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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Most businesspeople are motivated only by the desire for more money.(Money)


Business, which primarily does with trades and economics, has brought the society a lot of prosperity. People benefit a lot from business: they can buy a huge amount of commodities more conveniently than before, they can try new things from abroad, and most importantly, business men earn a lot of money during the trades. Therefore, business is always described as a work which takes people from being poor to rich. Do these businesses are launched because of business people's desire of the money? For my part, I have to say that, most of the business are aiming the money as their ultimately goal, else nothing, however, we can be too extreme when we are considering this issue, there are a small part of business people who view business as their interest.
    As the business is highly developed today, money is the most valuable things for people. People can use money to trade whatever they want. Since business is considered to be an affair that tightly connected with money, undoubtedly, people who decide to start a career of business are heading to the potential money. I still remember once I go back to my hometown and see my little nephew, and I asked him what he wanted to be in a future. He just spilt out without hesitation: 'I want to be a business man', then I ask why. He said:”business man can earn a lot money”. We can't deny that a lot of people's dream and aspiration have long been formed since they are little, which might be the very origin of the motivation of a business man.
   Business man's purpose is always to maximize the profits. Business men try a lot of activities to maximize these profits. They try to reduce the cost of producing the product, and increase the price. To reduce the cost, business people adopt assemble-line, and to increase the revenue, advertisements are used as a means of expanding the market. What's more, business men are trying to monopoly the whole market to gain the maximal profit, regardless of whether their products worth the price. To gain money, some business men even do something that out of morality. For example, to satisfy people's natural requirement of detecting privacy of the entertainment stars, the media company exaggerates some of the entertainment stars privacy and even defame them by some unreal facts, only to gain the popularity, and thus money.
   Although most of the business men weigh money over any other things, there are a group of talents whose natural interest are focusing on trading and running big companies. The CEO of fort, based on his interest of business, only takes an annual salary of 1 dollar. And Bill Gates, the CEO of the Microsoft, the biggest IT company in the world, donating a large portion of him money to the charity affairs. Thanks for his wise invention of the operating system Windows, which brings us so convenient lives. His initial thought of running the company merely is to expand his idea of personal computer, not the money.
   In sum, I insist that most of the businessmen orient money, but we cannot ignore those talents whose interests are purely on the contribution of the society and overall people.

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1# jianndqin
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8 月 17 日作业


Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Students who can keep their own rooms organized are more likely to succeed.　　(Education)



We always judge people from some specific trivial things. Some people think students whose rooms are well-organized are more like to succeed, while some people do not agree. Personally, I think, excluding some particular genius, to the overall general students, students with their room carefully organized are better prepared to be successful.

These students who organized their rooms very well may prepare a good sense of management. As we know, there are a lot of stuffs in a student’s room, such as toys, clothes, and books. They categorize their clothes and books in order, which facilitates them to find what they want easily. Considering  this sense of arrangement on their clothes and books, we can't deny that they may have a potentially much stronger ability to survive in a department of management.

These students also reveal a sense of earnest and strict. They seriously demand themselves not to be slipshod all the things, even it is their own room. They don't allow any part to be confusing, they distinguish biology books and chemical books very well, even though there are some correlations between them. What's more, they don't even give any permission to the dirty and dust, which means that they are strict to themselves, allowing no spots and disorder in their room. For that matter, I believe they absolutely are careful with the errors in their studies and work, just like how they treat the dusts and disorder.

One might argue that some people, such as the famous mathematician Euler, has a very massy room with disordered books and materials, but his success was undisputable. Yet, I might say, these great people are born to be genius, they cannot represent the general people, hence they don't need to practice their sense of organization. In addition, perhaps, if they organize well, increasing their efficiency on daily lives, they might gain huger success.

Fundamentally, to general students, a well ordered room managed by themselves can contribute a sense of macro control and self constraint to their personality, which are very crucial for them to be a successful figure in the society.




Tpo1

In this lecture, the professor talks about the new policy of the company suggesting that the new policy of switching a five-day work to four-day work, where four-day work workers obtain 80 percent salary of the 5-day worker's. He says that the the consequence policy might go on a contrary way to the expectation of the policy.

In the first place, the new policy may cut down the profits of the company. Hiring employee is costly. The company has to spend money on the new workers' training, new office place, and their medical benefits, what's more, the money are the same regardless of whether the worker is a four-day worker or five-day worker. These cost talked above, may undoubtedly increase the cost of the company, thus reduce the profit. This directly in the opposite direction as the reading passage expected.

In the second place, the policy may not create new jobs. Since the cost of hiring a new work is very high, the company may demand those four-day workers to do the same work they are supposed to do in five days. Therefore, the number of the workers is the same, but the work is even more unpleasant. This shows another contradictory opinion to the reading passage.

In the third place, this new policy may decrease the workers quality of life. The new policy would aggravate the job instability and lose a lot of advantage the five-day workers have. The four-day workers are more easily to be fired, and more difficult to get advancement and promotion to the manager, as managers are supposed to work long to ensure a consistent supervision on all of the workers. In this case, the point in the reading passage that four-day workers will have improvements in their quality of life seems to be seriously attacked.

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Tpo1


In this lecture, the professor talks about
the new policy of the company suggesting that the new policy of <前后重复用词>switching a five-day work to four-day work, where <为啥用where啊?>four-day work workers obtain 80 percent salary of the 5-day worker's. He says<我觉得还是少用say这样的词吧 就直接说disagree或者support> that the the consequence policy might go on a contrary way to the expectation of the policy.


In the first place, the new policy may cut down the profits of the company. Hiring employee is costly. The company has to spend money on the new workers' training, new office place, and their medical benefits, what's more, the money are the same regardless of whether the worker is a four-day worker or five-day worker<这句有点不通顺>. These cost talked above, may undoubtedly increase the cost of the company, thus reduce the profit. This directly in the opposite direction as the reading passage expected<总结的好!:)>.


In the second place, the policy may not create new jobs. Since the cost of hiring a new work is very high, the company may demand those four-day workers to do the same work they are supposed to do in five days. Therefore, the number of the workers is the same, but the work is even more unpleasant. This shows another contradictory opinion to the reading passage<赞!>.

In the third place, this new policy may decrease the workers quality of life. The new policy would aggravate the job instability and lose a lot of advantage the five-day workers have. The four-day workers are more easily to be fired, and more difficult to get advancement and promotion to the manager, as managers are supposed to work long to ensure a consistent supervision on all of the workers. In this case, the point in the reading passage that four-day workers will have improvements in their quality of life seems to be seriously attacked.

写的非常好! 每段最后的一句都很好! 我非常喜欢
感觉 越到后面写的越好了呢
学习了

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In this lecture, the professor talks about the new policy of the company suggesting that the new policy->idea of switching a five-day work to four-day work, where four-day work workers obtain 80 percent salary of the 5-day worker's. He says that the the consequence policy might go on a contrary way to the expectation of the policy.1 `( {# @/ _3 k" J# e# p1 u

In the first place, the new policy may cut down the profits of the company. Hiring employee is costly. The company has to spend money on the new workers' training, new office place, and their medical benefits, what's more, the money are the same regardless of whether the worker is a four-day worker or five-day worker->the expense will expand with so many employees. These cost talked above, may undoubtedly increase the cost of the company, thus reduce the profit. This directly in the opposite direction as the reading passage expected.

In the second place, the policy may not create new jobs. Since the cost of hiring a new work is very high, the company may demand those four-day workers to do the same work they are supposed to do in five days. Therefore, the number of the workers is the same->有点绝对，改为may not increase, but the work is even more unpleasant. This shows another contradictory opinion to the reading passage.( e* p& ^& x& l  v5 ~" v
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In the third place, this new policy may decrease the workers quality of life. The new policy would aggravate the job instability and lose a lot of advantage the five-day workers have. The four-day workers are more easily to be fired, and more difficult to get advancement and promotion to the manager, as managers are supposed to work long to ensure a consistent supervision on all of the workers. In this case, the point in the reading passage that four-day workers will have improvements in their quality of life seems to be seriously attacked.NICE!
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修改好了

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感觉好像比较空。。。谢谢批改
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Sports teach us lessons about life.

Sport plays an important role in people's life: some people do sports to keep health, and some make it as a fun. Do sports give us merely a way for relax and keep health? A portion of people think it no more than games, but others think it teaches us a lot. In my opinion, I would have to say that sports give us more than just a game, and different sports give us different lessons.
    Marathon teaches us how to be consistent. As we know, Marathon is a contest not only requires s a strong ability of running, but also demands enough physical force. Contestants in the game all want to undoubtedly gain the champion, but what they are eager for more, is the experience of finish that journey. There are a lot of people who take part in this game, and most of them don't have the physical condition to attain the first place. However, these people who hold a clear sense that they will never win the game still join the game, because they hold the faith that they will reach the termination. Facing this situation, one of the most famous winners in Marathon says:"this is the true spirit Marathon, it teaches us never say no to ourselves".
    Table tennis teaches us to be careful and alert. The table is very small, so players should be very meticulous for their every attack and defense. Any mistakes or being absent-minded, no matter how tiny it is, would lead to a failure of the whole game. Therefore, during the practice, players have to excise the skills of the game, and most importantly, the sense of being concentrative. This illustrates that we should be cautious of every mistake, perhaps it is fatal.
    Basketball teaches us cooperation. The victory attributes to the collaboration of the whole team, and the failure must attribute the players who are being individual. Players who got points must have obtained assistant from other players. A great sense of cooperation will make the ways of attacking more flexible and aggressive, which make the adversary more vulnerable. Piston is team without any super star, but a good sense of cooperation lead it to be one of the strongest team in the East of the America. Thereby, If we want to gain success just like basketball players do, we should learn to work on groups.
    Different sports have their own characteristics. No matter what the sport is, it is an indispensable part of our life, for it gives us fun, keeps us far from the disease, and most essentially, it teaches us principles of how to be successful in our lives.


综合写作
Tpo2
The lecturer are talking about the sense of teamwork, which are described as a crucial way to improve the efficiency of the work in the reading passage, He
totally disagrees with the reading passage.
    In the first place, there are "free riders" in the team, who contribute nothing to the whole team, but share the same honor when the work is successfully
finished. For that matter, the real contributor will never be named since the whole glory is distributed to every member in the team. Considering the
existence of such free rider and unfair result, the real contributor may not work hard to head for success, which means the work done by the team are even
worse than that done by the real contributor himself/herself. This contradicts the opinion in the reading passage that the real contributor will 'shine' more
in the teamwork.
    In the second place, teamwork may slow down the progress. There are numerous meetings to take before they reach a consensus. What's more, there is always
one or two influencers in the team, and once they reject some proposal, then the plan have to start over. In this situation, it might go a contrary way to
what the reading passage expected.
    In the third place, the work may be less creative. Once some influential people in the team have come out some creative idea, and insist to run the idea,
ignoring other's rejection. As long as this work failed, all of the team members will be responsible for the mistake. In this case, most of the team members
will not easily to agree the creative opinions. This shows another direct opposite view as the reading passage suggests.

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dear,

你这作文贴成了 断崖 的格式???

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如果下回能贴上附件 那就更好了 如果等级不够 可以灌水 如果实在懒 那也行啊

Tpo2
The lecturer are talking about the sense of teamwork, which are described as a crucial way to improve the efficiency of the work in the reading passage, Het totally disagrees with the reading passage.

In the first place, there are "free riders" in the team, who contribute nothing to the whole team, but share the same honor when the work is successfully finished. For that matter, the real contributor will never be named since the whole glory is distributed to every member in the team<我觉得稍稍有些不妥 应该是to the team as a whole吧...>. Considering the existence of such free rider and unfair result, the real contributor may not work hard to head for success, which means the work done by the team are even worse than that done by the real contributor himself/herself. <这个内容我没听出来 不会吧...听力忒差了 我.>This contradicts the opinion in the reading passage that the real contributor will 'shine' more in the teamwork.

    In the second place, teamwork may slow down the progress. There are numerous meetings to take before they reach a consensus. What's more, there is always one or two influencers in the team, and once they reject some proposal, then the plan have to start over<这个词组是重新来一遍的意思吧? 是结束的意思吗?>. In this situation, it might go a contrary way to what the reading passage expected.

    In the third place, the work may be less creative. Once some influential people in the team have come out some creative idea, and insist to run the idea, ignoring other's rejection. As long as this work failed, all of the team members will be responsible for the mistake. In this case, most of the team members will not easily to agree the creative opinions. This shows another direct opposite view as the reading passage suggests.

写的非常好! 句式丰富 用词地道!

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12# longxue26

呵呵，下次我写成附件

恩，那个地方我是想说重来一遍，因为屡屡被否定，就要重来～～  感觉 reading passage 里面说的东西 没有直接批驳每个点，我就往下顺了一下，也不知道行不行～～

那个点好像听力里面没有呢，我是顺着他的点说了一下，以达到批驳他的目的， 不知道可不可以～。。

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With the rapid advance of the technology, our life are affected much today. Telephone and Television, as typical products of the technology, has made our life easier and more comfortable than before. Some people think telephone is more influential, whereas others think it the TV which contributes more to our modern life. In my point of view, as they promote different facets of our lives, it's hard to make the comparison, and I believe that our modern life attributes the same to both of them.

Since the World War 2, telephones have been functioned as a way to keep touch with other people. Today, nearly each of the people in the society has their own cell phone. We use telephone to communicate with our friends, and children who study far away from their parents can always tell their parents about their situation. What's more, it also facilitates our life much. I still remember, when I was a little child, there are very few telephone in my city. My parents and me will go to visit my grandma every week, but she always went out for jogging, or go to the park to excise. Sometimes, we arrived at her house, but found she wasn't home, so we have to go back. It was really tired for us to go back and forth since it was a long distance between our house and my grandma's house. Several years later, when we both have telephones, we just call her before we set off, to ensure whether she's home. Then we will never face the situation that when we got there, she isn't at home.

When it comes to the television, it makes our life full and more colorful. News reports give us a short view of the events happen in our country and abroad. We can enjoy movies at home, spending our evening our on classic drama. English Channel provides a brilliant platform for us to improve our English. Moreover, we can set the live telecast of the Olympics games, including the wonderful process of competition, but not only read the news paper to get the result alone as before.

All in all, telephone enhances our relationships, and TV brings more information and joy. It is difficult to judge whether information and joy are more important, or relationships are more essential. Without relationship, we will feel lonely, without information and joy, our life will be dull. Therefore, I think both of them donate the same to our well-being in modern lives.



Tpo 3

The speaker talks about a painting known as Portrait of an Elderly Woman in While Bonnet, which is considered not to be Rembrandt's work in the reading passage, and the speaks agree that the description of the painting in the reading passage is right, but close examination of the portrait reveals that it is Rembrandt's product.

In the first place, the result of X-ray of the color of the painting shows that 100 years after the paints was conducted, someone has redrawn the painting, which means that the orignal one has notice the consistency of the painting. This illustrates the evidence provided by the reading passage.

In the second place, since the painting has been redrawn by someone else, the color the of the collar was not original. And the X-ray shows the original color of the collar fitted very well with the light on the woman's face. This reveals a contradictory evidence as the reading passage gives.

In the third place, close scrutiny has shown that the painting was drawn in a single panel, and the painting was broken by someone and glued together intentionally, in order to increase the value of the painting. What's more, another piece of evidence supports this: the pieces of panel come from the same tree from which another panel which carries a portrait of Rembrandt himself was. This evidence goes in an opposite way as the speaker expects.

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14# jianndqin

你好 综合写作看完了