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5 b, P& }+ A4 ~- Y: R9 V09.05.30NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.( T# o# w/ [" Z9 ^
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Nowadays, youth education has become a widely-concerned topic. Some, ( those who ) holding the view that the students in primary school should only learn several fundamental subjects like math, science, history and language, claim that younger students should have less study burden in order to make their childhood more relaxed. Nevertheless, I conceded this opinion. Children, from my perspective, have the necessity to take courses of art and music additionally, considering the fact that it could make a contribution to the cultivation of their aesthetic sense(这个短语不常见,如果没查词典就能写,那很厉害了) and the exploration of their potential talent.
/ x. x% p- m m, S' MPrimarily, it is universally acknowledged that art and music are the crystallization of human wisdom and experience, which embody the liberty of thoughts, the culture of human beings and the value of life.(词用得深,但是有中文思维的迹象) Therefore, students, especially younger students in primary school, ought to have an access to art and music and through the education, they can attain a more comprehensive perception of art and music, which contributes to cultivation of connoisseurship. Moreover, it is a common sense that, with the better appreciation of art and music, one possesses a stronger sense of recognition of the beauty of life, thereby cherishing their life better.0 z" C5 W9 O1 W- j _' k
Lending more credibility to my point of view, (这句话倒很新鲜)it is a provident decision for children to have comprehensive venture in a variety of areas to find out what they may have potentials for. According to some authoritative researches, how children behave in early-year education can be a significant revelation to their future career. In art or music classes, the intrinsic talent of students can be unearthed with high probability, by which they attain a broaden eyesight when choosing their career. On (这里要加个the)contrary, many people, who are actually talented in art or music, fail to continue their art or music dreams and give in to ordinary social work unfortunately due to the lack of relevant education when they are young.% s$ v: r0 W. b# Z
Admittedly, too much study burden at a young age, which inevitably crowded out playing time, would possibly ruin one’s childhood and the reality is that more and more parents are busy arranging their children to attend a lot of courses, expecting them to grow into a versatile mixture of Einstein and Van Gogh. But if parents and schools have an access to arouse children’s interest on art or music, which is a simple task in most cases, the young will enjoy their learning as a delight, or, moreover, study the other subjects efficiently. Anyway, in conclusion, the additional education of art and music for younger students is necessary for a promising future.
总体感觉用词古奥,但是层次不太清晰。
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