Argument45 2月27日【Big Fish】by 安安

迟安安UID: 2769288

This editorial argues that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns scross the frosen sea.However,the sditorial suffers from several problems,which render it uncovincing as it stands.

First of all,the reports of the decline in arctic deer populations just happen to coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt;nevertheless,these two things are not cause and effect.The global warming may cause the sea ice in other places to melt except those in Canada's arctic region.If so,the editorial's conclusion would be undermined.

Even assuming that the sea ice in Canada's arctic rgion does really melt because of the global warmingtrends,there are still a  lot of other reasons or changes that can contribute to the decline in arctic deer populations except their lost of following the age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.Perhaps the plants on which they feed are in danger as a result of some sreious communicable disease or the natives bring in some new kinds of animals which feed on the arctic deer or the deer's food to the islands.Either scenario,if true,the conclusion of this editorial is premature at best.

Finally,we are not informed whether the survery coming from the local hunters has been distorted by the hunters themselves.If the decline in arctic deer populations can bring some benefits such as living allowances to the local hunters,they may give wrong trends to the population of the arctic deers.

In sum,the conclusion of this editorial relies on certain doubtful assumptions that rendre it  unconvincing as it stands.To bolster this conclusion,they must provide clear evidence——perhaps by way of a more scientific survey or study——that the decline in arctic deer populations do in fact due to their unablism to travel over the ice that covers the sea separating the islands.

BobbieZZUID: 2756583

1# 迟安安

This editorial argues that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns scross（cross） the frosen (frozen)sea. However, the sditorial(editorial) suffers from several problems, which render it unconvincing as it stands.

First of all, the reports of the decline in arctic deer populations just happen to coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt; nevertheless, these two things are not cause and effect.The global warming may cause the sea ice in other places to melt(这句话可以替换一下表达，不觉得与上面的太重复的了么) except those in Canada's arctic region.If so,the editorial's conclusion would be undermined.（这个谬误最好找个例子，而且关于全球变暖的问题也比较好找）

Even assuming that the sea ice in Canada's arctic rgion（region） does really melt because of the global warming trends,there are still a  lot of(词汇太基础) other reasons or changes that can contribute to the decline in arctic deer populations except their lost of following the age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.Perhaps the plants on which they feed are in danger as a result of some sreious（？serious） communicable disease or the natives bring in some new kinds of animals which feed on the arctic deer or the deer's food to the islands. Either scenario, if true, the conclusion of this editorial is premature at best(?).

Finally, we are not informed whether the survery(survey) coming from the local hunters has been distorted by the hunters themselves. If the decline in arctic deer populations can bring some benefits such as living allowances to the local hunters,they may give wrong trends to the population of the arctic deers(deer不可数).

In sum, the conclusion of this editorial relies on certain doubtful assumptions that rendre（render） it  unconvincing as it stands.To bolster this conclusion,they must(像Must这样绝对的词汇在GRE作文中少用，可以用should这样的) provide clear evidence——perhaps by way of a more scientific survey or study（research比较好吧）——that the decline in arctic deer populations do in fact due to their unablism（？） to travel over the ice that covers the sea separating the islands.


你的ISSUE和ARGU错字太多，写的时候认真一些，可能你写的太快导致输入的错误，交之前应该检查一下，可以放到WORD里面，错的字会显示，这样对拍文的同学和自己有好处，要不然精力都放在错别字上了，对于你的逻辑的检查就该忽略了
我建议你第三个谬误放在最前面，谬误最好按顺序层层驳，这样可以深入，而且逻辑也是顺的字数好像有点少刚300字。再加油哦~