（daily writing）tourist的作文练习贴

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:

People who go outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in villages

To some people, it could not appearsurprising that the people who depart from village would be more successful andhappier. I am the one of them. In my view, if someone wanted to be successful, she/heshould have a high quality education that could be provided by some outstandingcolleges and universities. Those almost locate in the big city, such as Beijingor Shanghai. Another point is that, we could get more information from outsideof the village, giving us a lot of opportunities.


First, go out of the village could receivea high quality education, because, the great mass of famous colleges anduniversities located in the big cities, and a large number of preeminentprofessors worked in the universities. If you stayed village, you would not gainthe resource which could help you to be a successful man. Take my experience forexample, my best friend also is my classmate, made a bid to depart from ourhometown to Beijing by college entrance examination. I, however, didn’t want toleave hometown to the big city which is so far away for my studies. Just fouryears later, my best friend was employed by Swiss Bank besides got a wellpayment. At the same time, I was just a graduate student who wanders off theroad to success. Second, you could gain a lot of information which would playan important role in our development outside of the village. Such as a predictedinformation, that would put you at an advantage in competing.


The case of my best friend happens all thetime. Going out of the village could let you access more education resourcewhich would make you more powerful in the competing. The big cites certainlyhave these resource. So, the choice depart from village was extremely wise.

justin234UID: 2815444

改好：3.30独立

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

Is it easier to be a success in the past than it is today?

Along with the accelerating pace of the modern life and the increasingly fierce competition, more and more people believe that accessing success become harder than before. In my opinion, however, the people born in this century would be easier to be successful than past and the reason for that are below.

It is the most important factor to be a success that whether he or she could receive education or not. Education could create a success, since people could be told the experience of the great man past by the education. In the past, only the royal member had the power to receive education which the public dreamed of. While, the public could also have the right to go to school, elementary school, middle school, and high school, which means very one has possibility to achieve their own dreams and stride at the way to the success.  The education could help people to be success and the public could receive the education more easily nowadays. So, it is easier to be success today than it is in past.

Also, with the technology development, the manners of success turn into diversification. Thus people could have more choice to elect for their future. My classmate, for example, who often skipped the major lessons, always had an investigative heart in stock market, and he made a bid to earn money through it. As he wishes, he did make a lot of money, and never begged his parents for money for tuition fare. I think my classmate as successful man because he achieves the target by his own manner. Thus, today, success is surrounding us.

In summary, my essay has investigated that to be success nowadays is not harder than in the past, because of the advantage of our education, and diversity of the manner to success. Obviously, the success around us day and night, what are you waiting for?

qianhuangUID: 2766587

3月31日 独立 修改

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the losing of old friends

It is well known to us that the most ofpeople fear to move to a new country or city, because living in a new placewill lose their old friends who are very important for them they think. In myview, however, moving to a new country or city is not a terrible thing and ourfriendship can’t be faded away.


First of all, the distance between I and myfriends could not have negative effect in our friendship. With the rapiddevelopment of the technology of communication and transportation, the world isbecoming smaller than ever before. So, we could communicate with each other bysome certain manners, such as OICQ, MSN, or Skype, which is very effective. Inaddition, changing the circumstance of life would encourage the relationshipbetween me and my friends. We often talk about what I met in the new city orcountry which was interested by my friends, and our topic of conversationbecame increasingly extended, such as the different custom, language andscenery. Surly, our relationship was better than before, besides we enjoy the friendshipwith a far distance. Obviously, moving to a strange place could not have adverseinfluence in friendship.


The last but not least, departing for anunknown environment to live will let me gain a lot of experience in my life. IfI always stay in the harbor of motherland, I will not grow up or strengthen. Forinstance, when I was a middle school student, I never wash my clothes, as mymother would do it instead of me. But the life with happiness was so short. Ihad to go to college where is so far away from my hometown for studying. I hadto face the fact that I must take care of myself. Finally I could liveindependent four years later. That is a great improve for me. So, it is aterrific thing that moves to a new country or new city.


In summary, moving to a strange place has littleinfluence on the friendship fading away, besides, it could help me to be a adulteffectively. Thus, it is a good thing to move a new city or a new country andmy friendship can’t lose.

niehanmjUID: 3005699

改好了~ 加油噢。

aurora0624UID: 3039878

3.30的不好意思改晚了，之前一直都有事

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?




Along with advance of the society, the increasingpeople include the government official could not ignore that education isplaying an important role in our daily life. But, the budget for education islimited, thus, some people think that the government should focus its budgetmore on the very young children education rather than on university. In my opinion,I think that is very wise, and the reasons for that is as following.

First, as weknow, creative ability is the indispensable condition for advance of thesociety. Without creative ability, we cannot have the Renaissance, theindustrial revolution, not to mention the technology of information. Besides,creative ability could be easy to be developed when the people is very young. “The first three years can shape the rest of your life!”says by Confucius. So, governmentshould scratch the golden time of the people to cultivate people’s creativeability.

Another one Iwant mention is that putting into more energy and money on education of theyoung could help the people to build their goals and dreams in his wholelifetime, besides that will guide them to achieve it and to be successful. Oncethe goals of life are established, they will never give up when they feel tiredand encounter dilemma. For example, Langlang who is one of the most famous pianistsin China received a terrific early education. His father, who is the mostimportant instructor of him, was engaged to teach his son to play piano. Finally,under the influence of the Langlang’s father, Langlang built his own interestto piano and had a dream to be an excellent pianist in his mind and he made itcame true. If he could not have such nice early education when he was young,he, I think, would not have such outstanding accomplishment like this.

In summary, educationshould be received as early as possible. Once lose the golden time of teaching,the negative influence will around you in the rest of your career. That isterrible! So, focusing more budgets on the very young education thanuniversity, the government will receive a better benefit.

Go2011GoUID: 3006241

Along with advance of the society, the increasing people（什么意思呢） include the government official could not ignore that education is playing an important role in our daily life. But, the budget for education is limited, thus, some people think that the government should focus its budget more on the very young children education rather than on university. In my opinion,I think that is very wise, and the reasons for that is as following.
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First, as we know, creative ability (creativity) is the indispensable condition (factor/element) for advancement of the society. Without creative ability, we cannot have the renaissance, the industrial revolution, not to mention the technology of information. Besides,creative ability could be easy developed when the people is very young. “The first three years can shape the rest of your life!”says by Confucius. So, government should scratch the golden time (?) of the people to cultivate people’s creative ability. 这个观点很有道理，赞！

Another one I want to mention is that putting into more energy and money on education of the young could help the people to build their goals and dreams in his whole lifetime, besides that will guide them to achieve it and to be successful. Once the goals of life are established (in their childhood), they will never give up even when they feel tired and encounter dilemma. For example, Langlang who is one of the most famous pianists in China received a terrific early education. His father, who is the most important instructor of him, was engaged to teach his son to play piano. Finally,under the influence of Langlang’s father, Langlang built his own interest in piano and had a dream to be an excellent pianist in his mind and he made it came true. If he could not have such nice early education when he was young,he, I think, would not have such outstanding accomplishment like this.# x( n. h% k. q1 {3 h这一段的例子用于说明早期教育的重要性很好，但是儿时的梦想是否可以坚持下来因人而异吧～不如把中心句改写成而是教育对未来的成功至关重要

In summary, education should be received as early as possible. Once (one loses) the golden time of teaching,the negative influence will around you in the rest of your career.(文中没有提到消极的影响，此处出现略显突兀) That is terrible! So, focusing more budgets on the very young education than university, the government will receive a better benefit.
语言流畅，观点好！有些语法方面的小问题，标注出来了。

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

People would be happier if they had fewer possessions？ Agree or not?

It cannot be doubted that possessions have been an important element in our life.
Therefore, some people consider that owning more possessions mean happier in our life. In my opinion, however, I think it is in vain to say that, and I have many reasons to support my view.

First, people, who have more possessions, could possess the most of things they want. I will be very felicity to do every thing I dream of, such receiving the best education in music which is my hobby, with a lot of money. That is wonderful things. Take my own experience for example, when I was a child, I dreamed of playing piano, and I bugged my mother to buy one for me. But, the piano would spend my mother ten thousand RMB, and my mother only could earn one thousand RMB one month at that time. Thus, I had to give up my dream, that w painful to me. So, I know that I could not make my dream came true without money, besides, I will never be happy if I have to put my dream away.

Also, possessing a lot of property will make me feel happiness. Because, owning more possessions is a symbol of success, and I am trying to require success since I was very little. I think that if someone could achieve his goals and be success in his career, he will have felicity. For instance, Bill Gate, who builds the Microsoft, leaves off his studies in Harvard and then throws himself in the career he loves deeply. Finally, he achieves his goal and has been the richest man in the word. He not only has a lot of money, but also acquires happiness. So, possession will bring a happy life.

In summary, money could achieve one’s dream that will let him feel happy, and as a symbol of success, possession will make life felicity. So, possession is really a essential factor in our happiness.

niehanmjUID: 3005699

改好了~

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

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辛苦修改的同学了

蝶澈UID: 2789619

改好了

jacksonboy424UID: 2998392

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我作文很差，请修改的同学狠批，感觉不对就标出来，不怕标错，多谢你对我的帮助

凉言UID: 2996787

嗯，改好~