big fish] Argument238 by Greeky

greekyUID: 2605662

238The following appeared in a memorandum from the president of Mira Vista College to the college's board of trustees.

"At nearby , Green Mountain Collegewhich has more business courses and more job counselors than does  Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year's graduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only 70 percent of the seniors who informed the placement office that they would be seeking employment had found full-time jobs within three months after graduation, and only half of these graduates were employed in their major field of study. To help Mira Vista's graduates find employment, we must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors to help students with their resumés and interviewing skills."

  Merely based on groundless evidence and dubious consumption,the arguer draws a conclusion that  Mira Vista College(MV)must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire more counselors to help students be more attain more interviewing skills. To support the conclusion,he points out that the business courses and more job counselors in Green Mountain College(GM) caused the popularity of its students in job market. Additionally,he indicates that the percent of seniors in  who got job offers was much lower than MV`s. At fist glance,the assertion seems somewhat cogent,nonetheless,a further reflection reveals that it omits so substantial concerns that should be addressed to the argument. Thus,from my point of view,the argument suffers from three logical flaws.

Firstly,the arguer fails to establish a correct causal relationship between the fact that there are more business courses as well as job counselors in GM and the fact  that the percent of seniors who already got job in GM is much higher than MV`s. There is no cogent evidence which could indicate that no factors other than the large amount of business courses and job counselors make the students in GM popular. It is entirely possible that the students` popularity of GM is a response to their ability and the high reputation of GM. Or perhaps,there are so few colleges that the GM` students could hardly find competition from local colleges. It is unacceptable unless there is compelling evidence to support the arguer`s recommendation.

Additionally,the argurer`s claim resets on what might be a poor analogy between GM and MV. The analogy falsely depends on the analogy that the economic condition and human resource demand in both GM and MV are similar. However it is possible that the conditions faced with MV are totally different from GM. For example, the economic condition in MV`s region is so unfavorable that myriad of companied have to reduce the occupations.or perhaps the students in MV are apt to finding jobs with higher salary,which needs a longer time for the graduates to find a ideal occupation.In short, with accounting for possible difference between MV and GM,the arguer cannot justifiably prove the proposed method will indeed help MV.

Finally,even though the MV indeed need to make so change to increase the number of graduates who have got a job, giving more advice about the interview and arrange more business courses might not be advisable. Maybe lacking in professional knowledge is the cause of the problem. Commonsense inform us that no company will chose a person with insufficient knowledge about his or her mayor. Or perhaps there are much more students in MV compared with GM,so it`s normal that there are more people waiting for a job in MV than in　GM.With out ruling possible explenations such as these,it is unfair to assert that MV also need to increase the number of business courses and job consulor just as GM did.

in  sum,the argurer fails to subsitiate the claim that more business courses and job cunselor are in need in MV because the eidence cited in the argument does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing the argument need to provide more details between the large amount of job counselors and business courses and the popularity of the students in Gm. Additionally, he would have rules out other possible difference between GM and MV. If the argument had licluded the factors discussed above it would have been more convincing and logically acceptable.

greekyUID: 2605662

不好意思，不知道怎么搞的 最后面一段的字体就是调不回来了  我弄了好久 对不住你

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  Merely based on groundless evidence and dubious consumption,the arguer draws a conclusion that  Mira Vista College(MV)must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire more counselors to help students be more attain more interviewing skills. To support the conclusion,he points out that the business courses and more job counselors in Green Mountain College(GM) caused the popularity of its students in job market. Additionally,he indicates that the percent of seniors in  who got job offers was much lower than MV`s. At fist glance,the assertion seems somewhat cogent,nonetheless,a further reflection reveals that it omits so substantial concerns that should be addressed to the argument. Thus,from my point of view,the argument suffers from three logical flaws.

Firstly,the arguer fails to establish a correct causal relationship between the fact that there are more business courses as well as job counselors in GM and the fact  that the percent of seniors who already got job in GM is much higher than MV`s. There is no cogent evidence which could indicate that no factors other than the large amount of business courses and job counselors make the students in GM popular. It is entirely possible that the students` popularity of GM is a response to their ability and the high reputation of GM. Or perhaps,there are so few colleges that the GM` students could hardly find competition from local colleges. It is unacceptable unless there is compelling evidence to support the arguer`s recommendation.

Additionally,the argurer`s claim resets on what might be a poor analogy between GM and MV. The analogy falsely depends on the analogy that the economic condition and human resource demand in both GM and MV are similar. However it is possible that the conditions faced with MV are totally different from GM. For example, the economic condition in MV`s region is so unfavorable that myriad of companied have to reduce the occupations.or perhaps the students in MV are apt to finding jobs with higher salary,which needs a longer time for the graduates to find a ideal occupation.In short, with accounting for possible difference between MV and GM,the arguer cannot justifiably prove the proposed method will indeed help MV.

Finally,even though the MV indeed need to make so change to increase the number of graduates who have got a job, giving more advice about the interview and arrange more business courses might not be advisable. Maybe lacking in professional knowledge is the cause of the problem. Commonsense inform us that no company will chose a person with insufficient knowledge about his or her mayor. Or perhaps there are much more students in MV compared with GM,so it`s normal that there are more people waiting for a job in MV than in　GM.With out ruling possible explenations such as these,it is unfair to assert that MV also need to increase the number of business courses and job consulor just as GM did.

in  sum,the argurer fails to subsitiate the claim that more business courses and job cunselor are in need in MV because the eidence cited in the argument does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing the argument need to provide more details between the large amount of job counselors and business courses and the popularity of the students in Gm. Additionally, he would have rules out other possible difference between GM and MV. If the argument had licluded the factors discussed above it would have been more convincing and logically acceptable.

感觉你写得都比较熟了吧~~点都找到了额，不过我觉得对每一个点可以再多说展开来多说一下，多说一些可能性。个人感觉如果有东西些的话，还是多写些可能性。