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发表于 2010-8-12 22:01:57 |显示全部楼层
这篇文章写得比较勉强,已开始都不知道该怎么写好~~
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life



Whether others clearly know one's achievements and strengths or not may not be prerequisite for one to reach his or her success. While, most of people are eager to spread their accomplishments all over the world, because people would like to win others' applaud and appreciation. In fact , such mundane behavior have nothing to do with true success.



Those who believe others' acknowledgement is necessary to gain success may put fame and wealth on the first place. In those people's view, success equals to the upgradation of reputation, social status and money. Without the acknowledgement from others, especially those critical people, it is hard to obtain those wonderful results which can represent one's success. Moreover, social competition becomes increasingly pierce,  people have to struggle to show their advantages to others so as to stand out and gain more opportunities.


It seems that making sure others acquaint one's merits and accomplishments is an effective way to get material success . However,real success need not any outside recognization to justify it. Actually, success is some mental condition that one is satisfying with his or her accomplishments. If people can make progress to exceed themselves in yesterday, even if no one knows,their success still exist. Whether people can realize their goals primarily depends on their own endeavor. For example, Van Gogh never strived to make sure other people know his works, although his contemporaries did not speak highly of him, those wonderful masterpieces proved his success. Sometimes, others' acknowledgement may inhibit one's success. Take William Harvey for example, when he found the circulation of blood around the body, the influential people did not support him, but repress him to continue his research. Thus, under some circumstances,  one's success would not be impeded without other's knowledgement.



In addition , fame and wealth are only the subsequent accompaniment of success. Only after one has already achieved some feat can they have the chance to gain others' approval. So others' acquaitance just determines one's popularity , not the true value of his or her accomplishments.




All in all, success is not the outcome of propogation. Indeed, whether people can reach success is totally determined by themselves. If they regard reputation and social status as the indication of success, less acknowledgement from others would be kind of failure.  However, real successful people do not assess success in such way, they consider success as an individual breakthrough and have no relation to general popularity.





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发表于 2010-8-13 11:19:36 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-8-13 13:57:59 |显示全部楼层
额~~impede不是激发的意思

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发表于 2010-8-13 14:30:32 |显示全部楼层
感谢楼主

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发表于 2010-8-14 14:44:19 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-8-15 01:23:59 |显示全部楼层
好巧哈,又是我们一组,;P

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发表于 2010-8-15 02:20:20 |显示全部楼层
好困啊~~~睡觉了:sleepy:

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发表于 2010-8-15 18:51:33 |显示全部楼层
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谢谢修改~~

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8.19作业~

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8.17星期二作业

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发表于 2010-8-18 00:42:18 |显示全部楼层
已经修改完毕,如有不妥,敬请见谅!!!

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不放弃,不灰心

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发表于 2010-8-18 09:22:23 |显示全部楼层
改好了

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Sports teaches us lessons about life.

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Compared with today's convenience and effectiveness of modern life, yesterday seems isolated and monotonous. We have to thank for the quick development of modern technology. Although telephone and television both significantly contribute to improve human's life, their respective effects differentiate in some aspects. Generally, telephone plays more huge influence than television at least in three respects. (开头很好哦~)

The effects of telephone exist in almost every aspect in our life. In common life, telephone becomes an indispensible(拼写错误) instrument. Especially after the occurence(这个拼写不常用吧,加个r貌似比较常见) of mobile phone, instant communication further promotes the effectiveness and convenience of our daily life. For businessmen, they can hold their teleconference by videophone without consideration of geographical factors. Similarly, telephones are widely used in industry and government. Although televisons(这个拼写不常用吧,television貌似比较常见) are also utilized commercially, they are mainly regarded as house appliances. Most people watch TV particularly just as a source of entertainment and news. Obviously, the application of television cannot compete with that of telephone.

Another merit of telephone is its interaction. Television (这里是telephone吧) is two-way communication---people can talk with others. While television sends information unidirectionally and people just sit in fron(front) if(of) TV set to receive moving images and sound. There is no information exchanging between audiences and televisions. Due to such limitation of television, it can not affect human' life giganticly like telephone does. (观点不错哦~)

Recently, with the advent of various cellphones, telephone is not just a communication tool, but also connecting with popular culture. Such phenomenon is extremely common in young people's life. People choosing a cellphone concentrates(people主语,应该没s吧) both its function and its apprearance(拼写错误). Cellphone gradually becomes kind of fashion. For example, people use cellphone to read fiction, send email, listen to music and play games. It seems that having a cellphone our life will be more colorful.(这句话有点怪,倒装?) To gain cool experience, many people are eager to buy up-to-date cellphones and the upgrading rate of them is constantly increasing. For television, such cultural effects seems(是不是应该没s?) subtle.(标点后面少个空格)Besides visual effects , people seldom consider other factors of television.(最后一句的观点值得商榷,电视也很潮~)

Based on these three respects, telephone has more effects than television in altering people's way of life. Not surprisingly, the number of phone users is continuously rising.  Perhaps in the future there will be more fantastic changes with the development of these modern machines. (结尾挺好的)

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