issue 116

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TOPIC: ISSUE116 - "With the growth of global networks in such areas as economics and communication, there is no doubt that every aspect of society-including education, politics, the arts, and the sciences-will benefit greatly from international influences."
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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-24 17:02:22

Is it true that every aspect of society will benefit from international influences as the author suggested? In response to this issue, one needs to analyze it comprehensively and systematically. The assertion has some merits, which I agree with that many aspects of society will benefit from the international influences, while, after close consideration, the assertion is somehow flawed and defected, the author overlooks some challenges brought with the globalization.

First and foremost, there is no denying that international cooperation indeed brings about many advantages for human beings. By globalization, some topping inventions have been transmitted from nation to nation which make people's lives more effective and efficient. In addition, the cooperation between people from different nations can work together for better contributing for the whole world by sharing their experts. Typically in the field of science, after globalization, scientists from distinctive countries can work through internet solving the problems which influence the whole world, such as the depletion of ozone player, as this problem is deprived from the world level, that the sun radiation that effects both human beings and animals, and the main reason cause it is the usage of warming gases, while the scientists
from the different countries have work out methods that can be used world widely, thus help to relieve the destroy the problem and prevent people from the hazards of radiation. Further more, in the respect of education more students can have a further chance for further studying in foreign country, which is very rare in the past. In sum, international influences are indeed providing many advantages.

In the second place, despite the merits from the assertion, I disagree with it to some extent. For example, along with the globalization, especially in the realm of economy, as more and more commodities have been imported from other countries, which may also means there will a certain number of lower price and even higher qualified produces than native produces, than people might
prefer buying the importance rather than buying native produces. In return, the native economy can be seriously affected. What's more, globalization will also bring about a problem that an invariable confliction between peoples between distinctive cultures. It is more usual phenomenon that more and more people migrate to other nations either for job or for long-term living, as a matter of fact that a big influx of people always cause crime, not to say in anther nation with such different conflictions in minds, further more, the confliction might also influence a nation's value, the way of thinking, and also the construction of life style. From this point of view, it is reasonable to say that internationality also has brought people troubles.

Finally and may be the most importantly, it is the indispensable trend of being international. It can not be denied that internationality not only brings people benefits but also problems, while the significant point is how people deal with is. People should bridge a delicate balance between the benefits and problems and have a perspective in face of this relationship. It is wise to achieve advantages from the internationality, and also hold a right attitude to diminish the bad effects as it stands.
If people can handle the bad effects and challenges and learn from the effects and challenges, thus in the end adjusting the globalization, then the whole society will advance. To this certain respect, it is crucial to have a right insight into the effects both good and bad when facing globalization.

From the analysis above, I would like to commit to the optimal conclusion that not every aspect of society can all benefit from globalization, while what is more significant is to face this truth and adapt to the trend of international civilization, learn from the challenge from it. As internationality is a double edged sword, peoples should take every possible consideration into account when judging the influences brought with internationality.

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Is it true that every aspect of society will benefit from international influences as the author suggested? In response to this issue, one needs to analyze it comprehensively and systematically. The assertion has some merits, which I agree with that many aspects of society will benefit from the international influences, while, after close consideration, the assertion is somehow flawed and defected, the author overlooks some challenges brought with the globalization.(你这个头很禅啊,绕圈子绕得,我没有看明白你的观点)
First and foremost(你这个如果想表现最重要的意思前面要加个the,如果不是那就没有必要加,first就够了), there is no denying that international cooperation indeed brings about many advantages for human beings. By globalization, some topping inventions have been transmitted from nation to nation which make people's lives more effective and efficient. In addition, the cooperation between people from different nations can work together for better contributing for the whole world by sharing their experts. Typically in the field of science, after globalization, scientists from distinctive countries can work through internet solving the problems which influence the whole world, such as the depletion of ozone player, as this problem is deprived from the world level, that the sun radiation that effects both human beings and animals, and the main reason cause it is the usage of warming gases, while the scientists
from the different countries have work out methods that can be used world widely, thus help to relieve the destroy the problem and prevent people from the hazards of radiation. Further more, in the respect of education more students can have a further chance for further studying in foreign country, which is very rare in the past. In sum, international influences are indeed providing many advantages.(科学上带来好处)
In the second place, despite the merits from the assertion, I disagree with it to some extent. For example, along with the globalization, especially in the realm of economy, as more and more commodities have been imported from other countries, which may also means there will a certain number of lower price and even higher qualified produces than native produces, than people might
prefer buying the importance rather than buying native produces. In return, the native economy can be seriously affected. What's more, globalization will also bring about a problem that an invariable confliction between peoples between distinctive cultures. It is more usual phenomenon that more and more people migrate to other nations either for job or for long-term living, as a matter of fact that a big influx of people always cause crime, not to say in anther nation with such different conflictions in minds, further more, the confliction might also influence a nation's value, the way of thinking, and also the construction of life style. From this point of view, it is reasonable to say that internationality also has brought people troubles.(经济上带来危害)
Finally and may be the most importantly, it is the indispensable trend of being international. It can not be denied that internationality not only brings people benefits but also problems, while the significant point is how people deal with is. People should bridge a delicate balance between the benefits and problems and have a perspective in face of this relationship. It is wise to achieve advantages from the internationality, and also hold a right attitude to diminish the bad effects as it stands.
If people can handle the bad effects and challenges and learn from the effects and challenges, thus in the end adjusting the globalization, then the whole society will advance. To this certain respect, it is crucial to have a right insight into the effects both good and bad when facing globalization.
From the analysis above, I would like to commit to the optimal conclusion that not every aspect of society can all benefit from globalization, while what is more significant is to face this truth and adapt to the trend of international civilization, learn from the challenge from it. As internationality is a double edged sword, peoples should take every possible consideration into account when judging the influences brought with internationality.
其实感觉你的思路不错,但是没有讲清楚.我写文章每个方面都去分析,带来好处同时也带来坏处,这样可能在考虑上比较花时间.
但是我指出你一个首尾不一致的地方,你开头的观点说带来好处,你分析得时候写不是方方面面有好处,有的领域坏处比较明显,anyway,最后你总结带也合理,但是你这样的结构开头该题观点的时候你懵了,建议你把总结变成总起吧.不然感觉你的分析完全突不出你开头的观点.

还有你字数写得挺多的,我满羡慕