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s499992008UID: 2688967

第一次写作文。。。。第一次传上来。。。。知道自己写的不好。。。但还是希望传上来。。。希望各位同学千万不要留有面子。。有批评才能进步。。。。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should not pay to the public transportation？

Rcently I heard about a statement that people should not pay to the public transportation,I firmly suppot the idea.Taking transportation free can not only save a amout of money for a wage earner family,aslo supply more convinient for travelling,but as well protect our environment which are polluted gradually.

First of all,a fair portion of money can be saved by taking free trasnportion.For instance,I have a friend named jack,and his family income totaly come from their wages.Taking his family of three members and six times of taking bus every day to calculate,they can save 94 RMB every week,360 RMB every month,4320 RMB every year.From my perspective,a great deal of money surely be saved for his family,and it just so happenes that the money they saved can utilize to buy their life basic requirments,such as clothes,foods ,even the college education fees for their son.

Another benefit is convient through taking free transportion.Since taking bus is free,and there is no need to worry about small change all the times when I want to take a bus to go to another place.Like last time,i found that my purse had no small change when I had already on bus,as a result,I just had only one choice that put a piece of 5 RMB into the box and had no idea to take my spare money back.The cases like me invarily happen every day.

At last but not least,the announcement of taking bus free can incourage people to take public transportation instad of driving own personal car to go to work and back,or,to travel to some place which can protect our environment.It is evident that the number of pollution gas,for example carbon dioxide,nitric oxide and other pollotion gas from car,can go down.According an investiment of a america authority institute,if every peoson who have a car would decrease one time of driving his own car every day,oppositely,taking a public bus can reduce to exhaust thousands million ton of carbon dioxide,which is the most important factor leading to global warming

In one word,the measure that people should not pay for public transportation can ceartanily bring us and our earth benefits.

annkeUID: 2605122

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Rcently I heard about a statement that people should not pay to the public transportation,I firmly suppot the idea.Taking transportation free can not only save a amout of money for a wage earner family, amount n ~ (of sth) a large amount of sth, butaslo supply more convinient/convience for travelling,but as well(? )protect our environment which are ispolluted gradually.你可以说，and protect our environment ...as well
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First of all,a fair portion of money can be saved by taking free trasnportion.For instance,I have a friend named jack,and his family income totaly come from their wages.Taking his family of three members and six times of taking bus every day to calculate这个表达太有问题了。。,they can save 94 RMB every week,360 RMB every month,4320 RMB every year.From my perspective,a great deal of money surely be saved for his family,and it just so happenes that the money they saved can utilize to buy their life basic requirments,such as clothes,foods ,even the college education fees for their son.5 |: A2 q8 n" c4 E- E9 R4 [

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Another benefit is convient 好处是方便的。应该是好处是方便吧through taking free transportion.Since taking bus is free,and there is no need to worry about small change all the times when I want to take a bus to go to another place.Like last time,i found that my purse had no small change when I had already on bus,as a result,I just had only one choice that put a piece of 5 RMB into the box and had no idea to take my spare money back.The cases like me invarily happen every day.

At last but not least,Last but not the least the announcement of taking bus free can incourage people to take public transportation instad instead of driving own personal car to go to work and back,or,to travel to some place which can protect our environment.It is evident that the number of pollution gas,for example 这是连词应该接句子。carbon dioxide,nitric oxide and other pollotion gas from car,can go down.According an investiment of a america authority institute,if every peoson who have a car would decrease one time of driving his own car every day,oppositely,taking a public bus can reduce to exhaust thousands million ton of carbon dioxide,which is the most important factor leading to global warming

In one word,the measure that people should not pay for public transportation can ceartanilycertainly bring us and our earth benefits.
建议上传文章之前用word 的语法拼写先检查，这是基本的礼貌哈。。文章结构完整。但是语病太多，观点不明确并且没有充分论述，两个例子也不能很好说明观点。
加油吧~

s499992008UID: 2688967

我第一次上传。。。所以有些还不太知道。。。行下回我先用WORD检查一下。。

annkeUID: 2605122

真是乖娃娃~ 相当有前途啊~

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should not pay to the public transportation？
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Rcently I heard about a statement that people should not pay to thepublic transportation,I firmly suppot the idea.Taking transportationfree(free public transportation) can not only save a amout of money for a wage earner family(the ordinary families),aslosupply more convinient(convenience) for travelling,but(and) as well protect ourenvironment which are polluted gradually(protect our gradually deteriorating environment as well)
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First of all,a fair portion of money can be saved by taking freetrasnportion(free transportation).For instance,I have a friend named jack,and his familyincome totaly(totally) come from their wages.(还有人 的收入不是来源于工资么)Taking his family of three membersand six times of taking bus every day to calculate,they can save 94 RMBevery week,360 RMB every month,4320 RMB every year(这有点太明显地凑字数了吧).From myperspective,a great deal of money surely be saved for his family,and itjust so happenes that the money they saved can utilize(be utilized) to buy theirlife basic requirments(daily necessities),such as clothes,foods ,even pay the collegeeducation fees for their son.
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9 C8 k7 J" E! c  s) ZAnotherbenefit is convient(convenience) through taking free transportion.Since taking busis free,and there is no need to worry about small change all the timeswhen I want to take a bus to go to another place.Like last time,i foundthat my purse had no small change when I had already on bus,as aresult,I just had only one choice that put a piece of 5 RMB into thebox(I just had no choice but to put a piece of 5RMB into the box) and had no idea to take my spare money back.The cases like me(你不会是个case的,this)invarily(frequently) happen every day.' x" C* W! Z3 C2 G" a7 K1 D/ k
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At last but not least(Last but not least),the announcement of taking bus free can incourage(encourage)people to take public transportation instad of driving own personal car(private car)to go to work and back,or,to travel to some place(places) which can protect ourenvironment.It is evident that the number of pollution gas,for examplecarbon dioxide,nitric oxide and other pollotion gas from car,can godown.According an investiment(investigation) of a america(an America) authority institute,if everypeoson who have a car would decrease one time of driving his own carevery day,oppositely,taking a public bus can reduce to exhaustthousands million ton of carbon dioxide,which is the most importantfactor leading to global warming& F' }9 v4 n1 [
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In one word,the measure that people should not pay for public transportation can ceartanily(certainly) bring us and our earth benefits.
虽然OG上说允许有一些typing error但是不能有太多啊，要不然会很影响的，LZ一定先把自己训练地少有一些typing error，千万不可小觑啊。

s499992008UID: 2688967

Even thouth the basic science play the role like that foundation to the building,while just from this spectacular,we draw conlusion thar all university students should take basic science course,regardless of their field of concentration may be hasty.Learning basic science course better can construct a straight way for gaining our field professional knowledge.
To start with,the student who have obtained professional knowledge can be called talent.Nowdays,the society require specialised talent rather than basci science talent,and we all know that cultvating a common talent just need 2 years,while cultivating a professional talent probably 5years even more.For instance,a phamacy research company willing to people who be capable of development of dugs,such as antitumor drugs,new type of antihypertensive and so on.Accoring to the last year report,in guangdong,some companies lacked of high-technology engineering as many as 30 thousand.In one word,in this competitive society,the company would not hire common people with owning basci science skells.
On the other hand,for students who be about to graduate,possessing specilised skilles would provide more opportunity to choose a better job.For example,applicants with computer science degrees would not only be qualified for jobs in high-tech companies,they would also be well prepared for any job with computer skills as a prerequesite.With a large range of potential jobs to choose from,students are more like to find a job that suits their particular needs and interests.On the contraty,the students who just owing basic science skills migh have narrow direction to find a job,and also have lower salary compare with professional talent.
Last but not least,the benefits from professional knowledge are all prerequisite of learning basic science.If we just pursue our major as much as possible,neglect significance of learning basic science,I deem that our high knowledge building would be blow down with just breeze.In another word,there would not have fish without water.

s499992008UID: 2688967

for fun, not in competition
    Last week, my friend's son team won the first numer in the basketaball competition with his two friends in his college, when he won the champion he felt not only fun, but also the confident and sprit of teamwork and so forth. I stand the side the sport which should be competitive, not just for fun for children, it cab benefit children to feel the pressure from their around people.
    To start with, the children from a real sports competion can obtain the confident if they win the competion, even they would not, and they can slso learn how to be a winner and how to complete with other people, especially in this competitive world. Competitive spirit in childrens' mind is key factor for the success in their future. For instance, jordan, the famous NBA star, also participated in the basketball match when he was just a child in the primary school with many failures at that time, and because of this he can obtain the spirit of never give up, and if he just played the basketball for fun, maybe a common skill basketball player now. Of course, he won in the match also bring him confident, so he just can shoot many buzzer beaters.
     On the another hand, the competitive match can motivate people to pursue further sprit of teamwork, however, the other people also acknowledged the importance of teamwork, so people must have a stronger sprit of teamwork can overcome the problems they would be face. For example, take jordan for another example. When he lost the feeling of shot at the desperate time of draw match, he would quit the chance of decisioner of the match, he would choose and pass the ball to his member of his team, and he believed his partner have this power to shoot the last ball into the basket successfully. Duing to the competitive match, the player can know the importance of sprit of teamwork when they are very young, hence, they will focus on the advancing the teamwork during the common sports.On the contrary, the people who join the sports for fun, they will not know the sprit of teamwork intensive.
       In a nutshell, the children who join the competitive match can make sense teamwork sprit deeper and overall, and also be company with the confident and experience which will have a big influence on their future.

443582555UID: 2762368

Last week, my friend's son’s team won the first prize in the basketball competition with his two friends in his college, when he won the champion he felt not only fun, but also the confidence and sprit of teamwork and so forth. I stood at the side of the sport , which should be competitive, not just for fun for children, it cab benefit children to feel the pressure(不清楚是什么) from their around people. # R, _"  P7((from the people around them)
    To start with, the children from having a real sport(s) competition can obtain the confidence if they win the competetion, even they would not,(没胜利也能自信？) and they can slso learn how to be a winner and how to complete（cooperate） with other people, especially in this competitive world. Competitive spirit in childrens' mind is key factor for the success in their future. For instance, jordan, the famous NBA star, also participated in the basketball match when he was just a child in the primary school with many failures at that time, and because of this he can obtain the spirit of never give up, and if he just played the basketball for fun, maybe (he should not be)a well skilled basketball player now. Of course,（every time） he won in the match also bring him confidence, so that he just(不知道对不对) can shoot many buzzer beaters. 3 B+ q, s! D) i" Z
     On the another hand, the competitive match can motivate people to pursue further sprit of teamwork, however, the other people also acknowledged the importance of teamwork, so people must have a stronger sprit of teamwork can overcome the problems they would be face. For example, take jordan for another example. When he lost the feeling of shot at the desperate time of drawing match（设么意思？降低现场的积极性？？然后就传球？？有点不通）, he would quit the chance of decisioner(没这个词的可以用demander or leader) of the match, he would choose to pass the ball to his member of his team, and he believed his partner have this power to shoot the last ball into the basket successfully. Duing（ to ）the competitive match, the player can know the importance of sprit of teamwork when they are very young, hence, they will focus on the advancing the teamwork during the common sports.On the contrary, the people who join the sports for fun, they will not know the sprit of teamwork intensive.
       In a nutshell, the children who join the competitive match can make a sense of teamwork sprit deeper and overall, and also be company with the confidence and experience which will have a big influence on their future.

也不知道改的对不对   其实写的时候要查字典的   
我在网上看的 开始应该好好查查字典  自己先好好修改下  不然每天一篇 都不怎么样的话不会有提高的   
加油吧    好多其实我也不清楚   自己想想先吧   

yxb_25UID: 2758094

for fun, not in competition % a# Y3 C+ v/ L' l6 @: a' s: |
    Last week, my friend's son team(太机械啦，Team of my friend's son) won the first numer （the first prize)
in the basketaball competition with his two friends in his(去掉his)
college, when he won the champion he felt not only fun, but also the(去掉 the) confident(confidence) and sprit of teamwork and so forth. I stand the side the sport which should be competitive, not just for fun for children, it cab benefit children to feel the pressure from their around people. (最后这句话怎么看不明白，建议LZ在重新组织一下语言）
To start with, the （去掉the) children from a real sports competion can obtain the confident if they win the competion, even they would not, and they can slso learn how to be a winner and how to complete with other people, especially in this competitive world. Competitive spirit in childrens' mind is key factor for the success in their future. For instance, jordan(大写）, the famous NBA star, also participated in the basketball match when he was just (去掉just，啰嗦了）a child in the primary school with many failures at that time, and because of this he can obtain the spirit of never give up, and if he just played the basketball for fun, maybe a common skill basketball player now. (又是长句，感觉LZ的长句把握不是太好）Of course, he won in the match （which)
also bring him confident, so he just can shoot many buzzer beaters. 7 D% A% T! w% N, w, @（
     On the another hand, the competitive match can motivate people to pursue further sprit of teamwork, however, the other people also acknowledged the importance of teamwork, so people must have a stronger sprit of teamwork （which）can overcome the （去掉the)problems they would be
face(they are faced). For example, take jordan（大写） for another example. When he lost the feeling of shot at the desperate time of draw match, he would quit the chance of decisioner of the match, he would choose and pass the ball to his member of his team, and he believed his partner have this power to shoot the last ball into the basket successfully. Duing to the competitive match, the player can know the importance of sprit of teamwork when they are very young, hence, they will focus on the advancing the teamwork during the common sports.On the contrary, the people who join the sports for fun, they will not know the sprit of teamwork intensive. , `1 N% o8 R; B+ J
       In a nutshell, the（去掉the) children who join the competitive match can make sense teamwork sprit deeper and overall, and also be company with the confident and experience which will have a big influence on their future.


LZ貌似小错误不少，语法问题也比较严重，文章思路比较清晰，但是似乎都在举例了，陈述观点时不够直接，长句把握不太好，可以先从短的句子开始练，等熟悉句子结构后就能自如驾驭了，加油！！

s499992008UID: 2688967

people should use telephone on transportation bus train ...
       Now many places are forbidden people to use telephone on transportation, and this is a tissue that people are discussing whether people should use telephone on transportation1. From my perspective, i stand on the side of people should not do that on transportation, the reasons of list are follwing behind.
        To start with, using telephone on transportation will make noise and interupt other people. Like last time, i went back from beijing, and i had already not sleep for  two days for my final paper, when i sat on the train, i just want to have a good sleep to reach the distinent instant without concious. It will reduce the pressure of motion sickness. Nevertheless, the people who share the same chair occupied his time to make call with his girlfriend, which make me be crazy to sleep, but cannot. At finally, i nearly to get asleep on one my foot when i got home. It is obvious that using telephone would effect other people to have a good rest.  
       On the other hand, using telephone on plane endanger the safe of all passangers and crew of plane. It is said that some kind of signal from telephones which are in using will influence the plane's normal flying. For instance, there is a catastrophe from England national airplane that drop down Pacific sea because of one passanger who not followed the instruction of flight crew not allow to use telephone, which cause all stuffs and 218 passangers sacrificed. If using telephones on the plane should be forbidden that would not be have an accident like that.  
       Last but not least, using telephones on transportation would affect the healthy of other people who are in the same car. Many radiation from telephones all make some kind of negative influence on people, especially baby. Also, we all know that car will drive fast with a stuation that maybe have a suddenly brake, hence, the using telephones passangers can easier to be hurt, since one of his hand are seizing telephone instead of transportation safe baluster. In conclusion that, tragedy of injure people on the bus wouldnot be present again without permission of using telephone.
              All in all, based on reasons I mentioned above, people should not use telephone on the transportation, when other people and the most of prime your own safe are considered

s499992008UID: 2688967

advertisements are waste company's money and time
     In the era of technology and ecomomic booming, more and more advertisements, which is the most effective and common way to attract customers, are presenting on mass medias, such as television, computers even on the utility pole on the street. However, some people say that  company making advertisemets are wasting money and time because of sitizens have already know what to buy, i strongly object to that thought. The reasons are following behind.
     To start with, the purpose of advertisements is the sake of leaving unforgettable expression of the products of company in the audience heart though repeated advertisements. Even some people do aware of what should to buy in the supermarket always would willing to purchase the products that are appearing in their heads. For instance, my mother, as the day before, donot have a diea that what drug used for keeping healthy should be regared as gifts give to other people during the spring festival time, and when he got to the medicine shop, seller persuades her not to buy the medicine she knew and introduce new drug for her, at the same time my mother remembered this kind of medcine advertisement was invaribly performing on television. It is evident that my mother would not pay for the new drug which she donot know before without the assistance of advertisement.     

On the other hand, the products in advertisements often stand for highly quality for some people, even they know some other commodities can meet their needs. They prefer to choice the products which posses some knid of reputation, and they believe that using famous products have more proudable. Take my mother as another example. My mother seldom recognize the branch of adidas, when he gained some information from advitisement, she never to wear the shoes which are produced in china. I ask why she like to do so, she answared to me that adidas is international branch, when she is wearing the shoes of that branch she feeled have some prior mettle. In conclusion that, advitisement can provide more powful competience.

In a nutsell, based on the reasons I gave above, Advertisement is not a waste of a company's money and time,even though consumers have already known what they want to buy

s499992008UID: 2688967

Last year, for me, it is the most upset and unforgetable year, which I had a breakdown with my girl friend. My best friend, jack, has a sense of humor,companing with me to get rid of that period of awful time rapidity and peacefully. It is obvious, however, a friend who is intelligent cannot help me extricate myself from a predicament so quickly.
To start with, humourous people invariably evliven atmosphere and release embarrassed surronding.We all have experience that in a party,on dining table,or a meeting where have a peoson who are sense of humor always full of joyness and lough.We all know that a harmony atmosphere can reduce distance among strangers,or,strengh relationship between you and your friends though laughing a lot,and you will be regarded as a person who easily be access to your world. The reason why I like a humourous people to be my friend maily come to aspect of this.
On the another hand, confident and optimistic sprits are always friends with humourous people.Even though they fail on business,have a defeat on affection tissue, they would deal with the problem they faced with an optimisem sprit which i lacked. You would be aware of these people who can absorb experiences from last event and keep on  working with a humourous heart.My neighbor, chen uncle ,has a lung canser unlucky,and the doctor told him he just had one year to live for, but the fact confirm that he is still alive since then. One time,I asked him the reason why he can come back from the dead line,and he facetiously told me the secrit :optimisem.It is evident that a person who have a sense of humor have tremendous influence on he/her future life.
Last but not least, people always say that an intelligent friend could not have an deeper affection than an humourous friend.An intelligent people,though,sometimes can help me to copy with the problem but temporarily, make a decision by measuring gains and losses but they cannot company with me forever. Wisdom can not contaminate,but sense of humour do.I have a sense that an intenligence person willing to make decisions for other people without permision.Like last time,my friend helped me choose an optional course he thought I should, but acturally I donot like,and since then I have no choice but to go to class every Saturday morning.
In one word,I like to be a company with a humourous people rather than an intelligent people.

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

In the era of technology and ecomomic(economic) booming, more and more advertisements, which is the most effective and common way to attract customers, are presenting on mass medias, such as television, computers even on(on这里就不需要啦) the utility pole on the street. However, some people say that  company making advertisemets(advertisements) are wasting money and time because of sitizens（citizens)have already know what to buy, i strongly object to that thought. The reasons are following behind(following behind有点重复了吧).
To start with, the purpose of advertisements is the sake of leaving unforgettable expression of the products of company(of the products of company总觉得有点啰嗦，应该换个句式吧) in the audience(‘s) heart though repeated advertisements. Even some people do aware of what should to buy in the supermarket always would willing to purchase the products that are appearing in their heads(minds比较好). For instance, my mother, as the day before, do not have a diea (an idea) that what(about which?) drug used for keeping healthy should be regared(regarded) as gifts give to(give to改成for比较好) other people during the spring festival time(time可以不要), and when he got to the medicine shop, seller persuades her not to buy the medicine she knew and introduce new drug for her (salesman introduced a new drug to her instead of the medicine she already knew), at the same time my mother remembered this kind of medcine advertisement (the advertisement of this drug) was invariably performing on television. It is evident(evidence) that my mother would not pay for the new drug which she do not know before without the assistance of advertisement.(我觉得的例子应该改下，把收获员推荐去掉，直接写不知道要买什么，看到那个一直做广告的牌子就买了，这样才能说明广告的作用呀)
On the other hand, the products in advertisements often stand for highly quality for some people, even they know some other commodities can meet their needs. They prefer to choice the products which posses some knid(kind) of reputation, and they believe that using famous products have(are?) more proudable(proud). Take(Taking) my mother as another example. My mother seldom recognize the branch of adidas, when he(until she) gained some information from advertisement, and then she never to(to不要啦) wear the shoes which are produced in China. I ask why she like to do so, she answered to me(to me不要) that adidas is international branch, when she is wearing the shoes of that branch she feeled(felt) have some prior mettle. In conclusion that, advertisement can provide more powerful competence.

In a nutsell(nut shell), based on the reasons I gave above, advertisement is not a waste of a company's money and time, even though consumers have already known what they want to buy
觉得楼长最大的问题是单词拼写不准确，这个一定要改哦~还有就是例子叙述太直白，怎么说呢有点像流水账，我觉得在例子的讲述上可以再改进下，个人意见，欢迎探讨~呵呵

yxb_25UID: 2758094

Last year, for me, it is the most upset and unforgetable year, which I had a breakdown with my girl friend. My best friend, jack, has a sense of humor,companing with me to get rid of that period of awful time rapidity and peacefully. It is obvious, however, （换一下语序吧However, it is obvious that )a friend who is intelligent cannot help me extricate myself from a predicament so quickly.
To start with, humourous people invariably evliven(??) atmosphere and release embarrassed surronding.We all have experience that in a party,on dining table,or a meeting where have a peoson who are sense of humor always full of joyness and lough.We all know that a harmony atmosphere can reduce distance among strangers(and themselves),or,strengh relationship between you and your friends though laughing a lot,and you will be regarded as a person who easily be access to your world. The reason why I like a humourous people to be my friend maily come to aspect of this.4 D; ?' L' ?$ G
On the another(other) hand, confident and optimistic sprits are always friends with humourous people.Even though they fail on business,have a defeat on affection tissue, they would deal with the problem they faced with an optimisem sprit which i(I) lacked. You would be aware of these people who can absorb experiences from last event and keep on  working with a humourous heart.My neighbor, chen uncle ,has a lung canser unlucky,and the doctor told him he just had one year to live for, but the fact confirm that he is still alive since then. One time,I asked him the reason why he can come back from the dead line,and he facetiously told me the secrit :optimisem.It is evident that a person who have a sense of humor have tremendous influence on he/her future life.
Last but not least, people always say that an intelligent friend could not have an deeper affection than an humourous friend.An intelligent people,though,sometimes can help me to copy with the problem but temporarily, make a decision by measuring gains and losses but they cannot company with me forever. Wisdom can not contaminate,but sense of humour do.I have a sense that an intenligence person willing to make decisions for other people without permision.Like last time,my friend helped me choose an optional course he thought I should, but acturally I donot like,and since then I have no choice but to go to class every Saturday morning.
In one word,I like to be a company with a humourous people rather than an intelligent people.






恕我说实话吧，LZ的作文感觉需要比较深入的修改，最近比较忙，有空再帮LZ改写，句法错误比较多，机器翻译味道很重，这也很好的锻炼了我的跳跃思维和语言组织能力，希望LZ能自己再看看，例子举得不错，但是感觉LZ 在堆积文字！！总的来说，加油吧！！