Daily Writing by ILoveChemistry

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From Today,Well,buddy,I will polish my writing skills with you guys as well as gals!


我知道自己很忙，每天上午都满课，下午还有实验，还有勤工助学，但是心中的理想和T、G连在了一起，龙门一跃，飞跃梦想，再大的痛苦也要顶着，再累也要坚持写下去！

寄托家园，我把她当成自己的加油站，希望各位亲都能本着“真诚、真意、真心”的原则，人人为大家，大家为人人。

我所在的这所学校，网速慢得出奇，上网有时候不方便，无线上网又有点超出我的承受范围，所以有时候给亲改作文会拖后一点，但是只要亲和我分在了一组，我一定会尽自己最大的努力改好，改到我最满意的地步，有时候可能会以“第二版”“第三版”的形式给亲返回去，我说到做到。

另外，我会在时机成熟的时候，专门开一个“语言现象”（Figurative Language Phenomena）的专贴，以提高自己和大家在语言锤炼方面的艺术！

下面贴出一个和老师交流的语言现象，以此为例。


下面是我给各位亲修改的作文，以此为鉴：

4.20 JoyceJingYang(碧云烟景)

ILOVECHEMISTRYUID: 2969217

4.18
For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?
09-11-07NA

Is it well-minded to weigh more on the side of young children education irrespective of the other side of universities? My answer inclines to “No”, considering both sides are crucial to our development of education and economic.

Education of young children should attract more attention from government budget, as we all know, for only in this way can the so called future-flowers flourish gloriously and emit fragrance in the garden of economic growth subsequently. As an old epigram goes, be young is be hopeful, be young is be energetic, which fits well to the education of our young generation.

However, we should also keep in mind that education is a circle to ring around, and no one can afford the price to encounter any erosion of the sound system. Universities as the senior education front should also draw dramatic concentration from government budget. On one hand, those well-educated campus students need financial support to equip themselves with different skills to serve the powerful engine of our economic. How can we imagine a bulk of graduates flood into all sorts of fields lacking essential skills to assume their jobs? How can we base our economic development on this budget shortage effect of universities education? On the another hand, young children will grow up and depend on the same qualified universities education in a long run. Without sufficient budget, the previous heart-cared flowers will fade out instead of glow out.

In a nutshell, the balance of education between young children and universities should keep on going, in which government budget can play an vital role.

ILOVECHEMISTRYUID: 2969217

4.19.2011
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
People who go outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in villages.
10-01-22 NA

“I will fly higher and higher” claimed a million times from the bottom of my heart as I was a middle school student in a small town. If I hadn’t went outside to better my education, take myself as an example, I would lose a bulk of opportunities to become an emerging quasi-chemist, let alone success and happiness. I just can’t agree any more the idea to go outside to pursue individual success and happiness.

First and foremost, it’s evident village is a noun hand in hand with a another one “poverty”, thus multiplying a patch of sub-issues, poor education facilities, poor transportation systems, poor medical conditions namely. A child in a remote village very probably drops out school owing to shortage of teachers and classes, while his counterpart in a prosperous city may enjoy a thorough multiple media teaching environment and design a different map of navigation through his life. The distance between them will draw far day after day, for which the village-born child may never taste what are real success and happiness in his village.

In addition, people in villages more incline to a self-content life style and lack ambition. Burying in the self-closed atmosphere, young hopes will gradually die out. Besides, some local customs discriminating the female lead to tragedies every now and then, killing a bunch of rosy buds in the infant. How can they get the access to success and happiness if they stick to villages instead of going outside?

Finally, faced with various minds and thoughts in a city, those from villages tend to open their own and produce their new conception of life, new interpretation of success and new understanding of happiness. They can enjoy the advanced education, make friends with high qualifications, dwell their own family on abundant recourses. Cities are like a light illuminating the minds out of villages. All sorts of odds are waiting for them to explore if they can catch the right time and right place, to which villages are shy to match.

In a nutshell, going outside do immensely influence the development of a person from some village, leaving a world of chances to chase the success and happiness.

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4.20
Is it easier to be a success in the past than it is today?

Definition of a success varies from time to time. What is a success? People from all walks of life may have their own standard to evaluate that rosy and glorious noun. Basing on what I have experienced, I incline to the positive view that it's easier to be a success nowadays.

First and foremost, a success prevalent nowadays may be regarded as a failure or something abnormal in the past. Bulks of such examples jump out from literature, art, science fields. Take A Bing, a Chinese folk musician, as a typical example. A Bing was once forced to beg from street to street to earn a warm dinner, while he never stopped playing Er Hu, a Chinese traditional instrument that has more than one thousand years' history. Just before his death, he had composed a series of classic works. Though he suffered millions of agonizing gossip in his last days, he is admired as a master of Er Hu nowadays. As to this pity phenomenon, people now tend to understand a success from different aspects. Just as in the "Super Girl" case Li Yuchun became an overnight success because of her tomboy style, which would be impossible in the past. This all ascribe to the fact that conception of a success have shifted and turned out to be easier nowadays.

In addition, owing to the booming development of internet technology, contemporary successes extend far more fields which provide immense opportunities for different minds. Learning a skill from the internet-based resource can be more convenient and sometimes even for free. What's more, all kinds of working information filled in the internet, attracting and leading more and more people to their successes, for which people under the earth would feel astonishingly shy if they recovered right now.

Finally, the car of economy is fast wheeling day in and day out, an increasing number of highly educated candidates are exploring new ways to start their journeys under sorts of help from the government agencies, nonprofit organizations, etc.. As long as the world economy is in need of development, those candidates in store can be transferred into different successes sooner or later.

In sum, thanks to the open minds, high technologies and hungry economic desire, a success in present days are easier to forge than in the past.

JoyceJingYangUID: 3052237

4.20.
Is it easier to be a success in the past than it is today?
Definition of a success varies from time to time. What is a success? People from all walks of life may have their own standard to evaluate that rosy and glorious noun. Basing on what I have experienced, I incline to the positive view that it's (it is)easier to be a success nowadays.

First and foremost, a success prevalent nowadays may be regarded as a failure or something abnormal in the past. Bulks of such examples jump out from literature, art, science fields. Take A Bing, a Chinese folk musician, as a typical example. A Bing was once forced to beg from street to street to earn a warm dinner (warm用在这里有点Chinglish,不妨用a plain dinner), while he never stopped playing Er Hu, a Chinese traditional instrument that has more than one thousand years' history. Just before his death, he had composed a series of classic works. Though he suffered millions of agonizing gossip in his last days, he is admired as a master of Er Hu nowadays. As to this pity phenomenon, people now tend to understand a success from different aspects. Just as in the "Super Girl" case, Li Yuchun became an overnight success partially because of her tomboy style, which would be impossible in the past. This all ascribe to the fact that conception of a success have shifted and turned out to be easier nowadays.

In addition, owing to the booming development of internet technology, contemporary successes extend far more fields which provide immense opportunities for different minds. Learning a skill from the internet-based resource can be more convenient and sometimes even for free. What's more, all kinds of working information filled in the internet, attracting and leading more and more people to their successes, for which people under the earth would feel astonishingly shy if they recovered right now. (①all kinds of working information are filled in the internet, attracting and leading more and more people to their success ②all kinds of working information filled in the internet, attract and lead more and more people to their success 咋会犯跟我一样的错误呢，粗心啦，哈哈)

Finally, the car of economy is fast wheeling day in and day out, an increasing number of highly educated candidates are exploring new ways to start their journeys under sorts of help from the government agencies, nonprofit organizations, etc.. As long as the world economy is in need of development, those candidates in store can be transferred into different successes sooner or later.
In sum, thanks to the open minds, high technologies and hungry economic desire, a success in present days are easier to forge than in the past.

文章风格简洁精练有力又不失优雅，很喜欢的文风啊~~
结构、思想都很好，很精辟，独树一帜，大有向30分的倾向啊~~
向你学习~~
Ps.你是第一个改我作文的人，也是我在寄托上真正让我感动的第一份力量，看到你写在一楼的文字，很有同感呢，也很佩服你的精神~~恩恩，大家都加油，努力向满分冲啊~~>o<