【1010G8月AW小组】【我们的小组】【ISSUE159】by星月

zhangxingyueUID: 2851383

I totally agree with the statement that machines are just tools of human minds and should not be considered as the superior of human mind.

Nowadays, as the advanced improvement of technology, human beings are increasingly losing our independence towards the machines. For example, computers are now taken advantage of in almost every field of work, even the works where technology skills are least critical, the workers are required some computer ability. In one word, computers have replaced men in many works.
But the problem is that it seems some times when the computers are not available for some reasons, men will not do the job even it is within their capacity like counting, or referring a certain piece of knowledge through looking into a book rather than waiting till the computer and Internet are at hand. Just the same thing as our dependence on vehicles: you must some time in the past have experienced the anxiety of waiting a bus for work or school when the rolling in time is coming and you really do not want to be late, and suddenly, we realize that we ever have forgotten we can walk.




Obviously, the dependence of human minds on the computer and other machines
will be proved harmful for the development of the majority of human beings. It is not hard to imagine that when most of the thinking works become the responsibility of computers, human beings will lose numerous chances to exercise their minds like they do much more often before, when the computer were just something dispensable for work. Then things will be like this: most human beings suffer a discipline in their minds except the men who are engaged in the evolution of computer machines.
While the computers become more and more advanced, human minds become more and more vestigial, then one day people may fine they are working under the guidance of computers.

So here I am claiming that we should not rely on machines extremely, but certainly we cannot deny the great
convenience mechanization has bring about to human. Without the participation of machines in the work or social life, we would not enjoy such fantasy efficiency, like the assembly line of production, and the complex data dealing system. But we should never forget that despite all of the optimum convenience machines benefit us, they are designed to be tools of human’s and serve the greatest efficiency of producing and life.



To sum up, at one hand, we need to take the perseverance to accomplish higher and higher efficiency of work by consistently develop mechanization, and the other hand, we must be aware of the fact all the time that we are actually the superior of machines and never controllable by the machines in turn.

huashiyiqikeUID: 2674177

I totally agree with the statement that machines are just tools of human minds and should not be considered as the superior of human mind. 开头字数好像太少，可以在这里提出论点 Nowadays, as the advanced improvement of technology, human beings are increasingly losing our independence towards the machines. For example, computers are now taken advantage of in almost every field of work, even the works where technology skills are least critical, the workers are required some computer ability. In one word, computers have replaced men in many works. 缺中心句But the problem is that it seems some times when the computers are not available for some reasons, men will not do the job even it is within their capacity like counting, or referring a certain piece of knowledge through looking into a book rather than waiting till the computer and Internet are at hand. Just the same thing as our dependence on vehicles: you must some time in the past have experienced the anxiety of waiting a bus for work or school when the rolling in time is coming and you really do not want to be late, and suddenly, we realize that we ever have forgotten we can walk.这里论据和前面有重复，你没有更深层次的论证而是反复举例子，最后要升华，提出观点 Obviously, the dependence of human minds on the computer and other machines will be proved harmful for the development of the majority of human beings. It is not hard to imagine 这里可以举例论证，感觉这样写不够学术化 that when most of the thinking works become the responsibility of computers, human beings will lose numerous chances to exercise their minds like they do much more often before, when the computer were just something dispensable for work. Then things will be like this: most human beings suffer a discipline in their minds except the men who are engaged in the evolution of computer machines. While the computers become more and more advanced, human minds become more and more vestigial, then one day people may find they are working under the guidance of computers. So here I am claiming that we should not rely on machines extremely, but certainly we cannot deny the great convenience mechanization has bring about to human. Without the participation of machines in the work or social life, we would not enjoy such fantasy efficiency, like the assembly line of production, and the complex data dealing system. But we should never forget that despite all of the optimum convenience machines benefit us, they are designed to be tools of human’s and serve the greatest efficiency of producing and life. To sum up, at one hand, we need to take the perseverance ？to accomplish higher and higher efficiency of work by consistently develop mechanization, and on the other hand, we must be aware of the fact all the time that we are actually the superior of machines and never controllable by the machines in turn. 文章高级词汇使用得很漂亮，层次很清楚 要注意的是论证过程，要明确提出观点，并举出合适的例子说理证明 其实issue最好有保留的赞成或反对，但我们两个都剑走偏锋啊，呵呵，互相学习了，下次写就可以综合一下两方面的观点