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mangohahaUID: 2758178

2.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves.


On the pathway of people’s live, which decisions would be more frequent to follow, the decisions from themselve or from others? For me, the answer is the former. In modern society, people have to face various choices, some persons would like to ask for decisions from friends, family and so forth.However, faced with numerous emergencies people have to make decision alone. Withal, the person who most understand the person must be himself.


Addmittedly, there is no denying that living in this era, people have to face a increasing number of questions and events. Sometimes, we are unable to make these decision just by ourselve. In this condition,to make the right choice, advices from friends and families would be necessary. There is an example about people’s marriage. Almost everyone would face the problem when they are decide to get marry with his or her lover. In particular, we cannot ignore advices form their parenets, reasoning that they have experience and really care about them. Generally, given that some decisions can determine people’s happiness and live, decisions from others who have experience is necessary.


However, even I can concede that others’ advice is useful in some special conditions, is it necessary for people always ask for decisions from others? Personall, the answer is unnecessary. In another word, in that people must be the people who understand the condition, thought and feeling of himself, they have ablility of making the apt decision in the right time. Just like the foregoing example, considering the marriage, people should

to the advice from parents. Yet, the prerequisite is that they fall in love with each other. This is to say, others’advices you would listen to; others’ helps you can neglect. Yet, you should following your own feeling and have responsibility for your decision. In short, making decision by yourself is also a way of being responsible for yourself. Also you should listen to the voice from your own heart.

lastly, people have to acknowledge that there is a great deal of conditions, they have to make decision alone, because others cannot hlpe you. A series of examples will make this point clear. Fristly people cannot obtain any advices during a test, just like the enterance, and they have to finish it by theimselve. Secondly there may well be numerous emergencies. So that, people have no time to
ask for others’help. Lastly it is impossible that everyone would like to help and make decisions for you. Generaly, when this possible and realistic conditions are taken into account. It is unfair to say people let others make decision rather than themselves.

Lastly, I agree with that decisions made my others, especially family who really care about you, is necessary and useful. Nevertheless, people cannot always depend on others to make decision. Particularly, some essential and vital decisions should come from ourselve.

lixinjiayouUID: 2754331

On the pathway of people’s live, which decisions would be more frequent to follow（follow decisions?改成make的话前后比较搭调）, the decisions from themselve（themselves） or from others? For me, the answer is the former. In modern society, people have to face various choices, some persons would like to ask for decisions from friends, family and so forth.However,（加个when） faced with numerous emergencies people have to make decision alone. Withal（besides）, the person who most（best） understand the person must be himself. + H) `% X# v+ m4 E; U" Y- W3 U9 b& g
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Addmittedly（admittedly）, there is no denying that living in this era, people have to face a（an） increasing number of questions and events. Sometimes, we are unable to make these decision（decisions） just by ourselve（ourselves）. In this condition,to make the right choice, advices from friends and families would be necessary. There is an example about people’s marriage. Almost everyone would face the problem when they are（去掉） decide to get marry（married） with his or her lover. In particular, we cannot ignore advices form their parenets（parents）, reasoning that they have experience and really care about them. Generally, given that some decisions can determine people’s happiness and live, decisions from others who have experience is necessary.( L9 @9 b6 I: F% B& {; R" A8 ~
However, even I can concede that others’ advice is useful in some special conditions, is it necessary for people always ask for decisions from others? Personall（personally）, the answer is unnecessary（改成no比较好吧）. In another word, in that people must be the people who（加个best） understand the condition（condition是不是囊括了后面的thought and feeling呢^_^）, thought and feeling of himself, they have （加the）ablility of making the apt decision in the right time. Just like the foregoing example, considering the marriage, people should ( take） the advice from parents. Yet, the prerequisite is that they fall （应该换成一个表示状态的they are in love with each other）in love with each other. This is to say, others’advices you would listen to; others’ helps（help） you can neglect. Yet, you should following your own feeling and have responsibility for your decision. In short, making decision by yourself is also a way of being responsible for yourself. Also you should listen to the voice from your own heart.
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lastly, people have to acknowledge that there is a great deal of conditions, they have to make decision alone, because others cannot hlpe（help） you. A series of examples will make this point clear. Fristly people cannot obtain any advices during a test, just like the enterance, and they have to finish it by theimselve（themselves）. Secondly there may well be numerous emergencies. So that, people have no time to ask for others’help. Lastly it is impossible that everyone would like to help and make decisions for you. Generaly（generally）, when this possible and realistic conditions are taken into account. It is unfair to say people let others make decision rather than themselves. # [$ M( Q; V2 }
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Lastly, I agree with（去掉） that decisions made my others, especially family who really care about you, is necessary and useful. Nevertheless, people cannot always depend on others to make decision. Particularly, some essential and vital（是不是重复，两个形容词） decisions should come from ourselve.  

我觉得文章一会儿说别人的建议重要一会儿说自己决定，虽然意思是虽然别人的建议重要但是还是要自己做决定，但是在篇幅的分配上详略搭配上有点不合适。。。

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

2.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves.

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On the pathway of people’s live(life), which decisions would be more frequent to follow, the decisions from themselve or from others? For me, the answer is the former. In modern society, people have to face various choices, some persons would like to ask for decisions from friends, family and so forth.However, faced with numerous emergencies people have to make decision alone. Withal(这词有点太稀奇了吧）, the person who most understand the person must be himself. , o7 K* j8 q( ]

Addmittedly, there is no denying that living in this era, people have to face a increasing number of questions and events. Sometimes, we are unable to make these decision just by ourselve. In this condition,to make the right choice, advices from friends and families would be necessary. There is an example about people’s marriage. Almost everyone would face the problem when they are decide to get marry（get married) with his or her lover. In particular, we cannot ignore advices form their parenets, reasoning(真少见) that they have experience and really care about them. Generally, given that some decisions can determine people’s happiness and live, decisions from others who have experience is necessary.

However, even though I can concede that others’ advice is useful in some special conditions, is it necessary for people always to ask for decisions from others? Personall, the answer is unnecessary. In another word( in other words), in that(最好放在两个分句之间吧，如果你想表示因为的意思的话) people must be the people who understand the condition, thought and feeling of himself, they have ablility of making the apt decision in the right time.（这句话的结构太复杂了吧) Just like the foregoing example, considering the marriage, people should the advice from parents. Yet, the prerequisite is that they fall in love with each other. This is to say, others’advices you would listen to; others’ helps you can neglect.(这么写有什么特殊的含义么？为啥不明了一些，直接even though you may listen to others' advices, you can neglect others'help) Yet, you should following your own feeling and have responsibility for your decision. In short, making decision by yourself is also a way of being responsible for yourself and you should listen to the voice from your own heart. ! e! B8 z1 E: `  g0 q

lastly, people have to acknowledge that there is a great deal of conditions, they have to make decision alone(in which they have to make decisions alone), because others cannot hlpe you. A series of examples will make this point clear. Fristly people cannot obtain any advices during a test, just like the enterance(这是啥啊?), and they have to finish it by theimselve. Secondly there may well be numerous emergencies. So that,(so that可以直接当做一个连词) people have no time to4 P, ^1 T7 R! k, u1 a) a% V
ask for others’help. Lastly it is impossible that everyone would like to help and make decisions for you. Generaly, when this(these) possible and realistic conditions are taken into account.(注意标点) It is unfair to say people let others make decision rather than themselves.

Lastly, I agree with that decisions made my others, especially family who really care about you, is necessary and useful. Nevertheless, people cannot always depend on others to make decision. Particularly, some essential and vital decisions should come from ourselve.
总的来说我感觉你说的很清晰，尤其第二三段，比较好。后面稍微感觉有点凌乱。
感觉很多拼写错误啊，难道不习惯用电脑打字。另外，标点和句子不完整也时有发生，要注意。
另外，感觉你文章好长啊，是不是可以考虑短一点，这样可以留出一些时间检查一下。

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2# lixinjiayou
嗯。。。第一段后两连段对比 太突兀了呵呵 下次注意。。。谢谢批改

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3# Uranus1989
哎。。。 聊天习惯。。。经常打错。。。以后我会注意的 也辛苦你了 谢谢批改