Argument 188 求拍~~

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Argument 188~~

In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, the argument suffers from three flows.

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based on a mass of samples. What's vital for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefully detection. Only a few samples can lead to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether the universities should provide a limiting number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot in social discussion. If there are one thousand people take part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.

In addition to looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men, the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island has grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was sure better to women. If the argument contains the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.

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Argument 188~~

In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, the argument suffers from three flows.(开头很漂亮，学习了)

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based(isn't based on) on a mass of samples. What's vital(感觉怪怪的。。) for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefullycareful或者prudent detection. Only a few samples can lead(建议only后移，too few samples can only lead to) to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether the universities should provide a limitinglimited number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot用debated比较好 in social discussion. If there are one thousand people taketaking part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable(does the poll still remain reasonable?) ? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.这个表述很不错

In addition， looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men(the majority of men), the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island has grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? 这个例子很贴切The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was suresurly better to women. If the argument contains the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.写得很有条理，先概述题目并提出反对，然后从样本容量小，男女适用性和不用检查所有药物三方面进行论述，例子也很贴切
看得出楼主模板功底很扎实，估计已经形成了自己的风格了
这片应该能拿高分～
学习鸟～～～

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In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was (were) better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, (建议拿掉) the argument suffers from three flaws.

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based on a mass of samples. What's vital for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefully detection. Only a few samples can lead to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether (if) the universities should provide a limiting number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot in social discussion. If there are one thousand people take part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.

In addition to looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to (去掉) another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men, the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island have grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidences that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was sure better to women. If the argument contained
(虚拟应该更好点) the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.
楼主这篇真是美文，我的任何夸赞都显得多余。如果能更仔细点不出小错误的话，几乎可以当范文。尤其是切入点找的非常准！可以说说最近在看那些argu资料吗，偶也学习学习^_^

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感谢楼主的修改~~
argu我个人感觉就像高考的语文作文，找到不合理处就抓着不放，往死里说。。。
模板的话看看北美吧，也不用太多，两三篇就大概知道行文是怎么样的，之后具体怎么写推荐去看“苏明明之GRE写作综述2005版”（鉴于我还不能发附件，楼主上寄托找吧，搜索就找得到）。虽然老了点，但里面的“argument之七宗罪”写的非常好，我的论点就是照着挑的~~
“ 3# Adolph.hu.85

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Argu 53~~

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好的，谢谢！我也拜拜读读！一起进步^_^

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A 53
Thirteen years ago, researchers studied a group of 25 infants who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli such as an unusual odor or a tape recording of an unknown voice. They discovered that these infants were more likely than other infants to have been conceived in early autumn, a time when their mothers' production of melatonin — a hormone known to affect some brain functions — would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight. In a follow-up study conducted earlier this year, more than half of these children — now teenagers — who had shown signs of distress identified themselves as shy. Clearly, increased levels of melatonin before birth cause shyness during infancy and this shyness continues into later life.

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In this argument, the arguer advocates that shyness during infancy is caused by increased levels of melatonin before birth and this shyness keeps on into later life. To support the conclusions, the arguer provides evidences of a research, which was lasting thirteen years in twenty-five infants. The research found out that the infants who got birth in early autumn, a time when their mothers would product increased melatonin because of lacking for daylight, showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli. Furthermore, after follow-up study, more than half of these children suffered from shyness. （ 这里差了一句：it seems that the argu is conving，然后再加however）However, a careful exanimation of this argument would reveal how groundless the conclusions are.

The major problem with this argument is that the conclusion of the research dose not be based on a large amount of experiments. As we all know, scientific study is strict and needs testing over and over again. （这里不是test次数的问题 而是test样本数多少的问题）Only a tiny number of samples cannot represent the general situation. For the supporting reason, one needs look no further in a poll concerning whether universities play constraints on school seats to improve education quality. If there are one thousand people take part in the poll, but only one percent of them give feedback, can the result have the representative over the whole view? Since the attitude from a small group of people is narrow and limited but（AND） not general, no matter what the conclusion will be, the one percent cannot stand for the whole. It is also the same to the research on twenty-five infants. Unless the research provides substantial evidence regarding the relation between melatonin and shyness, the conclusion that melatonin can cause shyness and the effect is unfounded. 样本太少

Another problem that wakens the logic of this argument is that the shyness continues into future life because more than half of the twenty-five children showed shyness after thirteen years. After a long period of time, children would come into contact with different people and large quantity of new information. Given that the chemical substances-melatonin-is the reason in early（去掉early infancy就是early of life） infancy, there are still many other causes for shyness, such as discrimination and neglection by parents. Summarizing that shyness continues into late life but only based on that melatonin may cause distress is logically unacceptable.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Children get into shyness in early times do not mean they will suffer from it in future. When Newton was in his childhood, he was clumsy and did not do well in study. Let us imagine something, if the theory mentioned before is established, does it mean Newton will be a clumsy guy in his later life? So the conclusion about(that) shyness will last in later life is groundless
这一段主要谈的是从小看到老的问题 语言上问题不大，但是似乎在逻辑上有重复之嫌，楼主前半段重点谈m物质的影响时效，后半段谈到了儿时的性格不一定会延续到以后的人生，两部分没能做到递进，而只是彼此重复

In sum, the conclusion reached in the argument is not persuasive as the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer claims. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer should provide more information concerning the melatonin really has connection to shyness and the signs of distress caused by shyness will show in infants' future life. Otherwise, the argument is logically unacceptable.

总体而言，楼主本文非常不错。指明了错误并且做了深度辩驳。句式也比较灵活多变。
不足之处是还需进一步体现逻辑的递进与层次感。
相信楼主再联系一段时间一定能取得更大的成绩，加油!

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3.5 A51

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非常谢谢月桂的修改！拜读了你前几篇Argument,发现你的语言、思路真好！学习！！！
一起加油哈！
水平有限，语言实在改不了多少，就在内容上有一点点小小的改动~

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感谢楼主对Argu51的修改~~中间那一段我在写的时候也觉得很不顺手，看了楼主给的建议后茅塞顿开，当时真的完全没有想到“初步研究结果有漏洞”这个逻辑错误~~感谢指正！！
9# sophie-zy

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对不起，来晚了。。

A161

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3.12 Argument 203

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改好了，水平有限，见谅！

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改了，上传不到附件，贴出来
TOPIC: ARGUMENT161 - In a study of readinghabits of Leeville citizens conducted by the University of Leeville,most respondents said they preferred literary classics as reading material.However, a follow-up study conducted by the same researchers found that thetype of book most frequently checked out of each of the public libraries inLeeville was the mystery novel. Therefore, it can be concluded that therespondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits.
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TIME: 00:40:00
DATE: 2011/3/11 23:47:03
 
In this argument, the arguer advocates thatthe study revealing that most respondent prefer literary classics as readingmaterial is mistaken. To support this conclusion, the arguer cites the resultof a follow-up research taken in every libraries that mystery books are in themost frequency. However, a careful examination of this argument would show howgroundless the conclusion is.
 
The major problem of this argument is thatliterary classics and mystery books are totally different, not only in thecontent, but also in the reading patterns. As we all know the classics booksare elegant and thoughtful. What's more, these books have already gone througha long time, and the morphology and sentence structure are not familiar withreaders. There is no doubt that one should spend more time in understanding thereal meaning behind the written language.
The mystery books are modern product. People can get more enjoyment fromthem than classics, and the most importantly, because mystery books do not needto go deep into consideration, they cost a shorter period of time in reading.Only concluding that people prefer mystery books by frequency is inadequate.[不明白图书馆借书频率大小与阅读时间的长短有什么关系,而我的理解是因为这两个有交集,所以不能否定第一个结论]
 
Another problem that wakens the logic ofthis argument is that the research in the follow-up study is just focus on thelibraries. There are lots of way to get books, such as borrowing from friendsand buying from bookstores. Unless the arguer provides further evidenceregarding the whole citizens in Leeville mostly readmystery books[有些不通顺,或改为regardingthe whole citizens in Leeville, most of which read mystery books], thestatement that the first study had misrepresented inhabitants[inhabitants’]reading habits is unfounded.
Before I come into my conclusion, it isnecessary to point out another problem that undermines the argument. The factors that due to mystery novel are popular inlibraries [Factors that lead to the popularity of mystery novels]arevarious. The readers liking[who prefer] mysterynovels are mostly younger students. If the research is done in summer vacation,the frequency of the mystery novels would go up since students have a lot oftime to enjoy theirselves [themselves]and dosome interest reading. [这两句话其实只是一个它因，可以再多写一个如很可能很多喜欢古典文学的人不借书]Nowadays the housing price in Hainan Islandhas been continuously increased, which mostly due to the development of touristindustry. Can we say that the prosperousness of real estate industry in theisland is only because of tourist industry? Maybe there are other factors, likethe development of economy or a new stimulus government policy.
 
In summary, this argument is not persuasiveas it stands. To better evaluate the argument, the arguer should provide moreevidence convincing that Leeville citizens concern mystery novel than literacyclassics.
总体语言比较通顺，但分析不够深入，纯属个人意见


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