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9月23日交

09.04.03NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries.

Judging from a recent statistic on the internet, the number of people believing that the best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries occupies 75 percent of Chinese people, and unquestionably has the trend of increasing. But, there are still some
people putting another plan ahead of salaries, for they deam that this will influence the cash country used in other aspects and more money may not be useful. In my point of view, I stand on the
ground with most people.

Besides, as far as I am concerned, increasing teachers' salaries will not have a bad effect on the money used in other ways. Our country has a rough system controlling the entire economy in order not to destroy the balance of the money in different districts, which means if they put more money on teachers, they still have the ability to keep running others without producing the poverty. Under this kind of protection, we have no need to worry about how the government manages the money and the tax we hand. For example, in 2002, Tianjin teachers' salaries was increased, after that, there was no bad condition of economy
in other parts of China. With those strong evidence, what would you think? I deem you would choose my perspective.


Besides, more salaries is absolutely useful, especially dealing with the teachers. As we all know, the most essential purpose that keeps people working is the money. People will be happy if they earn enough money they deserve, which means they are able to do a better job with the attracting money. The same as the teachers, after they are satisfied , deep down, they would enjoy teaching so that the quality of education will be improved . Let me take my teachers as a example, my English teacher called Lihua, after she earned
twice the money as before, she taught us more, even about the history of America!

As a matter of fact, increasing the salaries does have some shortcoming. Such as leading a situation that more and more people begin to work as a teacher just because of the money which can make them rich easily, and teachers may have to work their head off , for the more money they earn, the more people expect them, which means their pressure would not, definitely, be vented easily.


To sum it up, new students are our future. To accomplish that, the quality of education can not be omitted, which means it is necessary to increase teachers' salaries. Though, this plan has some shortcomings, compared with the benefits, it can be ignored.  What’s more, we can figure out a way to solve the problems in the future.

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Judging from a recent statistic on the internet, the number of people believing that the best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries occupies 75 percent of Chinese people, and unquestionably has the trend of increasing.(第一句话太长会使整段都头重脚轻) But, there are still some# p3=people putting another plan（？） ahead of salaries, for they deam that this will influence the cash country used in other aspects and more money may not be useful. In my point of view, I stand on the ground with most people.
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Besides, as far as I am concerned, increasing teachers' salaries will not have a bad effect on the money used in other ways. Our country has a rough（？） system controlling the entire economy in order not to destroy the balance of the money in different districts, which means if they put more money on teachers, they still have the ability to keep running others without producing the poverty.（句子太长就分成几句来讲吧） Under this kind of protection, we have no need to worry about how the government manages the money and the tax we hand. For example, in 2002, Tianjin teachers' salaries was increased, after that, there was no bad condition of economy in other parts of China（因该讲Tianjin经济没受影响吧）. With those strong evidence, what would you think? I deem you would choose my perspective.

Besides, more salaries is absolutely useful, especially dealing with the teachers. As we all know, the most（one）
essential purpose that keeps people working is the money. People will be happy if they earn enough money they deserve, which means they are able to do a better job with the attracting money. The same as the teachers, after they are satisfied, deep down, they would enjoy teaching so that the quality of education will be improved. Let me take my teachers as a example, my English teacher called Lihua, after she earned twice the money as before, she taught us more, even about the history of America!（And this is not a rare case,….）



As a matter of fact, increasing the salaries does have some shortcoming. Such as leading a situation that more and more people begin to work as a teacher just because of the money which can make them rich easily, and teachers may have to work their head off, for the more money they earn, the more people expect them, which means their pressure would not, definitely, be vented easily.

To sum it up, new (?) students are our future. To accomplish that, the quality of education can not be omitted, which means it is necessary to increase teachers' salaries. Though, this plan has some shortcomings, compared with the benefits, it can be ignored.  What’s more, we can figure out a way to solve the problems in the future.

LZ的2个论点都用到了个人例子，很贴切，符合论点。
词汇量挺大的，很少有重复~~（羡慕ing）

每个论点的结尾最好还是总结下。突出观点。
有些句子有些冗长，其实分成几个中等长度的句子会让人读起来更顺畅~

LZ每一个论点清晰，论据贴切，蛮好的~ 但感觉有关例子的句子还可以更好些，更顺些。总之大家一起努力吧~
^_^

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9月25日交

09.01.17 NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

According to a recent statistic on the Interney, the number of people believing advertising is the most crucial cause of unhealthy eating habits occupies 75 percent of the entire race.  Unquestionably, it has the trend of increasing. While, there are still some people who do not buy it, for they deem that advertising is kind of narrow and rare, what's more, there are more good stuff in it. However, As far as I am concerned, I am so in favor of most people.

In my point of view, the advertising is the most nationwide and frequent text. Today, as a result of the revolution of new technical subjects, we are able to gain more information through the Internet, Televition and radio, which means we are provided more chance to encounter all kinds of advertising frequently. In that case, it is obvious that our lives are full of the advertising , no matter how hard you try to escape from it, cause it is unstoppable.Day by day, you will be infulenced a lot without noticing. For example, my friend Lihua is a excellent ad-heating student . He still will face lots of advertising almost everywhere though he does not want to. It proves that the advertising is so wide that it becomes the most important reason.

Besides, I hold the perspective that there is , definitely, more bad influence , especially the effect on our eating habits. The advertising's fountion is to present how wonderful the stuff is, for the company use it as a money-earning machine, which means it is always attractive. Once you are addicted in the stuff ,it becomes totally difficult for you to get rid of it without forcement. Therefore, you will develop plenty of wicked habits, including eating habits, because your lust of the production will lead you to a worse condition . Let me take an example, I am once crazy about the ice-cream due to a fantastic advertising, since then, I can not stop eating it even when I am about to sleep!  Confronting those evidence, what would you select? I think there is no doubt that you would choose mine.

But as a matter of fact, there is still other reasons which may shake the advertising's role. Such as the poor education. If we are not well educated, we have no chance to fight with our lust of eating. It could also results of the bad habits.

To sum it up, it is our duty to rid of bad eating habits. To achieve that, we are required to get away from the advertising for it is definitely the most essential cause of bad habits. Although poor education is also important,  compared with the advertising's  prodigious effect, it can be omited.

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09.01.17 NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. + j" }( @  {' k6 m) J5 w5 \6 F7 d
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According to a recent statistic on the Interney, the number of people believing advertising is the most crucial cause of unhealthy eating habits occupies 75 percent of the entire race.  Unquestionably, it has the trend of increasing. While, there are still some people who do not buy it, for they deem that advertising is kind of narrow and rare, what's more, there are (is) more good stuff in it. However, As far as I am concerned, I am so in favor of most people.) c$ o0 b0 v& \- W

In my point of view, the advertising is the most nationwide and frequent text. Today, as a result of the revolution of new technical subjects, we are able to gain more information through the Internet, Televition (是不是应该小写) and radio, which means we are provided more chance to encounter all kinds of advertising frequently. In that case, it is obvious that our lives are full of the advertising, no matter how hard you try to escape from it, cause （because） it is unstoppable. Day by day, you will be influenced
a lot without noticing. For example, my friend Li hua is a excellent ad-heating student . He still will face lots of advertising almost everywhere though he does not want to. It proves that the advertising is so wide that it becomes the most important reason.

Besides, I hold the perspective that there is, definitely, more bad influence, especially the effect on our eating habits. The advertising's fountion（错误拼写） is to present how wonderful the stuff is, for the company use it as a money-earning machine, which means it is always attractive. Once you are addicted in the stuff, it becomes totally difficult for you to get rid of it without forcemeat. Therefore, you will develop plenty of wicked habits, including eating habits, because your lust of the production will lead you to a worse condition. Let me take an example, I am once crazy about the ice-cream due to a fantastic advertising, since then, I can not stop eating it even when I am about to sleep!  Confronting that evidence, what would you select? I think there is no doubt that you would choose mine

But as a matter of fact, there is still other reasons （reason） which may shake the advertising's role such as the poor education. If we are not well educated, we have no chance to fight with our lust of eating. It could also results of the bad habits.

To sum it up, it is our duty to rid of bad eating habits. To achieve that, we are required to get away from the advertising for it is definitely the most essential cause of bad habits. Although poor education is also important compared with the advertising's prodigious effect, it can be omitted.

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