欢迎拍砖，拍者必回~高频Issue153【六人行小组7.29】by xyjprc

xyjprcUID: 2412778

非常抱歉把这篇习作拖了这么久，和我互改的同学久等了！
嗯，写了几篇之后，感觉的确不一样了，虽然我一直不限时，但用的时间越来越少了。
这是我写的第一篇“一边倒”的文章，可能还不太适应这种结构，whatever，使劲拍砖吧！谢谢~！

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 597
TIME: 01:15:09
DATE: 7/31/2010 11:09:22 AM

Nowadays, as competition is becoming fiercer for students, some of them begin to focus only on improving examination scores and do not doubt the knowledge they learned from teachers or textbooks. In my point of view, students should, instead of accepting what they are taught passively, question whatever they study and keep a skeptical mind. Skepticism could not only help students of their study, but also benefit the world of knowledge.

On one hand, students are able to acquire knowledge better by keeping certain skepticism to whatever they study. Teachers encourage students to doubt whatever they learn, not expecting the students are able to find a flaw in the well-refined axioms and theorems, but hoping the students could, in this way, comprehend the knowledge better. To question about what they are learned, students must first fully comprehend what they have learned already. They may review their textbooks and notebooks, re-deduce the theorems, and clarify the meaning of every parameter. In this process, they inadvertently go over their courses which at first they may not have clear idea about. The next step of doubting is to find the points to attack in these seemingly well-reasoned theorems. Students must learn relative knowledge extensively to figure out the point to attack, and the extra knowledge in their turn adds to what the students have already learned. Finally, students may fail in overthrow these axioms, but they have already benefited from this spirit of skepticism, which they would most probably keep as a habit to help with their study in the future. On the contrary, students who only accept whatever they are taught passively are sure to miss the benefits mentioned above, and may even find what the teacher keeps teaching dull and tragically gradually lose the interest of learning. Conclusively, students' questioning whatever they are taught instead of accepting it passively would significantly help them with their study.

On the other hand, culturing the students the spirit of skepticism would also benefit the world of knowledge in the future. Students would not always be students: they will grow up as engineers, scientists, doctors, lawyers and so on. As they have chosen their careers, it is their time to absorb, refine and develop knowledge in their fields. Only by doubting can a stemmed theory be overthrown and the newer and more perfect one takes the place, in which can knowledge progress. Aristotle, a Greek philosopher, proposed a comprehensive system of Western philosophy and his views on the physical sciences profoundly shaped medieval scholarship. He was so respected that long after his time seldom anyone dared to doubt his theories. However, Galileo doubted Aristotle's words that heavy objects would fall faster than lighter ones. Galileo conducted an experiment of dropping balls of the same material, but different masses, from the Leaning Tower of Pisa and demonstrated that their time of descent was independent of their mass. His spirit of skepticism not only enables him the title "the father of modern physics", but also brings about the time of classical mechanics, which was a great advance in science and added to the base of knowledge. As we could see, merely inheriting the knowledge of precursors would make no progress, while questioning whatever one learns is the way to contributing the world of knowledge and propelling the world from advancing.

To sum up, students, those with knowledge and would become ones actively participating in various majors, should proactively foster the spirit of skepticism, not only beneficial to themselves in their study, but also contributive to the world of knowledge.

odiehereUID: 2502172

Nowadays, as competition is becoming fiercer for students, some of them begin to focus only on improving examination scores and do not doubt the knowledge they learned from teachers or textbooks [我建议第一句的句式不要这样写。因为太多的四六级魔版都是这样开头的，所以估计已经用的很滥了。可以写成：the current society has witnessed an increasingly fierce competition among students...]. In my point of view, students should, instead of accepting what they are taught passively, question whatever they study and keep a skeptical mind. Skepticism could not only help students of[in] their study, but also benefit the world of knowledge[?不太明白].

On one hand, students are able to acquire knowledge better by keeping certain skepticism to whatever they study. Teachers [shall]encourage students to doubt whatever they learn, [but need not to expect? 这整个句子的语法好像不大对哦]not expecting the students are able to find a flaw in the well-refined axioms and theorems, but [shall instead hope 我不是完全明白这句想要表达的句义]hoping the students could, in this way, comprehend the knowledge better. To question about what they[have] are learned, students must first fully comprehend what they have learned already. They may review their textbooks and notebooks, re-deduce the theorems, and clarify the meaning of every parameter. In this process, they inadvertently go over their courses which at first they may not have clear idea about. The next step of doubting is to find the points to attack in these seemingly well-reasoned theorems. Students must learn relative[relavant] knowledge extensively to figure out the point to attack, and the extra knowledge in their[delete 'turn'] turn adds to what the students have already learned. Finally, students may fail in overthrow[ing] these axioms, but they have already benefited from this spirit of skepticism, which they would most probably keep as a habit to help with their study in the future. On the contrary, students who only accept whatever they are taught passively are sure to miss the benefits mentioned above, and may even find what the teacher keeps teaching dull and tragically gradually lose the interest of learning. Conclusively, students' questioning whatever they are taught instead of accepting it passively would significantly help them with their study[本段的长句太多了，看起来有点累，尤其是本来都是纯粹的论证，读者很可能不会耐心读下来。适当的长短句搭配是最好的。].

On the other hand, culturing [好像不能这么用]the students the spirit of skepticism would also benefit the world of knowledge [这样看来应该想表达的是the realm of science]in the future. Students would not always be students: they will grow up as engineers, scientists, doctors, lawyers and so on. As they have chosen their careers, it is their time to absorb, refine and develop knowledge in their fields. Only by doubting can a stemmed theory be overthrown and the newer and more perfect one takes the place, in which can knowledge progress[好像不必用倒装]. Aristotle, a Greek philosopher, proposed a comprehensive system of Western philosophy and his views on the physical sciences profoundly shaped medieval scholarship. He was so respected that long after his time seldom anyone dared to doubt his theories. However, Galileo doubted Aristotle's words that heavy objects would fall faster than lighter ones. Galileo conducted an experiment [to drop]of dropping balls of the same material, but different masses[weight?], from the Leaning Tower of Pisa and demonstrated that their time of descent [falling]was independent of their mass. His spirit of skepticism not only enables him the title "the father of modern physics", but also brings about the time of classical mechanics, which was a great advance in science and added to the base of knowledge. As we could see, merely inheriting the knowledge of precursors would make no progress, while questioning whatever one learns is the way to contributing the world of knowledge and propelling the world from advancing. [我个人还是更喜欢有实例的论证，所以会认为这一段比上一段有力。当然我也要提醒自己例子要简洁，类似北美范文那样一个论点由一系列的简短例子支持我认为是最好的，关键是才疏学浅没那么多积累呀。。。]

To sum up, students, those with knowledge and would become ones actively participating in various majors, should proactively foster the spirit of skepticism, 【which is】not only beneficial to themselves in their study, but also contributive to the world of knowledge.

bluefishorUID: 2866600

正文第一段除长句太多（看着累），还有代词的选择上我觉得的they和students太多了。不一定要主谓宾的格式，那样可以让代词更加多变。
一楼的观点蛮好的，我也喜欢用简短的例子来说，毕竟写多了容易出篓子。
其实我觉得本题目中的whatever好像太绝对了，但是前面又有一个certain。就是说我们应该对任何事保持一定的怀疑，这样说来整句话是没什么问题的。但是我写的时候加了一段，说不能过度怀疑，如果这样就可能变为纯粹的怀疑论者。不知道合理不？

xyjprcUID: 2412778

2# odiehere

嗯~~~谢谢Odie的批改~受益很多呀~

xyjprcUID: 2412778

3# bluefishor

个人感觉是可以的，第一盲目的怀疑会浪费许多时间和精力，第二特别是小孩子，要完成知识的原始积累再引导他们去怀疑，不然他们的怀疑都是没有方向没有意义的。