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241.The following appeared in a memo at the XYZ company.

"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those
employees assistance in creating resumès and developing interviewing
skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from
Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more
quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we
use the less-expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would
be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half
of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year.
Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and
larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients
took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took
nine."



This argument is well-presented but poor reasoning. With some logical flaws, I can not agree with it.
To begin with, it listed some benefits of paying DPF company. It said that laid-off employees have benefited greatly form Delany’s services, but it not mention the detail information about the laid-off employees. It was based on a false analogy. Maybe those who used Delany are those who with good skills or other talents, and employer prefer to hire them. On the contrary, those who did not use Delany are those who with low abilities. And many factors cause that situation happening.
In addition, another flaw reduce the convincing. The argument argued that eight years ago, they used Walsh Personnel Firm and only half of workers they laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Eight years-a so long time indeed, there are many things can occur to us. And it is ridiculers to judge its effective today according to last 8-year-experience. Maybe 8 years ago, it was hard for people to find job. Or maybe the hiring-market 8 years ago was less than nowadays.
More staff and larger number of branch offices is not the reason to support that Delany is clearly superior. Absent such evidence, it is to show the ability of its staff and quality of its branch offices. Maybe many of their staff is not very good at this job, only a few of them is elite. Or maybe many of their branch offices is aiming at earning money not real quality. And even those all are true, there is not evidence to reflect that it is helpful and superior.

Besides, whether 6 months or 9 months is an average value. It is presumptuous to define that Delany is more effective. Because this reasoning ignored the good grade in Walsh’s clients. There are many different factors affect on this research. Different simples, different time, different data and so forth.
In sum, this argument can not persuade me without vast and true evidence.
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发表于 2010-7-14 17:22:20 |只看该作者
1# 短发mm

This argument is well-presented but poor reasoning. With some logical flaws, I can not agree with it.
To begin with, it listed some benefits of paying DPF company. It said that laid-off employees have benefited greatly form Delany’s services, but it not mention
(!) the detail information about the laid-off employees. It was based on a false analogy. Maybe those who used Delany are those who with good skills or other talents, and employer prefer to hire them. On the contrary, those who did not use Delany are those who with low abilities. And many factors cause that situation happening.
In addition, another flaw reduces the convincing. The argument argued that eight years ago, they used Walsh Personnel Firm and only half of workers they laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Eight years-a so long time indeed, there are many things can occur to us. And it is ridiculers to judge its effective today according to last 8-year-experience. Maybe 8 years ago, it was hard for people to find job. Or maybe the hiring-market 8 years ago was less than nowadays.
More staff and larger number of branch offices is not the reason to support that Delany is clearly superior. Absent such evidence, it is to show the ability of its staff and quality of its branch offices. Maybe many of their staff is not very good at this job, only a few of them is elite. Or maybe many of their branch offices is aiming at earning money not real quality. And even those all are true, there is not evidence to reflect that it is helpful and superior.

Besides, whether 6 months or 9 months is an average value.
an average value 什么意思?) It is presumptuous to define that Delany is more effective. Because this reasoning(!) ignored the good grade in Walsh’s clients. There are many different factors affect on this research. Different simples, different time, different data and so forth.(再扩展一下会更好)
In sum, this argument can not persuade me without vast and true evidence.
(结尾段,一如既往的短,结尾段很重要哦,可以重申一下你的驳论点,所以不要轻视他)

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2# raysun77
an average value-平均值,学专业英语的时候老师多次强调measure, average value
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