issue48 历史真的不是擅长，迟到的作业，欢迎互拍

ahqiuUID: 207682

Issue 48
——题目——
The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events in history were made possibly not only by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.
——正文——
As it is always said that people created history, which means people have played an important role in many significant events and we should not ignore them in the study of history. However, as far as I am concerned, we place much emphasis on few famous individuals for the subjective and objective reasons that famous individuals possess remarkable history values and the study of history is limited by the record of our ancestors,.

First of all, it is reasonable to research on some individuals, for they made great contributions in these events, which make them so typical that researching them may help us to understand history much easier. For example, when we research a war, we may probably focus on the individuals who initiated the war, who led people to fight against each side, and also the crux person in the turning point of that event. We learn their attitudes and their strategies toward a certain event so as to figure out the real causal of loss or the impetus of progress. Through the research on Lincoln, who led the Union during the Civil War, we may figure out that it is his ambiguous attitude towards the slavery that led to the defeat of the North at the beginning of the war., whereas, it also because he avail himself boarder power that made the North rally with their president and win at last. In this respect, by study a few individuals in historic events and trends, we can learn the pivotal factors of the events.

Besides, the study of history is based on the written information in the past, so whether we research the few famous or the masses largely depends on the records of our ancestors. That is to say despite in the past or at present, when people recorded the history of their times, they tend to write down few important characters, but not the group of people. In modern society, historians actually try every means to obtain as much information as possible to research the history thoroughly, but unfortunately, the records on the famous few are much more than the masses. People like to make things simple, moreover, the society have been used to focusing on few great giants in contemporary with them. It will not take us too far to see the example in the digital time, the success of Microsoft made Bill Gates one of the influential figures in computer industry, which may be recorded down by people, whereas, the architects and experts of Microsoft company will be ignored by us and most of them may probably be forgotten by our descendants eventually. In this sense, it is not decided by the historian how to study the history, but the people in that time how to record the events.

Although the famous few have contributed a lot to historical events and we can find considerable information about them, I have to concede that it is harmful to put too much emphasis on the great giants in the price of ignorance of populace. Actually, it is people who promote the wheel of history, and multitudes of revolutions are initiated by the contradictions between the public and the government, so it is indispensable to study the group of people for truly understanding the background and the root cause of a certain event. For example, through the study on Ganghi we cannot understand what result in the noncooperation. However, when we come to the masses, we know the reason that Indians’ demonstration resulted in a massacre of Indians. Obviously, it is helpful to study the masses which provide us with a more general perspective.

To sum up, I admit that the most significant events and trends in history are not made possible by great giants but by the group of individuals, and we can not ignore their devotion when we study history. However, historical research is limited by records of our ancestors. Moreover, in fact, the few giants made great devotions in those events, and it is beneficial to place much emphasis on them in historical studies.

staralwaysUID: 193479

The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events in history were made possibly not only by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.

As it is always said that people created history, which means people have played an important role in many significant events and [so that] we should not ignore them in the study of history. However, as far as I am concerned, we place much emphasis on few famous individuals for the subjective and objective reasons that famous individuals possess remarkable history values and the study of history is limited by the record of our ancestors.

First of all, it is reasonable to research on some individuals, for they made great contributions in [y]these events [什么event？], which make them so typical that researching them may help us to understand history much easier. For example, when we research a war, we may probably focus on the individuals who initiated the war, who led people to fight against each side, and also the crux person in the turning point of that event. We learn their attitudes and their strategies toward a certain event so as to figure out the real causal [cause] of loss or the impetus of progress. Through the research on Lincoln, who led the Union during the Civil War, we may figure out that it is his ambiguous attitude towards the slavery that led to the defeat of the North at the beginning of the war, whereas, it also because he availed himself boarder power that made the North rally with their president and win at last. In this respect, by study a few individuals in historic events and trends, we can learn the pivotal factors of the events.

Besides, the study of history is based on the written information in the past, so whether we research the few famous or the masses largely depends on the records of our ancestors. [这个观点比较新。] That is to say despite in the past or at present, when people recorded the history of their times, they tend to write down few important characters, but not the group of people. In modern society, historians actually try every means to obtain as much information as possible to research the history thoroughly, but unfortunately, the records on the famous few are much more than the masses. People like to make things simple, moreover, the society have been used to focusing on few great giants in contemporary with them. It will not take us too far to see the example in the digital time [era], the success of Microsoft made Bill Gates one of the influential figures in computer industry, which may be recorded down by people, whereas, the architects and experts of Microsoft company will be ignored by us and most of them may probably be forgotten by our descendants eventually. In this sense, it is not decided by the historian how to study the history, but the people in that time how to record the events.

Although the famous few have contributed a lot to historical events and we can find considerable information about them, I have to concede that it is harmful to put too much emphasis on the great giants in the price of ignorance of populace. Actually, it is people who promote the wheel of history, and multitudes of revolutions are initiated by the contradictions between the public and the government, so it is indispensable to study the group of people for truly understanding the background and the root cause of a certain event. For example, through the study on Ganghi we cannot understand what result in the non-cooperation. However, when we come to the masses, we know the reason that Indians’ demonstration resulted in [from?] a massacre of Indians. Obviously, it is helpful to study the masses which provide us with a more general perspective.

To sum up, I admit that the most significant events and trends in history are not made possible by great giants but by the group of individuals, and we cannot ignore their devotion when we study history. However, historical research is limited by records of our ancestors. Moreover, in fact, the few giants made great devotions in those events, and it is beneficial to place much emphasis on them in historical studies.

很不错的一篇文章。尤其觉得正文第二段的观点很好。

edgarluUID: 203648

Issue 48
——题目——
The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events in history were made possibly not only by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.
——正文——
As it is always said that people created history, which means people have played an important role in many significant events and we should not ignore them in the study of history.[从意思上分析这句话里的people以及them都是指代的famous people，而非people] However, as far as I am concerned, we place much emphasis on few famous individuals for the subjective and objective reasons that famous individuals possess remarkable history values and the study of history is limited by the record of our ancestors,.

First of all, it is reasonable to research on some individuals[楼主犯了我最近刚刚发现自己犯的一个错误,research是不及物，不能讲research sth.，用do research on sth. 或是investigate sth.，下同], for they made great contributions in these events, which make them so typical that researching them may help us to understand history much easier. For example, when we research a war, we may probably focus on the individuals who initiated the war, who led people to fight against each side[不是fight against each side而是fight against the other side], and also the crux person in the turning point of that event. We learn their attitudes and their strategies toward a certain event so as to figure out the real causal of loss or the impetus of progress. Through the research on Lincoln, who led the Union during the Civil War, we may figure out that it is his ambiguous attitude towards the slavery that led to the defeat of the North at the beginning of the war., whereas, it [is] also because he avail himself [of] boarder power that made the North rally with their president and win at last.[whereas后面用过去时态] In this respect, by study a few individuals in historic events and trends, we can learn the pivotal factors of the events.

Besides, the study of history is based on the written information in the past, so whether we research the few famous or the masses largely depends on the records of our ancestors. That is to say[这里用来表达“那也就是说”不妥] despite in the past or at present[这里despite不能用来表达不管….还是], when people recorded the history of their times, they tend to write down few important characters, but not the group of people. In modern society, historians actually try every means to obtain as much information as possible to research the history thoroughly, but unfortunately, the records on the famous few are much more than the masses. People like to make things simple[这未必是的历史记录个人色彩严重的原因], moreover, the society have been used to focusing on few great giants in contemporary with them [in their contemporaries]. It will not take us too far to see the example in the digital time, the success of Microsoft made Bill Gates one of the influential figures in computer industry, which may be recorded down by people, whereas, the architects[软件行业确实有system architect这样的职位，但是单独用architect表示计算机行业的设计师不太常见，software designers maybe] and experts of Microsoft company will be ignored by us and most of them may probably be forgotten by our descendants eventually. In this sense, it is not decided by the historian how to study the history, but the people in that time how to record the events.

Although the famous few have contributed a lot to historical events and we can find considerable information about them, I have to concede that it is harmful to put too much emphasis on the great giants in[with] the price of ignorance of populace. Actually, it is people[做人民，大众讲一定要加the] who promote the wheel of history, and multitudes of revolutions are initiated by the contradictions between the public and the government, so it is indispensable to study the group of people for truly understanding the background and the root cause[根源？没有这么讲的，虽然批者应该也能读懂] of a certain event. For example, through the study on Ganghi we cannot understand what result in the noncooperation. However, when we come to the masses, we know the reason that Indians’ demonstration resulted in a massacre of Indians.[楼主这个例子的意思我能理解，就是说光看甘地的履历只能看出不合作运动的过程和结果，而看不到结果背后人民付出的代价。问题是如果是对甘地的历史研究，不可能不研究不合作运动各种政治成果的cause和effect，楼主有必要把关于甘地的部分叙述范围再限制一下] Obviously, it is helpful to study the masses which provide us with a more general perspective.

To sum up, I admit that the most significant events and trends in history are not made possible by great giants but by the group of individualsze, and we can not ignore their devotion when we study history. However, historical research is limited by records of our ancestors. Moreover, in fact, the few giants made great devotions in those events, and it is beneficial to place much emphasis on them in historical studies.

不知楼主擅长哪一类的文章

ahqiuUID: 207682

关于软件我肯定那是architect
B3的例子我也觉得很不好，只是逼了半天最后决定随便写个算了，我会再修改一下的，多谢你的意见
还有根本原因据我所知就是root cause,
呵呵，我没有一类擅长的，只是历史更让我头疼一些

ahqiuUID: 207682

谢谢搂主的鼓励，偶会继续努力的，呵呵

fhxyweiUID: 157384

看了一下，比我写的同主题要好，关键是有创新点

staralwaysUID: 193479

architect是计算机体系结构设计师，应该是没错的。

jason0926UID: 200697

谢谢ahqiu刚才批改了我的文章,提出的意见很是宝贵
对于你的文章,因为实力不如你,所以语法之类的就不多少了
有一点可以提出的是,我觉得第三段用盖茨的例子好像不好,他好像还不能划到历史里去吧,而且研究他的历史学家好像也没有吧,还是举过去的一些名人的例子为好,这是我的观点,班门弄斧了,不好意思,呵呵,这是我的ISSUE48,写的不好
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... p;page=1#pid1631377

ahqiuUID: 207682

Originally posted by jason0926 at 2005-7-19 16:06
谢谢ahqiu刚才批改了我的文章,提出的意见很是宝贵
对于你的文章,因为实力不如你,所以语法之类的就不多少了
有一点可以提出的是,我觉得第三段用盖茨的例子好像不好,他好像还不能划到历史里去吧,而且研究他的历史 ...

盖茨的例子只是为了说明笔者的记录，举个当代的例子只是觉得就发生在身边的事也许比较有说服力的，虽然现在不研究，可是现在的记录影响到了将来的研究了
呵呵，我会再考虑的，多谢多谢

jason0926UID: 200697

恩,也许你是对的,呵呵,我只是说说,怎么写顺手还是怎么写
你哪天考呀?

ahqiuUID: 207682

我八月30
呵呵，很晚才考