2.24-slimh作文

slimhUID: 2438517

24 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.


With the rapid development of the public transportation, it becomes much easier than several decades before. It is only needed a few hours fight to across the oceans to get to another continent. There is no wonder when you see a person with different skin color or eye color from yourself. Obviously, people move to another country or to another city is common to be seen nowadays. However, should people move to another city or country? As far as I am concerned, that people should live in the city or country is totally.


It is widely acknowledged that in most countries, a student has to learn second or third languages at school .Because to learn other language is one of the must-do-course in that country. For example, my American friends said, most of them chose Spanish or French as their second language at high school, my German friends said, most of them chose English. My Korean friends said they chose English as their second language and Chinese as their third language to learn at high school. Why such countries built such education systems to let the kids to learn other languages? I think the answer is obvious that the increasing number of the international trade and culture exchange, people need to learn other languages in case of visiting foreign countries. In other words, it is express that people no more stay at the city or the country all life. Like my neighbor from Colombia, he is 37 years old. he has already visited the Latin American countries like Argentina, Chile, Mexico, Venezuela, and so forth. He said those experiences broaden his knowledge, enlightened his life. Now he is learning Chinese with the consistence of doing businesses with Chinese merchants. He said he wanted to live in a different life unlike his other friends, and all these experiences from foreign countries fulfilled his life with magnificent memories. All in all, I am firmly convinced that as long as people want to, they don’t need to live in their city or country forever.

From what I have mentioned above, I want to hold the different opinion that as long as the one made decision already could do whatever he or she wants to. Which means, people can move to other city or country to live the life which they want to live in.\

淡笑KathyUID: 2708253

With the rapid development of the public transportation, it becomes much easier than several decades before. It is only needed（语法It only need） a few hours fight（？） to across the oceans to get to another continent. There is no wonder when you see a person with different skin color or eye color from yourself. Obviously, people move to another country or to another city is common to be seen nowadays. However, should people move to another city or country? As far as I am concerned, that people should live in the city or country is totally.（表意上好像有点问题吖~可能强调一下staying in the city or country rather than move to another place会更清晰）
It is widely acknowledged that in most countries, a student has to learn second or third languages at school .Because to learn other language is one of the must-do-course in that country. （论点如果能清晰点就好了，因为读到这里可能会有点纳闷的感觉~）For example, my American friends said, most of them chose Spanish or French as their second language at high school, my German friends said, most of them chose English. My Korean friends said they chose English as their second language and Chinese as their third language to learn at high school. Why such countries built such education systems to let the kids to learn other languages? I think the answer is obvious that the increasing number of the international trade and culture exchange, people need to learn other languages in case of visiting foreign countries. In other words, it is express that people no more stay at the city or the country all life. Like my neighbor from Colombia, he is 37 years old. he has already visited the Latin American countries like Argentina, Chile, Mexico, Venezuela, and so forth. He said those experiences broaden his knowledge, enlightened his life. Now he is learning Chinese with the consistence of doing businesses with Chinese merchants. He said he wanted to live in a different life unlike his other friends, and all these experiences from foreign countries fulfilled his life with magnificent memories. All in all, I am firmly convinced that as long as people want to, they don’t need to live in their city or country forever.; u（） R# B( Q9 Y+ d6 u5 ?, R
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From what I have mentioned above, I want to hold the different opinion that as long as the one made decision already could do whatever he or she wants to. Which means, people can move to other city or country to live the life which they want to live in.、
整体来说，从语言，词汇等方面都是不错的。而且能在规定时间内完成，很不错了，我就是超时了。如果中间能加多一两段的论点就好了。另外，鄙人之见，论点着重于people should or should not move， 然而你的文章比较偏重于论述“现在社会的条件允许大家MOVE”，似乎有一点点偏差~~呵呵 只是一家之言，说的不对的地方，请见谅~继续加油( ⊙ o ⊙ )啊！

slimhUID: 2438517

咦？酱紫嘛？ 我是agree dis agree来完成的。。你这么一说我也有点混乱啦。。到低该着重写哪个呀？完了这个可要作对呀。。不然真到了考试的时候会跑题。。。

淡笑KathyUID: 2708253

3# slimh
个人感觉是这样吧~~研究研究 加油！