor point out that in order to save money the companies will not hire more workers and they will just let four-day workers to do the same amount of work as five-day workers. So there are no addition positions to unemployed.

Finally, the reading passage asserts that four-day worker will have more time with their family, and also the change will increase their standard of lives. Nevertheless, the professor illustrate that the quality of lives will not increase but decrease. Companies like five-day worker instead of four-day worker, since five-day worker will produce more production, more production means more profits companies can have. They want the worker can work at an entire week. So maybe the companies will fire the workers who like four-day workweek. (没有说到 失去晋升机会和 可能丢掉工作,主要是把听到的说细致,大概说说 阅读就行了)

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       说的写的听好的 继续努力!!!

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发表于 2010-2-4 23:11:23 |只看该作者
TPO2 2.4号!~   
    The reading passage argues that there are many merit that many people in a group to accomplish the tough project. However in the listening passage, the professor demonstrates the opposite aspect. In the following issue, I will tell you the reasons professor given.

    The reading passage raises the issue that many member means have various kinds of knowledge and numbers of different skill, which will make a great effort on finishing project. However, this statement is strongly called in question by the lecture, the professor argues that many members in a team will means there are many different knowledge. When they work together, they will find they will have opposite idea to the same questions. And then they find they can not find a perfect way to deal with their project.

    Though it was said in the reading passage that work will separate into several parts, and the worker just take the responsible of their own part. By this way, they can finish their job quickly. The professor that, members in the group spend a lot of time to reach the same point and also if somebody is sad ,then he or she will influence the other members in the group, more importantly, without further discussion, they cannot communicate well. Eventually they cannot finish their work on time

    Finally, the reading passage asserts those members who work well can receive others compliments and he or she will feel so pride of these compliments. And people can have more opportunities to show their merit in front people. Nevertheless, the professor claim that members in the group will seem to fail take into account the others people. They will just pay attentions to themselves. Admittly, if the project is fail they will not regrets, since all of the group member should take this responsibilities.

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The reading passage argues that there are many merit(s) that many people in a group to accomplish the tough project. However in the listening passage, the professor demonstrates the opposite aspect(s). In the following issue, I will tell you the reasons professor given.

    The reading passage raises the issue that many member means have various kinds of knowledge and numbers of different skill, which will make a great effort on finishing project. However, this statement is strongly called in(cut it ) question(ed) by the lecture, the professor argues that many members in a team will means there are many different knowledge. When they work together, they will find they will have opposite idea to the same questions. And then they find they can not find a perfect way to deal with their project.

    Though it was said in the reading passage that work will separate into several parts, and the worker just take the responsible of their own part. By this way, they can finish their job quickly. The professor that, members in the group spend a lot of time to reach the same point and also if somebody is sad ,then he or she will influence the other members in the group, more importantly, without further discussion, they cannot communicate well. Eventually they cannot finish their work on time
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& a  Y- ]( @) V1 j3 ?    Finally, the reading passage asserts those members who work well can receive others compliments and he or she will feel so pride of these compliments. And people can have more opportunities to show their merit(s) in front people. Nevertheless, the professor claim(s) that members in the group will seem to fail take into account the others people. They will just pay attentions to themselves. Admittly, if the project is fail they will not regrets, since all of the group member should take this responsibilities.

GOOD~~~!
You really made a goo job in this part~~~I should learn from you~~~!!!
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