彼岸小组6号习作

fish_snowUID: 2822442

Do the history researchers focus on the famous few too much, as the speaker alleges? In my point of view, I consent to this claim. Besides, I cannot agree with the speaker's assertion that it is the nameless masses instead of the famous individuals have influenced and evolved the history.

Admittedly, everyone in society constitutes the human's history from the ancient age to modern time. Numerous great achievements cannot be made without the every effort from the mass. Consider every battle in history. Without billions of soldiers’ endeavor, no triumph or turning point can be achieved despite how brave and resourceful the general is. Consider the Pyramids of Egypt and Great Wall of China. Without those nameless people, these miracles cannot be created. Consider the China’s
four great inventions in ancient age, which is the product of numerous people’s wit during thousands years. The contributions made by masses are to the course of history just as the oxygen is to the mankind. We cannot emphasize the importance of masses to the evolution of history too much.

Nevertheless, individuals also made countless contributions in history . It is Newton who formulated three basic laws of mechanics that laid the foundation of classical mechanics. It is Abraham Lincoln who put forward The Emancipation Proclamation that abolished the slavery that last hundreds of years. It is Adam Smith who created the "Wealth of Nations" that influenced the western economics. It is Magellan who proved the earth is round with practice for the first time, which overturn perspective of most people in that time. Without these individuals can’t today's society be taken shape. We cannot judge whether the masses made more significant event than the famous few, simultaneously, the individual achievements depend on the masses. Without the overall research environment ,scientist can not
do any contribution to the scientific research; Without the overall citizen’s support ，politician cannot
make any difference; Without the whole society can’t the economist or the thinker theorizes the theory; Without the companion can’t the adventurer accomplish the travel. There is an indispensable bearing between the masses and individuals and they cannot be dispensed with each other.

In addition, concentrating our minds on the famous individuals seems to be more meaningful to us in the history research. The well-known few who be marked in the history must be the representative of his time so that analyzing him equals to analyzing the people in his time, as well as the society. What’s more, people prefer focusing on the outstanding to the ordinary. We tend to be fascinated and impressed by the successful or beautiful person. Look at the newspaper in everywhere, individual information occupies most pages. We naturally set someone in our minds as an example and emulate him in some aspects. In this way, the effect of analyzing individuals not only promote personal development, but also facilitate the whole society step into a better level.

All in all, focusing on the famous few help us make a better understand of history, besides, masses and individuals are interdependent so that we cannot tell which made more important contribution in the history.

banglowUID: 2969783

Do the history researchers focus on the famous few too much, as the speaker alleges? In my point of view, I consent to this claim. Besides, I cannot agree with the speaker's assertion that it is the nameless masses instead of the famous individuals have influenced and evolved the history.[题目说possible不是一定]

Admittedly, everyone in society constitutes the human's history from the ancient age to modern time. Numerous great achievements cannot be made without the every effort from the mass. Consider every battle in history. Without billions[十亿？] of soldiers’ endeavor, no triumph or turning point can be achieved despite how brave and resourceful the general is. Consider the Pyramids of Egypt and Great Wall of China. Without those nameless people, these miracles cannot be created. Consider the China’s
four great inventions in ancient age, which is the product of numerous people’s wit during thousands years. [据我所知四大发明还是有明确发明者的]The contributions made by masses are to the course of history just as the oxygen is to the mankind. We cannot emphasize the importance of masses to the evolution of history too much.最后否定要加转折词

Nevertheless, individuals also made countless contributions in history . It is Newton who formulated three basic laws of mechanics that laid the foundation of classical mechanics. It is Abraham Lincoln who put forward The Emancipation Proclamation that abolished the slavery that last hundreds of years. It is Adam Smith who created[发明？] the "Wealth of Nations" that influenced the western economics. It is Magellan who proved the earth is round with practice for the first time, which overturn perspective of most people in that time. Without these individuals can’t today's society be taken shape. We cannot judge whether the masses made more significant event than the famous few, simultaneously, the individual achievements depend on the masses. Without the overall research environment ,scientist can not
do any contribution to the scientific research; Without the overall citizen’s support ，politician cannot
make any difference; Without the whole society can’t the economist or the thinker theorizes the theory; Without the companion can’t the adventurer accomplish the travel. There is an indispensable bearing between the masses and individuals and they cannot be dispensed with each other.[每段只需论证一个观点，要再让步那就重启一段]

In addition, concentrating our minds on the famous individuals seems to be more meaningful to us in the history research. The well-known few who be marked in the history must be the representative of his time so that analyzing him equals to analyzing the people in his time, as well as the society. What’s more, people prefer focusing on the outstanding to the ordinary. We tend to be fascinated and impressed by the successful or beautiful person. Look at the newspaper in everywhere, individual information occupies most pages. We naturally set someone in our minds as an example and emulate him in some aspects. In this way, the effect of analyzing individuals not only promote personal development, but also facilitate the whole society step into a better level.

All in all, focusing on the famous few help us make a better understand of history, besides, masses and individuals are interdependent so that we cannot tell which made more important contribution in the history.
论证的顺序有点混乱，第三段说个人重要却又提到了群众重要，第四段又说个人重要

muzhihao1UID: 2959675

Do the history researchers focus on the famous few too much, as the speaker alleges? In my point of view, I consent to this claim. Besides, I cannot agree with the speaker's assertion that it is the nameless masses instead of the famous individuals have influenced and evolved the history.

Admittedly, everyone in society constitutes the human's history from the ancient age to modern time. （是人“组成”了历史吗？）Numerous great achievements cannot be made without the every effort from（of） the mass. Consider every battle in history. Without billions of soldiers’ endeavor, no triumph or turning point can be achieved despite how brave and resourceful the general is. Consider the Pyramids of Egypt and Great Wall of China. Without those nameless people, these miracles cannot be created. Consider the China’s
four great inventions in ancient age, which is the product of numerous people’s wit during thousands years. The contributions made by masses are to the course of history just as the oxygen is to the mankind. We cannot emphasize the importance of masses to the evolution of history too much.

Nevertheless, individuals also made countless contributions in history . It is Newton who formulated three basic laws of mechanics that laid the foundation of classical mechanics. It is Abraham Lincoln who put forward The Emancipation Proclamation that abolished the slavery that last hundreds of years. It is Adam Smith who created the "Wealth of Nations" that influenced the western economics. It is Magellan who proved the earth is round with practice for the first time, which overturn perspective of most people in that time. Without these individuals can’t today's society be taken shape. （感觉有点怪）We cannot judge whether the masses made more significant event than the famous few, simultaneously（这句意思不通）, the individual achievements depend on the masses. Without the overall research environment ,scientist can not
do any contribution to the scientific research; Without the overall citizen’s support ，politician cannot
make any difference; Without the whole society can’t the economist or the thinker theorizes the theory; Without the companion can’t the adventurer accomplish the travel. There is an indispensable bearing between the masses and individuals and they cannot be dispensed（这个词着重在分配上，而不是分割） with each other.（split in half）
都是排比，感觉看到这里就感觉很乏味了。例子对论点的支持不是很深入。看完之后也许就记得你的观点，但是记不起来你用了什么例子。
两个观点很突兀，个人有用，但是个人的成功是建立在群众的基础上。似乎跟第一段重复了
In addition, concentrating our minds on the famous individuals seems to be more meaningful to us in the history research. （跳到这个观点之后，感觉文章没有很强的内在的逻辑，观点不明确。而且这个论点出现得很突兀）The well-known few who be marked in the history must be the representative of his time so that analyzing him equals to analyzing the people in his time, as well as the society. What’s more, people prefer focusing on the outstanding to the ordinary.（虽然你的意思在后面说了，但是这句话这样出来很突然。） We tend to be fascinated and impressed by the successful or beautiful person. Look at the newspaper in everywhere, individual information occupies most pages. We naturally set someone in our minds as an example and emulate him in some aspects. In this way, the effect of analyzing individuals not only promote personal development, but also facilitate the whole society step into a better level.

All in all, focusing on the famous few help us make a better understand of history, besides, masses and individuals are interdependent so that we cannot tell which made more important contribution in the history.