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shengyan1988UID: 2779324

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wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.9     Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give every member of the team the same grade when the team finishes a project

I generally disagree with the broad assertion when it comes to the universities assign the equal priorities to every member of the team. 　ｍｙ　ｐｉｏｎｔ　ｏｆ　ｖｉｅｗ　has to come to three fundamental arguments including construction of team and different tasks for each member of team and the significant role in the different priorities in team.
First and foremost, construction of team has a certain regulation and the disciplines that we all cannot fail to overlook and discourage. Leader, the center of the team working, as a director ,a guider, a judge, a coach, plays the most important role in the team, contributes to the general achievement of the whole team. And other staff in their way plays a essential role in their aspects to do one or several parts of the whole project. Accordingly, construction of the team contributes to the different tasks for the whole staff. Therefore different role should get different award　in common sense.
Moreover, I have to hard–pressed to consider the constructive result that assign the same priority to the each members. While you may be equal to show respects to every member that should have been  obviously like that, after all grade should objectively represent someone’s abilities that is all the whole society required and that is how we, as human beings to survive as a spiecies. Any university which concern vise verse flies in face of hundreds of thousands of survived informed people who work in different yields of human endeavors and gain different awards and profits by different roles and achievements.
In conclusion, generally speaking, considering different achievements for different students and their ways to contribute the whole society. University should assign different grades that evaluate the students accurately for every member of the group.

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.10    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
Do grades (marks) encourage students to learn? Indisputably, in today’s world, grades and marks has been a great idol, which all powers and talents must serve! So I generally agree with the claim which has considerable merit with respect to the most areas of the human endeavor.
As a part of the human beings, students also cannot fail to be leaving themselves alone without generally objective grades.
Grades (marks) encourage students to learn a lot initiatively in as much as the society needs it to evaluate each person equally and objectively. Accordingly, students have to pursue their great future and careers to make themselves competitive and of high value. Therefore, there are a lot of vivid experiences around us. For example, now a lot of the students come to take the exam—toefl IBT –again and again to purchase a high mark to entering their admiring universities. This demonstrates the certain value in some extent that as a social evaluation system, grades are born with fixed effectiveness to stimulate the leaning passion.
While some people may argue that grades distinguish people to make the better better and the worse worse and the worse become more and more disadvantageous , depressed; after all this claim account to fantasy which has overlooked the certain aspect that it is obviously the human personal learning spirit status not the graded that plays significant role in their learning process. Any informed person who concern otherwise seems appeal to fly in face of thousands of hundreds of students with low grades which is due to their unenergetic spirit status and behavior.
In the final analysis, given the certain and Indisputable spur that grades serve, I come to draw a conclusion that grades encourage students to learn a lot as a survival in society.

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.11    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels (gas, oil and coal).
Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels. Some individuals agree with the statement hold the view that renewable sources of energy have considerable merit over fossil fuels that will soon replace it, when it comes to sustainable development and running a long way due to our survival as a species. However, from my perspective, I must take exceptions when it comes to three aspects including cost, feasibility, and social interest.
To begin with, in contemporary society, based on certain efficiency, practicality has been the overriding concern in most areas of human endeavors. As we all know that renewable sources of energy is a great cost in contrast with fossil energy, like wind and sun that using them will obviously waste host of the social recourse that should be in the right way to solve the pressing social problems.
Moreover, considering extremely low rate of work, today’s renewable resources provide with a main form of human energy—electricity, which strikes me as highly impractical and helpless. Accordingly, it is no complete feasibility for human pragmatism development in short term survival. At the same time, fossil energy has an absolutely benefit that meet people practical needs in most reams of human.
Last but not least, I have to demonstrate the social interest that all powers and talent must serve. It is a indisputable fact that renewable resources of energy has certain disadvantages when speaking of development of the booming society at highly expense. So in short run, social interests will assign the high priorities to the fossil energy while at the same time , using remnant resources to do research in renewable energy to make it the same as fossil energy in expense, efficiency and feasibility.
In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with the statement that renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels.

wtnwinUID: 2764194

第一次用jbc88(管理员)的历次作文标准ibt写作模板写文章，是好是坏，希望战友们狠狠批！！！

shouwang1UID: 2787309

20# wtnwin

Do grades (marks) encourage students to learn? Indisputably, in today’s world, grades and marks has been a great idol, which all powers and talents must serve! So I generally agree with the claim which has considerable merit with respect to the most areas of the human endeavor.（建议把很多具体的claim,most areas是什么都写出来，不然感觉很空泛）

As a part of the human beings, students also cannot fail to be leaving themselves alone without generally objective grades.( G.
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Grades (marks) encourage students to learn a lot initiatively in as much as the society needs it to evaluate each person equally and objectively. Accordingly, students have to pursue their great future and careers to make themselves competitive and of high value. Therefore, there are a lot of vivid experiences around us. For example, now a lot of the students come to take the exam—toefl IBT –again and again to purchase a high mark to entering their admiring universities. This demonstrates the certain value in some extent that as a social evaluation system, grades are born with fixed effectiveness to stimulate the leaning passion.（这段观点和举例都很不错）

While some people may argue that grades distinguish people to make the better better and the worse worse and the worse become more and more disadvantageous , depressed; after all this claim account to fantasy which has overlooked the certain aspect that it is obviously the human personal learning spirit status not the graded that plays significant role in their learning process. Any informed person who concern otherwise seems appeal to fly in face of thousands of hundreds of students with low grades which is due to their unenergetic spirit status and behavior.（这段可以适当举例子）

In the final analysis, given the certain and Indisputable spur that grades serve, I come to draw a conclusion that grades encourage students to learn a lot as a survival in society.

总体评价一下吧，LZ词汇量很大，而且句子也都很拽，但是我觉得LZ中国特色很强，主要体现在思想过于深刻，说理过多，实例太少，感觉说得很泛，多举例也可以增加字数，LZ的文章字数貌似也有点单薄。而且通篇长句子，看得很累，建议长短句结合，这样文章显得更加灵活，不至于生硬。总的来说LZ还是很强大的。

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.12   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.
Nowadays, there is a heated debate with sharply roaring volume about whether the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Some individuals agree with the claim holding the view that we can get better service enjoying the travel at lower expense by the guider in term of lack of the experience about the destination of tourism. However, on my personal level, considering one of the old saying in Chinese which puts” easy gain easy pain”, I come to disagree with the claim that overlooks certain disadvantages in this sort of tourism.
First and foremost, when it comes to the certain aspects about tourism, we seems appeal to imagine how free and enjoyable and romantic we are. In other word, we prefer air of freedom than a certain fixed stubborn journey. When the guide schedules everything for your term survival, everything has come to be a certain program or task which lack of creativity and freedom or anything exciting. Accordingly, I am hard—pressed to think over the final contentment after performing an absurd and stubborn program.
Furthermore, in a group lies certain aspect that you would rather concern the business for the whole group than that of yourself. Of course, you consider a great chance for further relationship among tourists, after all, given the function of the tourism and common sense that truism is just for entertaining people, I must accuse of the claim lack of certain notions of tourism.
Last but significant, without any sense of mission or any plan to fulfill, just travelling where you want, you will attain a new notion of tourism that leads you to know what the connection is between you and world.
In the final analysis, in term of the function of tourism and benefits without any group or guild, I tend to draw a conclusion that te best way to travel is without any but just by you heart.

shengyan1988UID: 2779324

4.11    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels (gas, oil and coal).

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels. Some individuals agree with the statement hold the view that renewable sources of energy have considerable merit over fossil fuels that will soon replace it, when it comes to sustainable development and running a long way due to our survival as a species. However, from my perspective, I must take exceptions when it comes to three aspects including cost, feasibility, and social interest.

To begin with, in contemporary society, based on certain efficiency, practicality has been the overriding concern in most areas of human endeavors. As we all know that renewable sources of energy is a great cost in contrast with fossil energy, like wind and sun that using them will obviously waste host of the social recourse that should be in the right way to solve the pressing social problems（句子太长了，而且不通顺）

Moreover, considering extremely low rate of work, today’s renewable resources provide with a main form of human energy—electricity, which strikes me as highly impractical and helpless. Accordingly,  it is (there is) no complete feasibility for human pragmatism development in short term survival(surviving in a short term). (这句太唐突了，而且和前面观点的衔接不是很好) At the same time, fossil energy has an absolutely benefit that meet people practical needs in most reams(realms) of human.（这段不是很有说服力，中间内容不充实）

Last but not least, I have to demonstrate the social interest that all powers and talent must serve. It is a indisputable fact that renewable resources of energy has certain disadvantages when speaking of development of the booming society at highly(high) expense. So in short run, social interests will assign the high(a higher) priorities to the fossil energy while at the same time , using remnant resources to do research in renewable energy to make it the same as fossil energy in expense, efficiency and feasibility.

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with the statement that renewable sources of energy (sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossil fuels.

虽然观点清晰，但是内容有点空洞，每段都是概括性的句子，没有详细展开的论述，加一些例子或者详细的解释会更好。同一段中，每句话之间的逻辑性连接不是很好，还有就是表达太拐弯抹角了，读得好累。。。

bruce520UID: 2634940

4.12   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.

3 L( G( }; Y) ]( }Nowadays, there is a heated debate with sharply roaring volume about whether the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Some individuals agree with the claim holding the view that we can get better service enjoying the travel at lower expense by the guider in term of lack of the experience about the destination of tourism. However, on my personal level, considering one of the old saying in Chinese which puts” easy gain easy pain”, I come to disagree with the claim that overlooks certain disadvantages in this sort of tourism.
. z+ C" }4 B$ T* |- k6 h, H4 EFirst and foremost, when it comes to the certain aspects about tourism, we seems appeal to imagine how free and enjoyable and romantic we are. [这里是主题句吗？如果是那就应该亮明观点，而你这里只给出了你的标准，却不说出符合这个标准的是哪种旅游方式，可能大家能一看就知道，但是美国人的直线思维不一定就能知道你再说啥] In other word, we prefer air of freedom than a certain fixed stubborn journey. When the guide schedules everything for your term survival, everything has come to be a certain program or task which lack of creativity and freedom or anything exciting. Accordingly, I am hard—pressed to think over the final contentment after performing an absurd and stubborn program.
5 e, @  L) }8 yFurthermore, in a group lies certain aspect that you would rather concern the business for the whole group than that of yourself. Of course, you consider a great chance for further relationship among tourists, after all, given the function of the tourism and common sense that truism is just for entertaining people, I must accuse of the claim lack of certain notions of tourism.
& Q+ o9 y# H( F  kLast but significant, without any sense of mission or any plan to fulfill, just travelling where you want, you will attain a new notion of tourism that leads you to know what the connection is between you and world.【这里给一些例子就更好了】
; m& K' v3 y6 G* K; {+ a8 e, T6 PIn the final analysis, in term of the function of tourism and benefits without any group or guild, I tend to draw a conclusion that te best way to travel is without any but just by you heart.

这个问题确实很难论证，大家好像都写不出多少字，我也是憋的半天凑够300.
看来这中问题要注意一点才行

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.13   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

Are Human needs for farmland, housing, and industry more important than saving land for endangered animals? I generally disagree with the claim when it comes to the comparative importance of the different uses in diverse lands.
Admittedly, when it refers to peerless development in human material fields, the claim has considerable merit pandering the certain aspects with ego-centric including the human profit, human interests and certain coldness in competitive spirit. Accordingly, it seems appeal to be convincing that development needs natural resource sacrificing like deadly pollution for environment and disforest in a great forest.  However, the claim overlooks the certain aspects on the essential basic that we human, as a species, are part of the nature. Accordingly, there are other species the same as us that have rights living in nature. So any informed the people who concern otherwise lies the certain coldness that any government would seek to discourage.
Therefore, in term of nature, generally speaking, to make our civilization sustain, we make a harmonious relationship between civilization and nature. To live a better place, we should value the certain resources to protect them from extinction. For example, in my observation, I see a lot of areas in china has come to resist disforest and give the land back to nature; I also find the environment in such places has improved a lot since doing the measure. Although the land for farming, industry and housing is important to basic survival as a human, after all we should assign the higher priorities in protect natural lands in long term survival.
Finally, from my perspective, protecting the natural land for endangered animals is another stimulation in national economy. Like the developed nations, use the national park to attract tourists coming to visit. It is not only benefit for the animals but a booming for tourism.
In the final analysis, based on what I have mentioned above, it is indisputable that protecting the natural land for endangered animals is necessary for us to living a better place.

mj23-26UID: 2551804

Are Human needs for farmland, housing, and industry more important than saving land for endangered animals? I generally disagree with the claim when it comes to the comparative importance of the different uses in diverse lands.（开头鲜明 比我的好太多了。。55555）

Admittedly, when it refers to peerless development in human material fields, the claim has considerable merit pandering the certain aspects with ego-centric including the human profit, human interests and certain coldness in competitive spirit. Accordingly, it seems appeal to be convincing that development needs natural resource sacrificing like deadly pollution for environment and disforest in a great forest（去掉）.  However, the claim overlooks the certain aspects on the essential（多余了吧） basic that we human, as a species, are part of the nature. Accordingly（和上面的那个有些重复 换一个连接词~）, there are other species same as us that have rights living（to live？） in nature. So any informed the people who concern otherwise lies the certain coldness that any government would seek to discourage. （我没读太懂。。。估计是水平问题？）

Therefore, in term of nature, generally speaking, to make our civilization sustain, we make a harmonious relationship between civilization and nature. To live a better place, we should value the certain resources to protect them from extinction. For example, in my observation, I see a lot of areas in china has come to resist disforest and give the land back to nature; I also find the environment in such places has been improved a lot since doing the measure. Although the land for farming, industry and housing is important to basic survival as a human, after all we should assign the higher priorities in protect natural lands in long term survival.

Finally, from my perspective, protecting the natural land for endangered animals is another stimulation in national economy. Like the developed nations, using the national park to attract tourists coming to visit. It is not only benefit for the animals but a booming for tourism.
In the final analysis, based on what I have mentioned above, it is indisputable that protecting the natural land for endangered animals is necessary for us to living a better place.

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.14   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studying.
Nowadays, there is a heated debate with sharply soaring volume about whether students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studying. Some individuals agree with statement that the longer time one study the better result receives. From my perspective, the claim has considerable merit pandering to human common sense , while I must take exceptions when it comes to the realistic life.
Admittedly, I fail to deny the accurate fact that in term survival we should study constantly to pandering the needs for society. On the contrary, insofar as the term of study, as for me, it is not complete vice versa. For example, I often feel lack of inefficiency and interest when studying a subject for a long term. And I would rather just scan the subjects than proceed profound research after a long time promotion. Accordingly, even if a man with great stamina and flexibility can successfully hold on it, as a mortal in most part of us , we hardly sustain such term.
On the other hand comes to my broad assertion that we do not have to suffer such long term at the same time conjure up a great grades inasmuch as we all know that efficiency on the simple basic that we make every efforts to concentrate on one thing will promote extraordinary. This simple reason can be demonstrated by the common experience like in today’s life students can always finish a complex game in a limited time while they have a lot of schoolwork to do and have no sense of mission and obligation to such thing. Accordingly, it is the great interest and infinite passion not matter of time they have to spend to successfully fulfill a job.
Finally, as it mentioned above, given the health risk and ultimate efficiency, I strongly disagree students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studying.

macaoUID: 2404395

同学，我主要谈下逻辑跟结构方面
Nowadays, there is a heated debate with sharply soaring volume about whether students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studying. Some individuals agree with statement that the longer time one study the better result receives. From my perspective, the claim has considerable merit pandering to human common sense , while I must take exceptions when it comes to the realistic life.个人认为，第一段明确提出观点的好
* ~  w( M1 u- E! e我的习惯是，论证段第一句就明确提出此段观点。而且你这段我看的有点糊涂啊Admittedly, I fail to deny the accurate fact that in term survival we should study constantly to pandering the needs for society. On the contrary, insofar as the term of study, as for me, it is not complete vice versa. For example, I often feel lack of inefficiency and interest when studying a subject for a long term. And I would rather just scan the subjects than proceed profound research after a long time promotion. Accordingly, even if a man with great stamina and flexibility can successfully hold on it, as a mortal in most part of us , we hardly sustain such term.
5 J. B. o7 j! C* d9 ?8 l' w" E0 J; XOn the other hand comes to my broad assertion that we do not have to suffer such long term at the same time conjure up a great grades inasmuch as we all know that efficiency on the simple basic that we make every efforts to concentrate on one thing will promote extraordinary. This simple reason can be demonstrated by the common experience like in today’s life students can always finish a complex game in a limited time while they have a lot of schoolwork to do and have no sense of mission and obligation to such thing. Accordingly, it is the great interest and infinite passion not matter of time they have to spend to successfully fulfill a job.8 n' _) T; P+ D. K1 V* d. x% I
Finally, as it mentioned above, given the health risk and ultimate efficiency, I strongly disagree students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studying.

语言用词什么的我的作文你也看了，都不是太好，所以我提不出什么好的意见。不过就结构逻辑而言，我觉得你这篇写的有点乱，点抓的不是很到位。望多多加强，加油！

wtnwinUID: 2764194

4.16 Nowadays there is a heated debate with soaring roaring whether government should invest more money in sports rather than in arts. While some individuals agree with the claim with respect to the physical exercise to human health and promotion to the awareness of health, from my prospect, I have to come to take exceptions when it comes to the most area of human spirit home.
Admittedly today’s sports seems appeal to contribute a lot to human physical health, when watching sports games, enjoying working in a team in your interesting sports, or just taking your muscle building program to show the authentic beautiful form as a human being, we improve our strength , stamina, speed, and flexibility by engaging in sports. At the same tine, we come to feel our empty that we would lack of passion and emotion as part of humanities inasmuch as we just play sports as means of promotion of level of our health.
Accordingly I must disagree with the claim which pandering the certain merit that sports do help people with health awareness while overlooks the certain disadvantages that paratively sports do disservice to the people notions of humanities. Therefore money invested in arts is a well investment for the whole country. For example, Canadian government assigns their higher priority to their film industry as a form of arts. This certainly not only lifts their public notions of arts but does a great booming in their economy. Meanwhile, as for the effectiveness of arts, it lift our spiritual world in our mind. In other word, when enjoying arts in its vast of forms, we become more charitable and have more willing to help others with less ego-centric. Accordingly, arts is not only to do with humanities but help with human essential development when public confront with different problems like violence, equality. And finally we become more harmonious.
In the final analysis, given the effectiveness of arts and the benefits of arts, I come to draw a conclusion that it is well investment to assign more social resources to arts to live a better society.