Argument 53 ---Boris21 酒香

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Grounding on the experiment results, assuming that the responses are relevant to their mother, ignoring the changing of scope and confusing the meaning of shyness and distress the author unsuccessfully concludes that the mother`s melatonin rate affects their children throughout their lives.

To begin with, the samples may not be representative enough. In this argument we are only informed that there were 25 infants, but there is a lack of their detail. Possibly their distress were inherited from ancestors or they were all ill and this distress is one of the syndrome. And the information like blood type, race, gender were all absent. So we hardly believe that representativeness of the samples. Moreover, as we do not see a result from the comparative group, there is little reliability.

In addition, the author offers no direct evidence to demonstrate that this distress is resulted in the mother`s melatonin. Firstly, whether the mother`s melatonin will affect their infants is open to doubt. In the argument the author mentions that the melatonin increases in response to the daylight, so why the winter is not the highest level time? Granted that that of winter is higher than autumn`s, it is still no a direct evidence. Unless the author successfully proves that melatonin affects the inheritance of distress, we can hardly think so.

Furthermore, even if the melatonin affects the infants, we still cannot conclude that the distress is caused by that. Because the reason for this distress may not only owes to the melatonin. Perhaps the odor and voice are really annoying and none will not response like that. The author needs to make more explanation of how the melatonin leads to this distress.

On the other hand, in this argument the author informs us that the infants which had been experimented 13 years before all feel themselves shy, but the definition of shyness is varied from people to people. The one who thinks himself shy may not as shy as the one who do not think so. Moreover, granted that all of them are with a kind of shyness, the cause for this is still various. As time has changed, 13 years has passed, the shyness may be resulted in many factors, such as the childhood experience, education, health condition. The author makes him claim too hastily to achieve a convincible argument.

Last but not at least, the definition of shyness and distress is also different. The distress is just a immediate neurotic response, but shyness is considered as a kind of character. The shyness has nothing to do with the response to a certain stimuli.


In sum, the author fails to support his argument. To better his claim he requires providing more details of the research conducted 13 years ago and to illustrate more data to define the shyness and more importantly to make sure that the reason for the distress and to answer that whether this distress could lead to the future shyness.