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3.26     Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not.
When it comes to the argument that the student custom may have certain influence that achieve their success, this claim has considerable merit with respect of the most realm of human notions of experience including, natural science, philosophy, psychology and the humanities.
My first point of view has to refer to the notions of psychology, in as much as psychologist maintains that better living environment brings up better mental status, better mental status brings up better actions, better actions brings up better custom, better custom brings up better initiative positive achievement, better initiative positive achievement brings up better life.Accordingly, it is comparatively reasonable that Students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not.

Taking a look around ,we can find exact examples too numerous to list.And there is no better illustration of proverb than a really vivid experience of LuXu.LuXu, Chinese social reformer,ideologist,litterateur,who loves books as a custom that washing hands before reading, mending when broken.

In the final analysis, given the the notions of psychology and the detailed example,students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not.

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3.25.     Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Printed books have greater effects on society than television has.
While some people may argue that printed books have great effects on our society, after all, as the time goes by, the development of science and technology has always promoted the advancements of major media to embrace the social necessities in every realm of life.
In our cultural live , today’s TV set offers a easier ,more convenient, more
efficient access to embrace the public infinite needs in this special era on the base of efficiency. for instance ,Titanic had brought a worldwide uproar by its extolling and of fascinating immortal love. Daily News has brought easy access to finding effective information from our daily life. Accordingly, whatever it is highly artistic masterpieces of integrity or it is just a product of pracality, TV set is constantly exerting its overwhelming impact on our nonstop rotating world. While some ne might argue that  TV set may cause the” short order effect”
for an old saying puts that “easy gain easy forget”. After all ant informed person who advocate vice versa overlooks the certain functional objective of media in face of a world of beneficiaries that TV promote every realm of the human experience efficiently.
In the nutshell, considering the TV set’s peerless influences and the printed book ‘s lack of convenience and efficient spreading, TV set will offer its  certain inherent technical benefits to achieve the promotion in every realm of humanity.

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o you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not.% j& y! n: ]# E! D4 w
When it comes to the argument that the student custom may have certain influence that achieve their success, this claim has considerable merit with respect of the most realm of human notions of experience including, natural science, philosophy, psychology and the humanities(这段我怎么就没看懂).
My first point of view has to refer to the notions of psychology, in as much as psychologist maintains that better living environment brings up（这个bring up用的有点。。换成update 会不会好点） better mental status, better mental status brings up better actions, better actions brings up better custom, better custom brings up better initiative positive achievement, better initiative positive achievement brings up better life.Accordingly, it is comparatively reasonable that Students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not.（全是论断。。没例子没细节。。说服力不强）
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Taking a look around ,we can find exact examples too numerous to list.And there is no better illustration of proverb than a really vivid experience of LuXu.LuXu, Chinese social reformer,ideologist,litterateur,who loves books as a custom that washing hands before reading, mending（这个例子。。你这是用例子解释例子，洗手就成功，这不跟题目一个意思吗？作为一个读者，你还是没能说服我让我相信好的习惯就能成功） when broken.

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In the final analysis, given the the notions of psychology and the detailed example,students who keep their rooms neat and organized tend to be more successful than students who do not。楼主这个文章的论点很好，但是就是没有充分论证。。自己好好琢磨琢磨吧。

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3.28   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contests.,
Ｉgenerally agree with the broad assertion with respect to the most occasion when children play sports just for fun. While this claim has considerable merit pandering to the most issues about morality and conscience, at the same time, the claim unnecessarily overlooks the certain destination and origin of sports. My points of contention with the claim have to do with the fundamental objects and the nation of the sports as discussed below.
I concede the claim is the on the right philosophical side of this issue. After all , sports is a promotion for human health and satisfying our craving to strengthen quality of bodies. Yet, in the very notion of the sports lies my first point of view about the claim which illogically ignores the certain delight and excitement when playing sports in competitive occasions. To the contrary, irrespective of competitive spirit, without any competition, the dis enfranchised sports purely accounts to the depressed spirit and lack of initiative self physical promotion, which strike me as highly impractical and inefficient and boring.
On the other hand, in my observation,when it comes to the destination of sports, any in formed person has no justification to deny that competitive sports arouse the certain original instincts of humanities right along with enchanted and unpredictable surprises for affirmative enhancement both in metal and physical spirit .
To sum up , in any events , given advantages of competitive spirit and benefits of primary nature of the sports , I would draw the conclusion that children would enjoy the a world of unpredictable surprises in the competitive sport game.

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3.31        Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.
Although I agree that movies and TVs might not ultimately manage to show their positive effects which contribute to the integrity of human beings, the statement fail to account for the significant positive impact that the modern-media had on the quality of life.
On the one hand is the compelling example to explain the movie industry positive effects. Consider Canadian film industry which is subsidized by the government ,and which is provide countless jobs for the film workers and economic booming for the whole country and highly artistic valuable necessity for audiences as a result. In so far as the positive significant influence and the portential value, the film incentives have sparked a boon for the Canadian economy, thereby stimulating the job growth and wealth that can be applied to education, job training , and social programs. This example is proof that movies make crucial effects that accrue the whole country development.
On the other hand, more recently , TV set makes easy access to communicate with different schools and gain endless knowledge and various information for humans. Accordingly, TV set has aided in improvements for most human endeavors and innovations.      
Yet, for every media helping to reduce human suffering is another that has served primarily to add to it.TV set breeds information overload and steels our time and attention away from family, community, and coworkers. Movies lead to produce a host of unrealistic concern which is absolutely good for children’s education. After all, such effects stem form our essential humanities which any modern media can not alter.
In sum, in terms of improvement in economy , culture ,and living, movies and TVs actually improve the standard of living and comfort ,and in long term survival, which have indeed brought about clear positive progress for humanity,

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3.31        Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.
Although I agree that movies and TVs might not ultimately manage to show their positive effects which contribute to the integrity of human beings, the statement fail to account for the significant positive impact that the modern-media had on the quality of life.(开头不错！赞一个）2 I, L2 `$ C, b+ ]: L7 T(

On the one hand is the compelling example to explain the movie industry positive effects. Consider Canadian film industry which is subsidized by the government ,and which is provide countless jobs for the film workers and economic booming for the whole country and highly artistic valuable necessity for audiences as a result. In so far as the positive significant influence and the portential value, the film incentives have sparked a boon for the Canadian economy, thereby stimulating the job growth and wealth that can be applied to education, job training , and social programs. This example is proof that movies make crucial effects that accrue the whole country development.（作者观点呢？只在例子中说了电影产业影响地区经济，就业等，最好能在最后在跳出例子表明一下自己观点）

On the other hand, more recently , TV set makes easy access to communicate with different schools and gain endless knowledge and various information for humans. Accordingly, TV set has aided in improvements for most human endeavors and innovations.       : r9 g3 A1 [3 b  m) I( K) @
Yet, for every media helping to reduce human suffering is another that has served primarily to add to it.TV set breeds information overload and steels our time and attention away from family, community, and coworkers. Movies lead to produce a host of unrealistic concern which is absolutely good for children’s education. After all, such effects stem form our essential humanities which any modern media can not alter.% Q- j! A& x9 h2 \4 r
In sum, in terms of improvement in economy , culture ,and living, movies and TVs actually improve the standard of living and comfort ,and in long term survival, which have indeed brought about clear positive progress for humanity,
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文章没什么问题，挺好的文章，句子什么的都很不错，但是感觉有那么一点不切题，虽然分析了TV 和MOVIE两者的影响，但是就是感觉作者没把话说完，有点说不出怪怪的感觉，嘿嘿

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改到第二篇就没力气了。。。
抱歉了   实在要睡觉了  。。。。。

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4.2   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to truly understand world events, reading newspaper is better than watching TV.
I generally disagree with the claim that reading newspaper is better than watching TV in order to truly understand world events in the most living occasions. While this claim has considerable merit with respect to the certain notions of humanity that newspaper is a relatively objective account for most common events, at the same time, TV regarded as anew innovation has been considered as a lack of safety and logic to invent. My points of contention with the claim about the TV documentation involved definitely benefits of tv and growing significant role in contemporary world.
Admittedly, tv based on the production of video camera provide such a accurate and convincing record in today’s life that it has become a more essential form of documentation than written record, in as much as ,with respect to the developers of the media, it is impossible for anyone ,no matter how keen a observer and skilled a journalist to recount in complete and objective detail such events as the winning touchdown at the super bowl, a Balanchine ballet ,the tournament of rose parade ,or the scene at the intersection of the Florence and Normandy streets during 1992 los Angeles riots.Yet these are important events in contemporary life –-the sort of the events we might put in time capsule for the purpose of the capturing our life and times at this terms of this millennium.
Yet to the extent that personal interpretation adds dimension and richness to the record , it is indeed that newspaper has advantages over TV interpretation . when it comes to the use in documenting statistic or other quantities of information, TV unavoidably become the typical not example. However ,when it refers to the capturing, storing, and recalling temporal , special events, TV is inherently more objective, accurate and complete to understand.
In sum , when speaking of the authenticity and truly understanding of the detailed events, TV has peerless merit in documenting.

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I generally disagree with the claim that reading newspaper is better than watching TV in order to truly understand world events in the most living occasions. While this claim has considerable merit with respect to the certain notions of humanity that newspaper is a relatively objective account for most common events, at the same time, TV regarded as anew innovation has been considered as a lack of safety and logic to invent. My points of contention with the claim about the TV documentation involved definitely benefits of tv and growing（playing a） significant role in contemporary world.(第一段感觉有点长 有点凑字数的嫌疑哈 比如电视的缺乏逻辑可以加点字变成第二段 然后来个However)Admittedly, tv based on the production of video camera provide such a accurate and convincing record in today’s life that it has become（became） a more essential form of documentation than written record, in as much as ,with respect to the developers of the media, it is impossible for anyone ,no matter how keen a observer and skilled a journalist to recount in complete and objective detail such events as the winning touchdown at the super bowl, a Balanchine ballet ,the tournament of rose parade ,or the scene at the intersection of the Florence and Normandy streets during 1992 los Angeles riots.(这句话很彪悍。。。说实话我没看懂。。。也不知道对不对。。。从来没见过这样的。。除了托福老师那里。。如果是正确的话你PM我。。告诉我你怎么写出来的)Yet these are important events in contemporary life –-the sort of the events we might put in time capsule for the purpose of the capturing our life and times at this terms of this millennium.% g( D/ k! x1 ^
Yet to the extent that personal interpretation adds dimension and richness to the record , it is indeed that newspaper has advantages over TV interpretation . when it comes to the use in documenting statistic or other quantities of information, TV unavoidably become the typical not example. However ,when it refers to the capturing, storing, and recalling temporal , special events, TV is inherently more objective, accurate and complete to understand.  {/ E$ k7 R, {* a! j6 |+ H! p( e
In sum , when speaking of the authenticity and truly understanding of the detailed events, TV has peerless merit in documenting.

第一段感觉是要说电视的好处。。第二段貌似写电视有记录的作用（额。。这又感觉和电视没什么大关系。。记者记录使用video camera 一句电视是基于video camera的生产， 个人觉得逻辑有点怪） 到第三段又辩证的看问题  ，  不知道有没有这种格式的。。。
题目是你同不同意 要辩证的看的话 个人认为第一段就要点明 depend on the …

优点是词汇量多 好多我都不认识 要看词霸。。还有长句子额。。不清楚对不对啊。。
如果正确的话真要好好学习了！   

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I generally disagree with the claim that reading newspaper is better than watching TV in order to truly understand world events in the most living occasions. While this claim has considerable merit with respect to the certain notions of humanity that newspaper is a relatively objective account for most common events, at the same time, TV regarded as anew innovation has been considered as a lack of safety and logic to invent. My points of contention with the claim about the TV documentation involved definitely benefits of tv and growing significant role in contemporary world.1 m& }+ L3 S4 C4 i; w) W
Admittedly, tv based on the production of video camera provide such a(an) accurate and convincing record in today’s life that it has become a more essential form of documentation than written record, in as much as ,with respect to the developers of the media, (for)it is impossible for anyone ,no matter how keen a observer and skilled a journalist to recount in complete and objective detail such events as the winning touchdown at the super bowl, a Balanchine ballet ,the tournament of rose parade ,or the scene at the intersection of the Florence and Normandy streets during 1992 los Angeles riots.Yet these are important events in contemporary life –-the sort of the events we might put in time capsule for the purpose of the capturing our life and times at this terms of this millennium（两个句子一段？） b+ J' e"（） V4 R# i# Y
Yet to the extent that personal interpretation adds dimension and richness to the record , it is indeed that newspaper has advantages over TV interpretation . when it comes to the use in documenting statistic or other quantities of information, TV unavoidably become the typical not example. However ,when it refers to the capturing, storing, and recalling temporal , special events, TV is inherently more objective, accurate and complete to understand.6 O; J# c! N' u+ N
In sum , when speaking of the authenticity and truly understanding of the detailed events, TV has peerless merit in documenting.(which makes us know the world better,再联系一下)好好学习楼主

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4.6     Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Advertisement is a waste of a company's money and time, because consumers have already known what they want to buy.


Is ad a waste of company ‘s money while all the consumers have already known what they want? Admittedly, this claim has considerable merit with respect to the most necessary products for human beings.while I have to take receptions when it comes to the unnecessary products including luxuries, clothing and some novelty items.
As for the functions of the ads for luxuries, generally speaking, ads always strick me as highly practical and effective as means of introductions to attract potential consumers who are now standing by and keep an eye on such things which provide with high level of life equality and sense of comfort. For instance, ads for
luxurious clothing with classical band at high expense always attracts executives , managers, and leaders’ attention to form a better memories that the band can embody their high taste of life and their dignity.
On the other hand, insofar as novelty items, company needs to develop the public notions of their new creations and their company like apple company. Iphone, the most successful mobile product for apple company as a novelty item, provides with host of practice and convenient concerns. In order to envelope public notions of the item in the mobile yield, apple company has filmed a magnificent ad to lead people to consider it as the most convenient and effective mobile phone in the world. In long term survival , ad also provides great influence in the whole market while as a use of conjuring up the potential market and extend influence in the certain yeild.
Finally, in the nutshell, when it comes to the most necessary products for human beings, this claim defines a waste of company ‘s money can be partially right. After all , insofar as novelty items luxuries, and clothing, ad plays a significant role in contemporary company introducing their products.

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4.7    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have a friend who is smart than to have a friend who is humorous.
Is it intelligence our idol while it is better to have a friend who is smart than to have a friend who is humorous? I generally agree with the claim when it comes to the use of friends just chillily for the self-capital appreciation . While insofar as humor, as one of the human emotional appearance in the notions of humanities, I have to take exceptions about the claim when speaking of making friends who are definitely human beings.
Admittedly, today ‘s knowledge economy lies in the certain capital appreciation. In other word, we can’t survive without a certain  effectiveness.  Accordingly, as for the smarter friends, of course, as a great tool, you may depend on them just for the simple aspects to deal with certain affairs. However, lack of some humor, just for a single direct capacity which absolutely smart people have, you may lack of happiness in humanities as a human being. You may argue that you enhance the level of living comfort and life equality, after all, the claim lies a certain coldness, in my view, any informed person living in the society would seek to discourage.
Well, when it refers to the humanities, humor plays a significant role in contemporary life .For example, when I talk about an academically scientific research, my humorous friends always use their practical and funny experience to argue with me. Nevertheless they reject me , I enjoy a world of the personal funny joke and our relationship are never going worse but better. This detailed example accurately demonstrate that humor seems appeal to contribute to the humanities and gap between people. And when we comes to talk with humorous people , we always open our mind and just feel easily close to others, so humorous people also help you find easy access to gain information that you may hard-pressed to get.
In the final analysis, given the benefits of humorous friends and certain emotional humanities, Ｉhave to draw a conclusion that having  a friend who is humorous is enjoyable in my life.

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Is it intelligence our idol while it is better to have a friend who is smart than to have a friend who is humorous? I generally agree with the claim when it comes to the use of friends just chillily for the self-capital appreciation . While insofar as humor, as one of the human emotional appearance in the notions of humanities, I have to take exceptions about the claim when speaking of making friends who are definitely human beings.
* Q5 f  O! q7 E$ kAdmittedly, today ‘s knowledge economy lies in the certain capital appreciation. In other word, we can’t survive without a certain  effectiveness.  Accordingly, as for the smarter friends, of course, as a great tool, you may depend on them just for the simple aspects to deal with certain affairs. However, lack of some humor, just for a single direct capacity which absolutely smart people have, you may lack of happiness in humanities as a human being. You may argue that you enhance the level of living comfort and life equality, after all, the claim lies a certain coldness, in my view, any informed person living in the society would seek to discourage. 5 p6 U8 t- U  @; Y0 T! ]
Well, when it refers to the humanities, humor plays a significant role in contemporary life .For example, when I talk about an academically scientific research, my humorous friends always use their practical and funny experience to argue with me. Nevertheless they reject me , I enjoy a world of the personal funny joke and our relationship are never going worse but better. This detailed example accurately demonstrate that humor seems appeal to contribute to the humanities and gap between people. And when we comes to talk with humorous people , we always open our mind and just feel easily close to others, so humorous people also help you find easy access to gain information that you may hard-pressed to get.
+ P  z; U9 B. b1 |- a3 ]In the final analysis, given the benefits of humorous friends and certain emotional humanities, Ｉhave to draw a conclusion that having  a friend who is humorous is enjoyable in my life.

文采横溢，十分佩服，文章留下拜读敬仰了。小弟实不敢妄加批论…

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Is it intelligence our idol while it is better to have a friend who is smart than to have a friend who is humorous? I generally agree with the claim when it comes to the use of friends just chillily（？） for the self-capital appreciation . While in so far as humor, as one of the human emotional appearance in the notions of humanities, I have to take exceptions about the claim when speaking of making friends who are definitely human beings. （没怎么看明白，观点在哪里？第二句说agree,到底agree的是什么，前面那句是个疑问句，总不能agree那个疑问吧）

Admittedly, today ‘s knowledge economy lies in the certain capital appreciation. In other word, we can’t survive without a certain  effectiveness.  Accordingly, as for the smarter friends, of course, as a great tool, you may depend on them just for the simple aspects to deal with certain affairs. However, lack of some humor, just for a single direct capacity which absolutely smart people have, you may lack of happiness in humanities as a human being. You may argue that you enhance the level of living comfort and life equality, after all, the claim lies a certain coldness, in my view, any informed person living in the society would seek to discourage.

Well, when it refers to the humanities, humor plays a significant role in contemporary life .For example, when I talk about an academically scientific research, my humorous friends always use their practical and funny experience to argue with me. Nevertheless they reject me , I enjoy a world of the personal funny joke and our relationship are never going worse but better. This detailed example accurately demonstrate that humor seems appeal to contribute to the humanities and gap between people. And when we comes to talk with humorous people , we always open our mind and just feel easily close to others, so humorous people also help you find easy access to gain information that you may hard-pressed to get.7 K/ U! c% m8 u! [7 n% [2 s0 n（这一段举的例子很好）

In the final analysis, given the benefits of humorous friends and certain emotional humanities, Ｉhave to draw a conclusion that having  a friend who is humorous is enjoyable in my life.

第一次看到不是按照严格的托福作文格式来写的，没有尝试过这种写法，不过到底好还是不好。不过建议LZ无论用什么写法，观点还是明确一点，包括分论点的提出，这样更加适合老美的straight思维。

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没看到你4.9的作业啊
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