2月23日

张璞UID: 2948450

Is it better to relax by reading books or watching movies  than doing physical exercises ?


    In this day and age, unlike the formertimes when people enjoyed a carefree and leisurely life, people have tostruggle for their lives under the intense pressure of highly competitivesurroundings. Witnessing what the ongoing changes in almost every socialaspects have brought to us, we may realize that sometimes we are so zealous tocatch up the paces of these changes that we already neglect our health, whichshould have been the priority in our lives. Thus, whether people should getrelaxations from mental peace or physical trainings has triggered a debate. Inmy opinion, there are definitely no contradictions between the two kinds ofchoices.

Firstly, the job character is one of the mostessential points that we have to consider when we are determining which kind ofrelaxation a person should pick. Probably, a person with a job which need himto spend most of his energy in day times, such as physical teacher, athlete,etc, is just willing to sit in a cozy armchair by a warm lamplight and read athrilling novel or watch an interesting film. Ridiculously, he has to run forlike 5 kilometers to stretch up his body after a quite hard day's work to gainrelaxation. In contrast, that's exactly what people like IT elites and computerengineers should do to free themselves when they come back home after exhaustedtheir minds at work. Besides, not only will they enhance their physical bodies,but also can forget the annoying trifles temporarily, which can be calledrelaxation.

Further,in light of the living conditions and environments people have, they may havedifferent selections. people who live near gyms which contains variousapparatus
are capable of making the bestof these facilities to train their bodies and muscles. However, people livingin the crowded city center which may be far away from available grounds willfeel boring and tired if they insist going round and round in the narrow neighborhood.On contrary, movies and books can be available to them. What I mean by that ispeople can do relax themselves in an easier and better way by considering theirown true situations.
   In addition, the content of the choice maylead to different effect. Like I say, reading easy poetries or watchingcomedies can smooth the mood of a person while reading books dealing withserious and academic subjects may also contribute to agitation. Systematictraining can be too rigid and tough for people who merely hope for fun.

Taking all the argument above intoconsideration, the issue of which one is better still needs furthermorediscussion. But we may choose each form of light entertainment. Either readingbooks or watching movies as a kind of panacea to heal one's soul or doingphysical exercises, both of which can relieve pressure.

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张璞UID: 2948450

2# wqr619 嗯嗯！嘿嘿！我头一次发哪！还不太会弄！谢谢~蹲着的猫~

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张璞UID: 2948450

09年10月31日
It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends?

In this day and age, it's already uncommon for people to move from place to place to seek for a better life or a bright prospect or get rid of family misfortune. Thus, whether the vicissitude of life is a boon or bane has triggered a heated debate. While some people support this idea, I'm afraid I can't share this point of view due to the following aspects.

Firstly, living in a new social and natural environment can be a new starting point in life. We can make new acquaintances and build up new social and business contacts which are beneficial to our future careers. In this way, we are capable of refreshing our minds and vastly expanding our horizons. Although we may encounter some troubles like the hostility from new neighbors or may be treated as unwelcome outsiders and intruders, we have to believe that this situation is solely temporary owning to the lack of mutual communication and understanding which can be made up by time and efforts.

Further, old bosom friends will never lose. Increasingly developing technology and science have already made it possible for people to telecommunicate even between two persons who are departed from two distant places through approaches like MSN, visible telephone or even the ancient letters. Never will the bonding and connections between genuine friends break down unless your friendships are not tough enough to endure these little tiny partings.

In addition, one major drawback that often associates with never changing one's domicile and social environment is that life might become colorless and monotonous after many years of routine life. More often than that, people will be engulfed on such undesirable qualities as bigotry, prejudice and provincialism. And the conservative character or boring temper might also lead to the lost of old friends who are eager to explore new lives.

Taking all the argument into consideration, we may draw the conclusion that it's too ridiculous to claim that moving place is not a good thing because they may lose their old friends. Bosom friends cannot be detached from space. They will only feel hearted happy and wish their friends to be adaptive to new surroundings and everything's going right.

张璞UID: 2948450

4# wqr619 谢谢~蹲着的猫~给我的建议！
我确实习惯使用长句式，导致有语病！
改正中……

张璞UID: 2948450

2月22日：2011.02.11 NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.

  In this day and age, children are likely to mature far more early than the peers of their parents' era, which induce a heated debate on whether children are mature enough to control their autonomies. From my point of view, parents have the responsibilities to educate their children and supervise and adjust their children' mistakes rather than free them by letting them learn from their mistakes. Here is my thinking.

To start with, from kids to adolescents, most of them are too ignorant that they can hardly tell right from wrong. Because of the lack of self-control, they only have their full swing, which probably lead to irreversible mistakes. I will give a concrete example here. I heard a piece of news just yesterday, shockingly, saying that a middle school girl was killed by her classmate, a 16-year-old boy, whose father is a director general simply because she refused to become his girlfriend. What a brutal boy he is. And it's already too late for his parents to correct his mistake. Maybe the culprit can reshape himself and turn over a new leaf after spending several years transforming him in prison, however, who could make compensation for the poor girl's innocent life?
  
Further, in this international information age, there are various accesses for unsophisticated youngsters to gain information, among which there are plentiful exaggerated and deceitful contents. Taking the example of those unwholesome and indecent advertisements airing everywhere on the internet, they can definitely exert a corrupting influence on young people's minds. Consequently, children might be lured away from their studies even indulge themselves in erotic fantasies. Considering the popularity of the subculture of sexual suggestiveness and permissiveness nowadays might exert an inimical effect on the youth, can parents loose alert and feel relieved to leave their children grow by themselves?

Taking the arguments above into account, we may feel sorry and pity if the parents still insist their children should learn from their mistakes. Appealing to all the parents, I have to say that every decision you made about education is sure to pose a significant influence on your children. Hence, do what parents should do in light of your children's futures.

iBT20120304UID: 3228839

09年10月31日
It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends?7 {7 Q3 y0 ~8 O0 e6 v

In this day and age, it's already uncommon（到底uncommon还是common呢？） for people to move from place to place to seek for a better life or a bright prospect or get rid of family misfortune. Thus, whether the vicissitude of life is a boon or bane has triggered a heated debate. While some people support this idea（which idea？）, I'm afraid I can't share this point of view due to the following aspects.* |. p: L: R3 y3 e （）

Firstly, living in a new social and natural environment can be a new starting point in life. We can make new acquaintances and build up new social and business contacts which are beneficial to our future careers. In this way, we are capable of refreshing our minds and vastly expanding our horizons. Although we may encounter some troubles like the hostility from new neighbors or may be treated as unwelcome outsiders and intruders, we have to believe that this situation is solely temporary owning to the lack of mutual communication and understanding which can be made up by time and efforts.& j9 d! ]9 u/ \4 N3 |1 a6 s
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Further, old bosom friends will never lose. Increasingly developing technology and science have already made it possible for people to telecommunicate even between two persons who are departed from two distant places through approaches like MSN, visible telephone or even the ancient letters. Never will the bonding and connections between genuine friends break down unless your friendships are not tough enough to endure these little tiny partings.（句子有点冗长，unless后面的似乎多余；而且，这里的第二人称与之前有些不统一）

In addition, one major drawback that often associates with never changing one's domicile and social environment is that life might become colorless and monotonous after many years of routine life. More often than that, people will be engulfed on such undesirable qualities as bigotry, prejudice and provincialism. And the conservative character or boring temper might also lead to the lost of old friends who are eager to explore new lives." |) v6 I/ y5 j2 ]4 g0 J6 X; m

Taking all the argument into consideration, we may draw the conclusion that it's too ridiculous to claim that moving place is not a good thing because they may lose their old friends. Bosom friends cannot be detached from space. They will only feel hearted happy and wish their friends to be adaptive to new surroundings and everything's going right.

楼主的英文功底很好。
语法方面，我挑不出错误。
词汇方面，很丰富，很多亮点。
句式方面，楼主的句子写得很长，很有水平。

如果我能提一些建议的话，希望楼主注意长短句结合；另外，最好只在有表达需要的时候使用长句子，否则，长句子太多，理解起来较为费力。

加油！

张璞UID: 2948450

8# iBT20120304
谢谢阿达给我的宝贵意见！
第一处应是：common；
第二处改为：While some people feel it regretful  to move to a new place owning to the lost of friends, ……
第三处：我写的时候也觉得有些别扭，但是不知道该怎么组织句式。unless后面的内容省略的话，显得太过于绝对吧？ 我想表达：bosom friend 的 友谊是坚固的。不坚固的友谊即使不分隔两地，也会有失去的时候。
我的词汇量和表达习惯使我常使用长句式！因为短句子需要变换句型才显得有味道！
因此有时会导致语法错误！在该正中！加油！共勉！

张璞UID: 2948450

2010年6月19日机经独立作文

Whenpeople need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, somepeople prefer to use e-mail or text messaging. Others lie to use telephone orvoice message. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support youranswer.

From history, we know that conflict betweenpeople always exists no matter how close they are, not to mention the aloof ones. Inevidably, fixing the relationships and problems becomes a part of people's lives. Thus, the debate over the choices of the means to solve problems has triggered for a while. Either using e-mail or textmessaging or using telephone or voice message when facing a embarrassing problem, it depends on the situation, in my point of view. Here is my thinking.


For one hand, one critical point we have to consider when picking choice is thatwhether the problem is of emergency or not. What I mean by that is there mightnot be so much time for us to deal with the details but we have to focus on the consequence. The voice message or telephone may give us direct information aboutwhat the exact situation is, subsequently, do us a favor to address thecontroversial problem as quickly as possible. In contrast, using e-mail or textmessaging may take us more to type in the computer or telephone to deliver theinformation. We have to type in a hurry. Consequently, occasionally,unfortunately, they might contribute to deeper misunderstandings with theundesirable words and sentences in the visible communication, which has nothinghelp to discuss the upsetting or controversial problems.


On the other hand, e-mail or text message could be an implicit and ambiguous approach, which can exert a magic effect on discussion. In light of the special cases or sensitive situations, such ascouples who are angry with each other and both either like to confess his orher mistakes. In these cases, text message or e-mails can give each other spaceto smooth their temper and to rethink the whole upsetting and controversialthing. The situation might be eased resort to this way.


To sum up, it might be too assertive and arbitrary tomaintain which method is better or brighter. Each one suits a case. Consideringyour situation, it will help you make your choice.

iBT20120304UID: 3228839

2月22日：2011.02.11 NA
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.  l$ m* \2 J9 a4 N' b

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In this day and age, children are likely to mature far more early than the peers of their parents' era, which induce a heated debate on whether children are mature enough to control their autonomies. From my point of view, parents have the responsibilities to educate their children and supervise and adjust their children' mistakes rather than free them by letting them learn from their mistakes. Here is my thinking. 7 L+ U0 X* c  N* Y; h

To start with, from kids to adolescents, most of them are too ignorant that they can hardly tell right from wrong. Because of the lack of self-control, they only have their full swing, which probably lead to irreversible mistakes. I will give a concrete example here. （托福作文测试的是书面语言表达能力。这里的风格似乎是在讲故事，有些过于口语化。请谨慎。） I heard a piece of news just yesterday, shockingly, saying that a middle school girl was killed by her classmate, a 16-year-old boy, whose father is a director general， simply because she refused to become his girlfriend. What a brutal boy he is. And it's already too late for his parents to correct his mistake. Maybe the culprit can reshape himself and turn over a new leaf after spending several years transforming him in prison, however, who could make compensation for the poor girl's innocent life?此处最好能再来上一句，与段落主旨相呼应。, ?5 h. `5 Q" } 此处最好
  
Further, in this international information age, there are various accesses for unsophisticated youngsters to gain information, among which there are plentiful exaggerated and deceitful contents. Taking the example of those unwholesome and indecent advertisements airing everywhere on the internet, they can definitely exert a corrupting influence on young people's minds. Consequently, children might be lured away from their studies even indulge themselves in erotic fantasies. Considering the popularity of the subculture of sexual suggestiveness and permissiveness nowadays might exert an inimical effect on the youth, can parents loose alert and feel relieved to leave their children grow by themselves?! z: E& Q& z& G: \7 b9 D



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Taking the arguments above into account, we may feel sorry and pity if the parents still insist their children should learn from their mistakes. Appealing to all the parents, I have to say that every decision you made about education is sure to pose a significant influence on your children. Hence, do what parents should do in light of your children's futures.


以本人的托福考试经验，楼主的英文功底可以直接奔着30分满分作文去考。
加油！

iBT20120304UID: 3228839

From history, we know that conflict betweenpeople always exists no matter how close they are, not to mention the aloof ones. Inevidably, fixing the relationships and problems becomes a part of people's lives. Thus, the debate over the choices of the means to solve problems has triggered（是不是丢了一个be？应该是被动吧。） for a while. Either（你确定这个词可以这样用且表达那个意思吗？） using e-mail or textmessaging or using telephone or voice message when facing a embarrassing problem, it depends on the situation, in my point of view. Here is my thinking.& m; a2 S  ~2 {


For one hand, one critical point we have to consider when picking choice is thatwhether the problem is of emergency or not. What I mean by that（口语化。其实你整篇文章都是what you mean......） is there mightnot be so much time for us to deal with the details but we have to focus on the consequence. The voice message or telephone may give us direct information aboutwhat the exact situation is, subsequently, do us a favor to address thecontroversial problem as quickly as possible. In contrast, using e-mail or textmessaging may take us more to type in the computer or telephone to deliver theinformation. We have to type in a hurry. Consequently, occasionally,unfortunately, they might contribute to deeper misunderstandings with theundesirable words and sentences in the visible communication, which has nothing help(?) to discuss the upsetting or controversial problems.: [8 Y. h2 q: r$ j' |
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On the other hand, e-mail or text message could be an implicit and ambiguous approach(could be implicit and ambiguous), which can exert a magic effect on discussion. In light of the special cases or sensitive situations, such ascouples who are angry with each other and both either(neither would like to?) like to confess his or her mistakes. In these cases, text message or e-mails can give each other spaceto smooth their temper and to rethink the whole upsetting and controversialthing. The situation might be eased resort to this way.( S+ \4 |4 x5 o4 O  |
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To sum up, it might be too assertive and arbitrary tomaintain which method is better or brighter. Each one suits a case. Considering your（注意人称。第二人称稍带有说教味道，可能给人不太好的印象） situation, it will help you make your choice.
不错！朝着满分作文奔去吧~

张璞UID: 2948450

2011年 4月15日 独立作文
Universities spend money on improving facilities (labs and general requirements) better than hiring famous teachers.

For centuries, people have been eager to find out how to make the best utilization of educational resources to improve children's abilities, thus rising a heated debate on whether universities should spend money on improving educational facilities or hiring famous teachers. While some people believe that sophisticated and advanced facilities are more important than good teachers, I'm afraid I hold the opposite opinion.

To start with, though facilities like labs and general requirements might function more efficiently and present results more directly than teachers, they can never be more essential than teachers due to human's irreplaceable values. Take the experiment class for example. It is one of the disciplines in which teachers are playing a vital role in giving on-the-spot instructions and demonstrations of how exactly the procedure is step by step. And it would be unimaginably awkward and dangerous for students to turn to facilities, rather than a teacher standing by, for advise and guidance during an time-consumed exhaustingly experiment.

Another important reason is that the teaching is, by nature, a creative and flexible business, which is unlikely to be conducted by an electronic device. When confronted with students of different attitudes, capabilities, temperaments, it is the teacher, rather than facilities, that can adopt different approaches and adjust teaching methods constantly to meet students' needs and receive positive results because the latter can't be expected to invent spontaneously.

Further, the third reason lies in the fact that teachers can give students emotional support, whereas the facilities hardly know what emotion is. Because teaching is increasingly regarded as a process of interaction and communication between students and teachers, any small sign of disappointment, frustration and even depression showed by students can be noticed immediately with the caring and observing eyes of teachers, who lift up their spirits and help them get up on their feet through encouragements and inspirations.

To sum up, education, or art of teaching, is not a mechanical matter. Facilities can be used as a useful tool to improve students' understandings in some ways; nonetheless, teachers, as they have always seen, will still be the backbone of university education.

张璞UID: 2948450

11# iBT20120304 阿达给我的评价和鼓励特别振奋人心啊！
我会努力的！
共勉！:loveliness:

iBT20120304UID: 3228839

2011年 4月15日 独立作文 3 _' O4 y0 J2 x5 w- G( r' q  R
Universities spend money on improving facilities (labs and general requirements) better than hiring famous teachers.

For centuries, people have been eager（are obsessed with finding .... 如何？） to find out how to make the best utilization of educational resources to improve children's abilities, thus rising a heated debate on whether universities should spend money on improving educational facilities or hiring famous teachers. While some people believe that sophisticated and advanced facilities are more important than good teachers, I'm afraid I hold the opposite opinion.

To start with, though facilities like labs and general requirements might function more efficiently and present results more directly than teachers, they can never be more essential than teachers due to human's irreplaceable values. Take the experiment class for example. It is one of the disciplines in which teachers are playing a vital role in giving on-the-spot instructions and demonstrations of how exactly the procedure is step by step. And（用and作为句子开头，显得不够书面化） it would be unimaginably awkward and dangerous for students to turn to facilities, rather than（instead of？） a teacher standing by, for advise and guidance during an time-consumed exhaustingly experiment.

Another important reason is that the teaching is, by nature, a creative and flexible business, which is unlikely to be conducted by an electronic device. When confronted with students of different attitudes, capabilities, temperaments, it is the teacher, rather than facilities（楼主很喜欢用rather than）, that can adopt different approaches and adjust teaching methods constantly to meet students' needs and receive positive results because the latter can't be expected to invent spontaneously（这一小句，似乎有些多余。它使得整个句子的重心不稳。）.
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Further, the third reason lies in the fact that teachers can give students emotional support, whereas the facilities hardly know what emotion is. Because teaching is increasingly regarded as a process of interaction and communication between students and teachers, any small sign of disappointment, frustration and even depression showed by students can be noticed immediately with the caring and observing eyes of teachers, who lift up their spirits and help them get up on their feet through encouragements and inspirations.- M% L- Y) s( F

To sum up, education, or art of teaching, is not a mechanical matter. Facilities can be used as a useful tool to improve students' understandings in some ways; nonetheless, teachers, as they have always seen, will still be the backbone of university education.
很不错的作文！
楼主的词汇量真是丰富，巨赞~