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  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All university students should take basic science courses, regardless of their field of concentration.
Nowadays standpoint that students in all universities have no occasion to take basic science courses appears prevail.However,I firmly convince that basic science courses are effective for students to penetrate into their major study,accordingly,students should take basic science even though science seems irrelevant for their fields.
A worker can improve his skill by working for several years,however,he probably never knows the fundamental principle in his field.Like mathematics,which plays a key role in any fields,Basic science course can provide common practise and ultimate principle to students so that they can penetrate into their study in the relative fields.For instance,without basic science course students who study photography would have to fail to acquire correct light in the nature.
Additionally,creativity,emphasized in the cultivation of students,should be inspired in university.If study professional knowledge along with science course,students will comprehend by analog,improving both the logical and perceptual thinking to strengthen the creativity.What if Steven Jobs has no access to learn computer knowledge?In that case,there will be no magic product called Ipod.
Finally,when people say basic science courses have nothing to do with the fields on which students concentrated,I wonder whether they regard university as technical school.Knowledge supplements each other，consequently，only if we choose abundant courses to lay a good foundation can we work more effectively on our professional study.
字数怎么写都加不满。。。怎么办。。

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1# towntown

给你参考一下我原来的吧~希望对你有帮助~
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一战菜鸟谢谢楼上的好心人。。。

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Nowadays standpoint that students in all universities have no occasion to take basic science courses （word显示这里有问题，加个which会不会好点）appears prevail. However, I firmly convince that basic science courses are effective for students to penetrate into their major study.(句子太长) Accordingly, students should take basic science even though science seems irrelevant for their fields.
+ t( F: y) }1 [/ D+ ]) `& `' HA worker can improve his skill by working for several years. However, he probably never knows the fundamental principle in his field. Like mathematics, which plays a key role in any fields, Basic science course can provide common practices and ultimate principle to students so that they can penetrate into their study in the relative fields. For instance, without basic science course students who study photography would have to fail to acquire correct light in the nature.5 r+ N3 z  D  x
Additionally, creativity, emphasized in the cultivation of students, should be inspired in university. If study professional knowledge along with science course, students will comprehend by analog, improving both the logical and perceptual thinking to strengthen the creativity .What if Steven Jobs has no access to learn computer knowledge? In that case, there will be no magic product called Ipod.  D& p5 S1 ]+ g% t
Finally, when people say basic science courses have nothing to do with the fields on which students concentrated, I wonder whether they regard university as technical school. Knowledge supplements each other. Consequently，only if we choose abundant courses to lay a good foundation can we work more effectively on our professional study.+ B)

一点建议：

1 像however,accordingly应该用新的一句比较好吧。

2 语法白痴，句子不会改。建议用WORD语法检查。（town的词汇用得不错啊）

关于字数： 我是靠背例子，然后硬塞。写了大概十个例子，不过9.11那一战我作文20，独立是fair。说我的例子support不够。。。。我觉得例子要兼顾灵活！: Y, x6 j1 v. V

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from travelling in their own country than travelling in a foreign country.

It is more and more prevail for people to travel abroad on the holidays. Only travelling in their own country can not satisfy their demands to relax completely.Here I support the view that people will get more joy if they travel in a foreign country thanthey travel in their own country.
Firstly, travelling aborad, as a way to relax our body and emotion from the stressful life, will enable people to stay in a different environment so that they can be far away from the familiar life, releasing their bad mood enough.How can imagine that a person who always meets similar scenery and environment will be happy forever! By travelling in a foreign country, people will get rid of the same way to think about our life and be satisfied with the beautiful vision.
Secondly, with an experience of travelling in foreign countries, we will love our world and our life more.I have been to Japan,just near my country.So many different habits and atmospheres I have found make me feel that I had misunderstood Japanese culture for a long period.Thus I think I should travel to foreign countries as many as possible to understand this magic world.
Thirdly, when travelling in foreign countries, students will learn from native speakers to improve their foreign language study.Only to provide an English environment can we learn English better.It is undoubtedly that people who have been stayed in USA can speak English in a more standard way than Chinese students that merely learn English by tests.
Of course, travelling in our own country is convenient, with native language.However, life experience from the trip in other countries, as a kind of assets, is more rare in our lifetime.Needless to say, travelling abroad will give us unforgettable memory, which never exists in our own country.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from travelling in their own country than travelling in a foreign country.  o" N. |# r1 {5 _3 k) D4 p+ _4 Y  E


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It is more and more prevail for people to travel abroad on the holidays. Only travelling in their own country can not satisfy their demands to relax completely.Here I support the view that people will get more joy if they travel in a foreign country than they travel in their own country.

( I* c6 j1 _1 \" XFirstly, travelling aborad, as a way to relax our body and emotion from the stressful life, will enable people to stay in a different environment so that they can be far away from the familiar life, releasing their bad mood enough(有点怪怪的).How can （one）imagine that a person who always meets similar scenery (sceneries) and environment (meet + environment 有点怪怪的) will be happy forever! By travelling in a foreign country, people will get rid of the same way to think about our life and be satisfied with the beautiful vision(nice view).

" z, e& I/ G6 ~) y) B# {( M3 [Secondly, with an experience of travelling in foreign countries, we will love our world and our life more.I have been to Japan,just near my country.（i have been to japan which is close to my own country.）So many different habits and atmospheres I have found make me feel that I had misunderstood Japanese culture for a long period.Thus I think I should travel to foreign countries as many (much) as possible to understand this magic world.: \+ a' M( v# ^3 A+ B6 Z3 H9 ~

Thirdly, when travelling in foreign countries, students will learn from native speakers to improve their foreign language study.Only to provide(by a provided)  English environment can we learn English better.It is undoubtedly that people who have been stayed in USA can speak English in a more standard way than Chinese students that merely learn English by tests. (for passing those tests.)3 Y- H2 S# Q. Z0 [

Of course, travelling in our own country is convenient, with native language.However, life experience from the trip in other countries, as a kind of assets, is more rare in our lifetime.Needless to say, travelling abroad will give (gives) us (an) unforgettable memory, which never exists in our own country.

红色的表示优秀的用法。
有一些小错误，注意动词的用法，有时候感觉有点怪怪的。
总的来说不错～ 加油～！

还有，谢谢你认真的为我批改作文～

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It is undoubted that people nowadays get more pressure in the competitive society than people in the past. How to relieve our stress in a effective way? Many people prefer to spend time alone rather than to connect with friends. They think if they do that, they will disturb others. Here I hold the opposite opinion that spending time alone is not the best way to relieve stress. What’s more, such an action does harmful to our life.
The most crucial reason is that people who spend time alone for a long time will suffer negative emotion problem. Having undergone a stressful experience, people will be more tired of thinking about life in a normal way. They can not exchange the situation in a short time, so they will always feel stressful even though in holidays. People at that time will feel alone if they spend time alone without friends. Further more, it probably brings people several psychological problems. My friend used to spending time alone. Eventually she can not sleep normally in the evening.
Also, attempting to relieve stress by yourself will make people far away from you. The more time you spend alone, the less time you can communicate with others. Your friends will be far away from you as well as your colleagues. The pattern relating your life and work will decrease the ability of your communication. As we know, teamwork is vital when people work together. Lacking of communication ability must lead your work in a dangerous situation, which will bring more stresses.
On the other hand, so ineffective to relax is spending your time on your own. I’ve tried to relax by myself when I suffered difficulties. I had to find the problem of mine for a long time in that case. Without others clearer angle to see the problems, I have found too hard to solve my problems effectively. Friends, your colleagues and relatives play so essential roles in your daily life.
All in all, I can’t agree that we can solve any problems only by ourselves, especially our stress. What we should do is to communicate with our friends and relatives, and we will get relax enough.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from travelling in their own country than travelling in a foreign country.
It is more and more prevail for people to travel abroad on the holidays. Only travelling in their own country can not satisfy their demands to relax(themselves)completely.Here I support the view that people will get more joy if they travel in a foreign country than  they travel in their own country.

Firstly, travelling aborad, as a way to relax our body and emotion from the stressful life, will enable people to stay in a different environment so that they can be far away from the familiar life, releasing their bad mood enough.How can imagine that a person who always meets similar scenery and environment will be happy forever! By travelling in a foreign country, people will get rid of the same way to think about our life and be satisfied with the beautiful vision.
个人感觉这段写的是旅游的好处，没体现出国外旅游的好处，建议用几个句子点一下。

Secondly, with an experience of travelling in foreign countries, we will love our world and our life more.I have been to Japan,just near my country.So many different habits and atmospheres I have found make me feel that I had misunderstood Japanese culture for a long period.Thus I think I should travel to foreign countries as many as possible to understand this magic world.个人感觉后面的因果有点勉强。

Thirdly, when travelling in foreign countries, students will learn from native speakers to improve their foreign language study.Only to provide (provided)an English environment can we learn English better.It is undoubtedly that people who have been stayed in USA can speak English in a more standard way than Chinese students that merely learn English by tests.(for exam)
Of course, travelling in our own country is convenient, with native language好像后面的状语修饰的应该是人吧？.However, life experience from the trip in other countries, as a kind of assets, is more rare in our lifetime.Needless to say, travelling abroad will give（gives） us (an)unforgettable memory, which never exists in our own country.后面的定语从句修饰memory吧，感觉怪怪的。
总体来说文章框架完整，不过more出现太多，建议多变化，同时谢谢你的批改~

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10.05作业

Advertising is a tool for enterprises to persuade people to buy relative goods so that win-win realizes between the merchants and consumers.In the last 20th century, it has made our life encountered a revolutionary change. People prefer to choose attracted food which appeared in the advertisements. Afterwards, many people point out that advertising should be mostly responsible for unhealthy eating habits nowadays. However, unhealthy eating habits should be attributed to many other reasons, which seems more essential to influence our habits.
First and foremost, traditional culture plays a fundamental role in our eating habits. Different culture contributes to a diversity of habits.When it comes to culture, hamburgers and potato chips, as typical high-calories food in America, are population in western countries. No matter how the advertisements announce, people in Asia will always prefer to treat rice and noodles as their own staple food. That's probably the reason why people in Japan and China live longer than those western countries according to recent survey. Furthermore, it is family preference that enables people to form healthy or unwholesome habits. That's why so many scientists ask parents to change their eating habits, such as too much sugar intake.In gerneral, treat the culture and unhealthy family tastes objectively, or no measures you can take to benefit eating habits.
Also, the competitive trend makes people, especially students,working wives and other busy people, ignore the quality of food.
Business men and women considered time as money to catch to concentrate more on their work. And wives have to show their ability of hard working everyday, which is a standard to measure the competitiveness.Time should be spend on the work instead of boring food preparation. In that situation, people prefer to press some buttons to call KFC, with high calories, to finish their lunch in a hurry. Consequently, unhealthy eating habits are formed under the pressure of society.
Besides the mention above, it is also popular that people choose eating and drinking too much to relax from the pressure brought by the life. Devouring excessive sometimes can satisfy people's occupied psychology. For instance,having lost her job, a friend of mine ate high-calories food and drunk coke for three months.Finally, she was addicted in drinking coke,and was abnormal until sending her to hospital.
Admittedly, advertising can provide unhealthy information for people, but that is not the main reason for people to form unhealthy eating habits because advertising provides more nourish food at the same time.
To sum up, traditional culture,competitive society and incorrect way to relieve stress are the most vital reasons for the unhealthy eating habits.

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Advertising is a tool for enterprises to persuade people to buy relative(相对的？还是relevant比较好吧) goods so that win-win realizes between the merchants and consumers.In the last（去了吧） 20th century, it has made our life encountered（又made又偶遇，怪怪的直接bring好了） a revolutionary change. People prefer to choose attracted（attractive） food which appeared in the advertisements. Afterwards, many people point out that advertising should be mostly responsible for unhealthy eating habits nowadays. However, unhealthy eating habits should be attributed to many other reasons, which seems（seem） more essential to influence our habits.

First and foremost, traditional culture plays a fundamental role in our eating habits. Different culture contributes to a diversity of habits.When it comes to culture, hamburgers and potato chips, as typical high-calories food in America, are population（popular） in western countries. No matter how the advertisements announce, people in Asia will always prefer to treat(take会不会好一点) rice and noodles as their own staple food. That's probably the reason why people in Japan and China live longer than those western countries according to recent survey. Furthermore, it is family preference that enables people to form healthy or unwholesome habits. That's why so many scientists ask parents to change their eating habits, such as too much sugar intake.In gerneral, treat the culture and unhealthy family tastes objectively, or no measures you can take to benefit eating habits.4 C% Z; o  E' e/ V（不太懂）
Also, the competitive trend makes people, especially students,working wives and other busy people, ignore the quality of food.! x9 u& X! nBusiness men and women considered time as money to catch to concentrate（什么意思？） more on their work. And wives have to show their ability of hard working everyday, which is a standard to measure the competitiveness.Time should be spend（spent） on the （去掉）work instead of boring food preparation. In that situation, people prefer to press some buttons to call KFC, with（containing比较好吧） high calories, and finish their lunch in a hurry. Consequently, unhealthy eating habits are formed under the pressure of society.
besides(副词，不能这么用吧，beside that has been mentioned above) the mention above, it is also popular that people choose eating and drinking too much to relax from the pressure brought by the life. Devouring excessive sometimes can satisfy people's occupied psychology. For instance,having lost her job, a friend of mine ate high-calories food and drunk coke for three months.Finally, she was addicted in drinking coke,and was abnormal until sending her to hospital.% e. `- g8 o, G5 t
Admittedly, advertising can provide unhealthy information for people, but that is not the main reason for people to form unhealthy eating habits because advertising provides more nourish food at the same time.
To sum up, traditional culture,competitive society and incorrect way to relieve stress are the most vital reasons for the unhealthy eating habits.
还有很多需要改善的地方哟！不过结构算是很完整了，句子的结构和词语的选择还需要多加练习