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The professor makes the point that Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is a work by Rembrandt. However, the writing material demonstrates a different idea that the painting can not attributed to Rembrandt because there are some problems with the painting.

First, the writer argues that the woman’s coat has a luxurious fur collar that no servant could afford. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the idea by saying that the fur color is not the part of the original painting. The fur color is painted over the top of the original painting about one hundred year after painting is made. The reason is someone wants to increase the value of the painting.

Another important point shows in the listening material is that the original painting fit in the light and shadow when the fur color is removed. The woman wears a simple color of light colored collar, so the face does not appear partially in shadow. Nevertheless, the reading presents that the face should appear partially in shadow.

Finally, the professor states that the wood panels are also enlarged with extra wood pieces when the fur color is edited. The reason is someone wants to make the painting grander and more valuable. The idea challenges the standpoint made by the writer who says that no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses panel glued together.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of Rembrandt’s painting—Portrait of an Elderly Woman that the reading views in a opposing angle.

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The professor makes the point that Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is a work by Rembrandt. However, the writing material demonstrates a different idea that the painting can not attributedattribute to Rembrandt because there are some problems with the painting.

First, the writer argues that the woman’s coat has a luxurious fur collar that no servant could afford. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the idea by saying that the fur color(collar,我当时听时是把这里听成了color,如果根据reading的话,应该是collar) is not the part of the original painting. The fur color is painted over the top of the original painting about one hundred yearyears after the painting(单数名词应该是不能单独出现的) is made. The reason is someone wants to increase the value of the painting.

Another important point shows in the listening material is that the original painting fit in the light and shadow when the fur colorcollar is removed. The woman wears a simple color of light colored collar, so the face does not appear partially in shadow. Nevertheless, the reading presents that the face should appear partially in shadow.( ^6 b$ a& n; q% S% |: J
Finally, the professor states that the wood panels are also enlarged with extra wood pieces when the fur color
collar is edited. The reason is someone wants to make the painting grander and more valuable. The idea challenges the standpoint made by the writer who says that no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses panel glued together.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of Rembrandt’s painting—Portrait of an Elderly Woman that the reading views in a opposing angle.6 X. i: [/ V! |  F) @! Z

1、我听了几遍文章,然后根据阅读文章觉得应该是fur collar, 两个发音只有细微差别,你再听听看
color ['kʌlə]
collar ['k
ɔlə]
2、只改了一些小语法错误,呵呵,文章结构很清晰,主题和细节也很清楚,向楼主学习啊。

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2.10 TPO4

The professor makes the point that dinosaurs were poikilotherm, and they cannot maintain an internal temperature. However, the writing material demonstrates that there is a lot of evidence that dinosaurs were endotherms.

First, the writer argues that dinosaur fossils have been discovered in polar regions, and only endotherms can live in such a cold place. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the reading by saying that polar regions when dinosaurs lived was much wormer than today. And it doesn’t prove that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Another important point shows in the reading is that the legs of dinosaurs are underneath the body. It is the same as the legs of all modern endotherms. Nevertheless, the listening presents the idea that there is another explanation for legs place underneath the body. This body structure can support more weight, so dinosaurs can grow a very large size.

Finally, the professor states that the dinosaur's bones not only include structures—Haversian canals, but also have growth rings. The growth ring indicates that the periods of time when dinosaurs were rapid growing. The growth ring is evidence that dinosaurs stop growing or grow more slowly during cool period. But endotherms grow rapidly even when the environment is very cold.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of whether dinosaurs were endotherms that the reading views in different angle.



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The professor makes the point that dinosaurs were poikilotherm(这词都会,你学生物的啊), and they cannot maintain an internal temperature. However, the writing material demonstrates that there is a lot of evidence that dinosaurs were endotherms.(你行文顺序跟正常思路相反呢,咋先描述听力论点呢,后面又变成R-L,整体思路要一直才行)

First, the writer argues that dinosaur fossils have been discovered in polar regions, and only endotherms can live in such a cold place. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the reading by saying that polar regions when dinosaurs lived was much wormer than today. (需要扩展,一大段听力不肯只要求你写一段话吧。另外一点是居住在极地的恐龙在冰期可能迁徙或冬眠以躲避低温)And it doesn’t prove that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Another important point shows in the reading is that the legs of dinosaurs are underneath the body. It is the same as the legs of all modern endotherms. Nevertheless, the listening presents the idea that there is another explanation for legs place underneath the body. This body structure can support more weight, so dinosaurs can grow a very large size.(两个推断到底哪个更站得住脚?你只是简单阐述没有做出比较。)

Finally, the professor states that the dinosaur's bones not only include structures—Haversian canals, but also have growth rings. The growth ring indicates that the periods of time when dinosaurs were rapid growing. The growth ring is evidence that dinosaurs stop growing or grow more slowly during cool period. But endotherms grow rapidly even when the environment is very cold.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of whether dinosaurs were endotherms that the reading views in different angle.
9.12 上帝保佑~~

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本帖最后由 ganbe 于 2010-2-12 19:33 编辑

TPO5

The professor makes the point that all of the three theories about the "great houses" are wrong. However, the writing material demonstrates a different idea that the three theories about the Chaco structures are competing theories.

First, the writer argues that Chaco structures can house hundreds of people as purely residences. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the reading material by saying that "great houses" are not residential, especially, when we see them from the inside. If more than one hundred people live there, the Chaco houses need many fire places where each family do daily cooking. In face, even in the largest houses, the fire places can only for ten families.

Another important point shows in the listening is that the Chaco structures are not used to store food supplies. One good example is archaeologists have not uncovered maize containers. Nevertheless, the writing presents that grain maize is store in the Chaco structures as a long-lasting supply of food.

Finally, the professor states that the Chaco houses are not used as ceremonial centers. For example, Pueblo Alto contains a lot of other material besides broke pots. So many building materials, such as sand and stone, suggest that the mound is only the trash heap of constructions. The idea challenges the standpoint that made by the writer who says that the Pueblo Alto is an excellent evidence to prove the Chaco houses are used as ceremonial centers.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of "great houses" that reading views in opposing angle.

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本帖最后由 xuln0709 于 2010-2-15 00:31 编辑

The professor makes the point that all of the three theories about the "great houses" are wrong. However, the writing material demonstrates a different idea that the three theories about the Chaco structures are competing theories.

First, the writer argues that Chaco structures can house(house作动词,恩,用的好啊) hundreds of people as purely residences. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the reading material by saying that "great houses" are not residential, especially, when we see them from the inside. If more than one hundred people live there, the Chaco houses need many fire places where each family do daily cooking. In face(fact), even in the largest houses, the fire places can provide cooking  for only ten families.

Another important point shows(showed) in the listening is that the Chaco structures are not used to store food supplies. One good example is archaeologists have not uncovered maize containers. Nevertheless, the writing presents that grain maize is store(stored) in the Chaco structures as a long-lasting supply of food.

Finally, the professor states that the Chaco houses are not used as ceremonial centers. For example, Pueblo Alto(这个细节都听出来了!) contains a lot of other material besides broke(broken) pots. So many building materials, such as sand and stone, suggest that the mound is only the trash heap of constructions. The idea challenges the standpoint that made by the writer who says that the Pueblo Alto is an excellent evidence to prove the Chaco houses are used as ceremonial centers.

In general, the professor discusses the issue of "great houses" that reading views in opposing angle.
总的来说,MM的综合写作真的很不错,阅读句子的改写,文章的结构,语言都把握的很好,MM听力也很不错啊,很多细节都听出来了,如果是我,只能把听力中的细节听个大概了。。。
能力有限,改不了很多,只是指出了一些语法错误,不好意思哈~~~

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The professor makes the point that all of the three theories about the "great houses" are wrong. However, the writing material demonstrates a different idea that the three theories about the Chaco structures are competing(个人认为这个词不太恰当,而且表达有些啰嗦,要是我,会这么表达,the writing material demonstrates an opposite idea which contains three different theories. ) theories.
First, the writer argues that Chaco structures can house hundreds of people as purely residences. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the reading material by saying that "great houses" are not residential, especially, when we see them from the inside. If more than one hundred people live there, the Chaco houses need many fire places where each family(all families could) do daily cooking. In face (fact), even in the largest houses, the fire places can only (最好再加个support) for ten families(细节,学习了).
Another important point shows in the listening is that the Chaco structures are not used to store food supplies. One good example is (that)archaeologists have not uncovered maize containers. Nevertheless, the writing presents that grain maize is store in the Chaco structures as a long-lasting supply of food.

Finally, the professor states that the Chaco houses are not used as ceremonial centers. For example, Pueblo Alto contains a lot of other materials besides broke pots. So many building materials, such as sand and stone (细节,学习了), suggest that the mound is only the trash heap of constructions. The idea challenges the standpoint that made by the writer who says that the Pueblo Alto is an excellent evidence to prove the Chaco houses are used as ceremonial centers.
In general, the professor discusses the issue of "great houses" that reading views in opposing angle.
总体来说,楼主写得很不错,阅读换词很好~听力中每个细节几乎没有遗漏下的。只是有几个习惯性的语法错误需要注意一下~
既然选择了这条路,就必须走完~快乐的走完~

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