Issue48同主题，641words，写好了详细提纲开始计时，还是超了3分钟，郁闷：（

echostateUID: 194935

Issue48 "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

观点：谁创造历史要看在什么领域。但是，对历史的学习无论如何都应当重视个体。
（1）科学领域，艺术领域——个人决定历史
（2）社会领域——群体决定历史：个人依靠群体，个人的思维更来自于社会的客观环境。
（3）不管谁真正创造历史，学习还是应该从个体入手。


I partly agree with the speaker that in some fields such as social revolution, the masses indeed play an crucial role in the history. Whereas, in my opinions, to state whether most of important events and trends in history are produced by the crowd needs a case by case analysis. Moreover, I disagree with the speaker that we have placed too much stress on the famous few, for the reason that giving much thought on individuals is beneficial to both historians and students to learn history.

To begin with, in the fields of science and art, almost all the achievements and progress are created by individuals, In other words, the multitude, in most cases, had never exert important influence on the advancement. Moreover, at the risk of sounding cold, the crowd sometimes performed as an obstacle of the history. An apt illustration is about Galileo. When almost everybody of the time believe in the Aristotle's prevailed rule that the heavies a substance is, the more acceleration it has, it is Galileo who conducted the famous experiment of Pisa and challenge this accepted rule. Hence lay a foundation to Newton's great "The first law of motion". The same is true of art, it is Beethoven who marked the culmination of great classical models of Haydn and Mozart and then exceeded to create his own methods for elaboration of music which influence large numbers of later musicians. To put it briefly, it is some key individuals who produce the history of science and art.

Nonetheless, when it comes to social evolution, one must concede that the faceless groups of people have a prominent effect on the advancement of history. Firstly, no matter how great an individual is, he or she must depend on social conditions and multitude to achieve success. To better understanding this statement, on need only look at the Civil War. Albeit some people will attribute the success of the war to Lincoln's strong will to free the slavery and his endeavor for this goal, no one could deny that it is based on the thousands of slavery and their own unyielding struggle that Lincoln win the war and become one of hero. Secondly, as famous as Lincoln, one is born with any great ideas. In other words, one's thought is shaped by the objective circumstances around him or her. In this sense, it is the slavery's will for freedom provided Lincoln with the motivation of the war. In short, I concede that the masses do exert a profound influence on the history of social progress.

In spite of whether it is the individuals create the history of the world, it is beneficial to study history by observing these "heroes". The chief reason is that placing more stress on the famous few rather than the multitude is convenient for both historians and students. In one sense, it is not practicable for historians to investigate the history by a host of unidentified people. Thus, by researching on a few leaders of the history, researcher can obtain the information they desire more easily and quickly. In another sense, it is useful and helpful for students to learn history by analyzing the heroes, for the reason that bearing in mind the key individuals of these events is a efficient way to remembering the history events. Moreover, by studying the lives of these "heroes", we can learn quite a lot merits and virtues from them. Simply put, merely for the purpose of studying history, one should keep eyes on the great individuals.

In last analysis, whether the great individuals or the nameless groups of people go a long way towards to history progress depend on the fields concerned. And when it comes to history study, it might be wise to advise on the assertion that we should place much more emphasis on the famous few.

sharon84UID: 2110816

I partly agree with the speaker that in some fields such as social revolution, the masses indeed play an crucial role in the history. Whereas, in my opinions [opinion], to state [觉得to state去掉比较好^^] whether most of important events and trends in history are produced by the crowd needs a case by case [case-by-case] analysis. Moreover, I disagree with the speaker [speaker？看你后面的定语从句应该是speaker's claim吧？:p] that we have placed too much stress on the famous few, for the reason that giving much thought on [to,固定搭配哦] individuals is beneficial to both historians and students to learn history.

To begin with, in the fields of science and art, almost all the achievements and progress are created by individuals, In other words, the multitude, in most cases, had never exert [exerted] important influence on the advancement. Moreover, at the risk of sounding cold [souding?探通术？？being surrounded cold?], the crowd sometimes performed as an obstacle of the history. An apt illustration is about Galileo. When almost everybody of the time believe [believed] in the Aristotle's prevailed rule that the heavies a substance is, the more acceleration it has, it is Galileo who conducted the famous experiment of Pisa and challenge this accepted rule. Hence lay a foundation to Newton's great [似乎少了一个noun，theory？:p]"The first law of motion". The same is true of art[Again, there are parallels with art，最近刚学会的一个句型，呵呵], it is Beethoven who marked the culmination of great classical models of Haydn and Mozart and then exceeded to create his own methods for elaboration of music which influence [has influenced] large numbers of later musicians. To put it briefly, it is  some key individuals who produce the history of science and art.

Nonetheless, when it comes to social evolution, one must concede that the faceless groups of people have a prominent effect on the advancement of history. Firstly, no matter how great an individual is, he or she must depend on social conditions and multitude to achieve success. To better understanding this statement, on need only [似乎only need好点] look at the Civil War. Albeit some people will attribute the success of the war to Lincoln's strong will to free the slavery and his endeavor for this goal, no one could deny that it is based on the thousands of slavery [slaves,slavery是指奴隶制、奴隶身份] and their own unyielding struggle that Lincoln win the war and become one of hero. Secondly, as famous as Lincoln, one is born with any great ideas. In other words, one's thought is shaped by the objective circumstances around him or her. In this sense, it is the slavery's will for freedom provided Lincoln with the motivation of the war. In short, I concede that the masses do exert [可以用produce，exert 、have 都用过了^^] a profound influence on the history of social progress.[你这里想说的是客观条件的促进作用吧，不过感觉相比前两段的精彩，这里说得还不太清楚]
[分领域讨论，思路清晰：）]

In spite of whether it is the individuals create the history of the world, it is beneficial to study history by observing these "heroes". The chief reason is that placing more stress on the famous few rather than the multitude is convenient for both historians and students. In one sense, it is not practicable for historians to investigate the history by a host of unidentified people. Thus, by researching on a few leaders of the history, researcher can obtain the information they desire [desired information] more easily and quickly. In another sense, it is useful and helpful for students to learn history by analyzing the heroes, for the reason that bearing in mind the key individuals of these events is a efficient way to remembering the history events. Moreover, by studying the lives of these "heroes", we can learn quite a lot merits and virtues from them. Simply put, merely for the purpose of studying history, one should keep eyes on the great individuals.

In last analysis, whether the great individuals or the nameless groups of people go a long way towards to history progress depend [depends] on the fields concerned. And when it comes to history study, it might be wise to advise on [去掉on] the assertion that we should place much more emphasis on the famous few.

哈，每次看你的文章都收获不小，Admire你的论证和用词变换 :)
这篇文章的思路挺清晰，不过有些地方存在些小语法错误，其实都影响不大^^
相比我每篇issue的难产，以及用例和论证的欠缺，真的需要好好向你学习:p

ps.什么时候考试？现在主要怎么复习？^^

[ Last edited by sharon84 on 2005-7-17 at 20:37 ]

sharon84UID: 2110816

我的同主题^^
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=301570

bridgewalkerUID: 208595

个人认为这里的study不是学习！

ilovehsUID: 154798

同意楼上的说法，应该是研究。题目职责历史的研究太过注重个人。

conannetUID: 179712

一哥，我来报到啦，回来上网不是很方便，二楼改得好详细啊

echostateUID: 194935

海gay？  ^O^
哈哈
已经到家了？
不用特意为我改啦
你写的时候贴上来咱俩互改就行了。
基本上不用改变你自己的复习习惯，不习惯上gter的话也无妨。
你不是还要准备t吗：P
对了，你的evlu comp 的paper咋样了？

[ Last edited by echostate on 2005-7-18 at 09:33 ]

echostateUID: 194935

还有，你这家伙竟然只有2篇帖子~~~汗~~~~

chris_zhUID: 2101887

文笔很流畅，看了之后感觉很不错，不过该改的地方似乎都被sharon改了：）我也挑不出其它毛病。
我的观点和你得有些不同，有兴趣可以看一下。我认为artist也不光是by themselves,同样离不开multitude