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发表于 2010-8-1 20:50:34 |显示全部楼层

I103"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

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As a path leading to human past, the study of history examines, analyzes, and reproduces historical events, which is undeniably of vital importance to both our spectacular everyday life and micro social development. The argument makes a biased assertion in restricting the meaning of historical research merely to the connection with our daily lives.

To start off, historical research leads us pass though time and space to approach the original human society, comprehend the culture transformation, and uncover the potential rules. By resorting to printed materials or unearthed discoveries, historians vividly exhibit the ancient social system and life style. Even statutes of prehistoric society—chipping flints to get fire, making bows and arrows—are available for us due to historical study. Also, the research on history serves as a mirror to reflect the human culture and mind. For instance, historians find that the ancient Native Americans performed group dances with painted faces and decorated clothes to cast out the devils on the sick, which indicates people’s warship in supper nature forces in prescientific era. What is more, principles rooted in the historical evens and cultural phenomenon could also be uncovered by the historians. It is the study of the factors influencing the collapses of many dynasties that helps people realize the importance of democracy.

Because of the functions of historical examination mentioned above, we can benefit a lot in daily life, especially in such an Information Age. Exposed to all kinds of media each day, not only can we watch TV programs based on historic stories, but also read biographies on figures in history. All these historical resources are instrumental in the establishment our social values and outlook on life. Take a popular book, Diana: the Queen of Britain, for example. Diana’s charitable behavior toward impoverished children described in the book gets many readers moved and to care about the poor kids. On the other hand, many historical programs function as our daily entertainment and help us kill the spare time. One apt case related is the film: Cold Mountain, which is about a beautiful love story happened during the American Civil War. Of course, the back ground, of the story--the Civil War--is based on the historians’ research, and then introduced to our daily life by the screen.

However, the value of historical study goes far more than the relevant of our daily life. It works as an arrow penetrating the ancient, modern, and future to help social organizations and the nation to clearly understand the situation and avoid repeating mistakes committed by our predecessors. From a certain perspective, the MBA cases are a vast history of previous business’ trials and errors. Relying on these cases, entrepreneurs analyze their companies’ current situation and make better future plans. The same is true when it comes to a nation. Lots of counties’ original economic growth was realized by the sacrifice of natural environment, which resulted in terrible environmental disasters. Learning from this miserable history, they begun to realize the importance of environmental coherence and set environment-friendly society as a goal.

In conclusion, as a result of historical study’s function of revealing the past, it plays a crucial role in both our daily life and other deeper respects related to social improvement.

还年轻,还有梦,要努力!↖(^ω^)↗

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As a path leading to human past [leading to the past], the study of history examines, analyzes, and reproduces historical events, which is undeniably of vital importance to both our spectacular [specific? Micro?] everyday life and micro [macro]social development. The argument makes a biased assertion in restricting the meaning [significance]of historical research merely to the [its] connection with our daily lives.
To start off, historical research leads us pass though time and space to approach the original human society, comprehend the culture transformation, and uncover the potential rules. By resorting to printed materials or unearthed discoveries, historians vividly exhibit the ancient social system and life style. Even statutes of prehistoric society[是说原始社会的生存法则么?不太明白哦]—chipping flints to get fire, making bows and arrows—are available for us due to historical study. [这部分的论证是说history study 跟我们的daily life 是什么关系呢?好像不是很切题哦]Also, the research on history serves as a mirror to reflect the human culture and mind. For instance, historians find that the ancient Native Americans performed group dances with painted faces and decorated clothes to cast out the devils on the sick, which indicates people’s warship in supper nature forces in prescientific era [哈 这个素材好像来源于t的阅读加试吧]. What is more, principles rooted in the historical evens and cultural phenomenon could also be uncovered by the historians. It is the study of the factors influencing the collapses of many dynasties that helps people realize the importance of democracy[我觉得最后这个例子是最贴近题意的,可惜没能展开].
Because of the functions of historical examination [study?] mentioned above, we can benefit a lot in daily life, especially in such an Information Age. Exposed to all kinds of media each day, not only can we watch TV programs based on historic stories, but also read biographies on figures in history. All these historical resources are instrumental in the establishment [of] our social values and outlook on life. Take a popular book, Diana: the Queen of Britain, for example. Diana’s charitable behavior toward impoverished children described in the book gets many readers moved and to care about the poor kids. On the other hand, many historical programs function as our daily entertainment and help us kill the spare time. One apt case related is the film: Cold Mountain, which is about a beautiful love story happened during the American Civil War. Of course, the back ground, of the story--the Civil War--is based on the historians’ research, and then introduced to our daily life by the screen [我喜欢这一段 论证很充分 值得学习].
However, the value of historical study goes far more than the relevant of [goes far beyond its relevance to ] our daily life. It works as an arrow penetrating the ancient, modern, and future to help social organizations and the nation to clearly understand the situation and avoid repeating mistakes committed by our predecessors. From a certain perspective, the MBA cases are a vast history of previous business’ trials and errors. Relying on these cases, entrepreneurs analyze their companies’ current situation and make better future plans. The same is true when it comes to a nation. Lots of counties’ original economic growth was realized by [lots of our social and economical accomplishment were coupled with/came along with]the sacrifice of natural environment, which resulted in terrible environmental disasters. Learning from this miserable history, they begun to realize the importance of environmental coherence and set [the building of ] environment-friendly society as a goal.
In conclusion, as a result of historical study’s function of revealing the past, it plays a crucial role in both our daily life and other deeper respects related to social improvement.
[这是一篇相当不错的文章我认为。我比较欣赏论证的方式和实例的组织。我现在觉得应该改变一下自己大段实例论证的思路了,应该用一系列简洁的例子尽可能从多方面支持论点看来会更加有力。
但是就本文具体内容来讲,我觉得第二段的论证不够成功。这可能是跟你文章总论点的定调有关。就我看来你应该是大体同意statement的观点的,所以不必在第一段那么的skeptical,不然读者读下去可能会感到困惑,你自己在写第一段的时候也显然选择的例子也不是太贴切吧。因为第一段好像主要是讲history studies的研究对象和作用,但你并没有进一步讲它与日常生活的作用。 我个人看法哦。]

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发表于 2010-8-2 11:15:06 |显示全部楼层
第一段:开头
第二段:历史研究的作用
第三段:由于这些作用,历史能在日常生活中起作用
第四段:由于这些作用,历史能在更深层面的组织、国家中起作用
第五段:总结
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