Issue136

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TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare




Choice means bringing different. Totally, there are more and more different choices in the society but under some certain but rare circumstance the choice is absence.

Every one has the ability of making choice when facing new situation. People would tend to different aspects based on the favor, the experience and goals. The freedom in choice is the basic right of the average person. People has the right to make friends with different person: they are willing to know person who is inclined to go travelling if they themselves are keen on travelling, or students want to meet partner who has high grades in math that otherwise they themselves do not like it but have to learn it. It is because of various choices that our world is beautiful and marvelous. The individuals who decide to be artists would bring what are the real meanings of being colorful and wonderful into the society by trying to study the artistic culture. People whose vocations are scientists might boost our nations to be more developed and creative. Hence, choice is adequate anywhere.

But a certain phenomenon is that some people do not or cannot anticipate to making decision even if there are countless chances. For example, more and more people face a difficulty of unemployment when just going out to the fast society. They do not have the ability which is needed to the desirable companies. If one cannot master the basic skill like using computer, there are more opportunities to be rejected by the even small companies. Moreover, even if there is no lack of opportunity to find a job to the graduates, they always are able to provide disadvantages of the job: low salary, too heavy pressure, or too small workshop.

However, expect the above phenomenon, people sometimes cannot choice, indeed and just do it or accept it. People do not have the right to alter their natural parents and to decide when they should be born. Some genes leading to different characters make people' different behavior. Some students prefer to think question independently even if sometimes they know that discussing with others would be more effective. Some people, living in the area at which there is no rice or no potato, only could choice cereal or other editable vegetable as the main food.

To sum up, when we have no chance to change or enhance some situations, no matter well or bad they are, what we should do is to accept them with fit and right attitude. When we have the opportunity of change or come true what we desire, what we should do is to do our best and to make use of the choice.

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Choice means bringing different.(differences) Totally, there are more and more different choices in the society but under some certain but rare circumstance the choice is absence.(absent)

Every one has the ability of making choices when facing new situation. People would tend to (v.呢)different aspects based on the favor, the experience and goals. The freedom in choice is the basic right of the average person. People has the right to make friends with different person: they are willing to know person who is inclined to go travelling if they themselves are keen on travelling, or students want to meet partner who has high grades in math that(左右是两句话吧) otherwise they themselves do not like it but have to learn it. It is because of various choices that our world is beautiful and marvelous. The individuals who decide to be artists would bring what are the real meanings of being colorful and wonderful into the society(are应该在最后)， by trying to study the artistic culture. People whose vocations are scientists might boost our nations to be more developed and creative（意思重复）. Hence, choice is adequate anywhere.(哪里来的因果？)这段话想论证的东西很散，人们根据自身情况选择，因为选择，世界才精彩 最后是选择很多

But a certain phenomenon is that some people do not or cannot anticipate to making decisions even if there are countless chances. For example, more and more people face a difficulty of unemployment when just going out to the fast society(？). They do not have the ability which is needed to the desirable companies. If one cannot master the basic skills like using computer, there are more opportunities to be rejected even by the even small companies. Moreover, even if there is no lack of opportunity(复数) to find a job to(for) the graduates, they always are able to provide(find会不会更好) disadvantages of the job: low salary, too heavy pressure, or too small workshop. 例子想表达什么 不是很清楚，最后应该再点一下

However, expect(except) the above phenomenon, people sometimes cannot choice, indeed and(?) just do it or accept it. People do not have the right to alter their natural(biological) parents and to decide when they should be born. Some genes leading to different characters(gene能lead to characters吗) make people' different behavior. （最好加点连词）Some students prefer to think question(chiglish!) independently even if sometimes they know that discussing with others would be more effective. Some people, living in the area at which there is no rice or no potato, only could choice cereal or other editable vegetable as the main food.(？在交通发达的米国，还有这样的情况？) gene引导性格后面的几句话，要缩一下 不是重点。。

To sum up, when we have no chance to change or enhance(不太好) some situations, no matter how well or bad they are, what we should do is to accept them with fit and right attitude. When we have the opportunity of change or come true(变名词形式，come true用法也错了) what we desire, what we should do is to do our best and to make use of the choice.深化了些主题，不错

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建议楼主好好的整理思路，安排好结构 同时好好修改文章，提升语法！！有些词意思了解，并不表示可以随便用，如come true
下手可能有点重，有什么疑惑的地方或不妥，可PM/QQ我～