issue11 世界性大学修改过，期待砖头，我拍的一向很认真阿~

fircattyUID: 166248

11.All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.
提纲
1 世界性大学有好处，提供交流场所
2但未必实用，解决世界性问题需要经验和资金
3 各国支持不太实际，穷国家吃穿都成问题，怎么能支持建大学

When investigating the social problems in the world, people often find some similarity in different nations. So could all nations develop a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems mutually? Though the thought would be reasonable to some extent, the feasibility and the practical effects may be dubious.

I concede that building up a global university would undoubtedly supply a good environment for students and experts from different nations to discuss the common social problems with which people all over the world are confronted. For instance, the energy crisis, the environmental issues, the healthy problems are all the critical problems we should front. If all nations could successfully build up a global university, where the youth and professors from various countries could freely exchange views as well as share the technology to help control and solve the problems, people worldwide would benefit from it and many disputes can be easily avoided by plenty of communication and understanding.

However, global university is just a place fostering the preparatory person with ability to solve persistent social problems, which is far from solving the detailed problems in practice. On one hand, just like a student in a school of cook may know how many components should be put to cook, but he/she can not necessarily cook as delicious as a experienced cook. Social problems are often solved by certain research institutes and the governments with rich experience. On the other hand, solving social problems calls for a financial support, which is impossible for a university to afford consider that the first purpose of a university is educating. Thus, the prospective function of the global university is incredible.

More importantly, even if the global university will be able to assist people to solve the most persistent social problems, nevertheless, it is impractical to require all nations to support the development of the university. As we all know, people in many poor countries are still miserable with hunger and disease, and what they are in urgent need is only ample food. For these conutries, money and energy payed for supplying  people with things to eat and wear are not enough yet, how could we request them to support a global university? Further, if the global university is built up and governed by few rich countries, how should we assure that it is designed to solve the world’s most persistent social problems rather than just be designed to solve the social problems in the rich countries and serves only for the few countries?

In sum, it is true that by developing a global university, some the world’s most persistent social problems would be discussed and some solutions would be shared. But it cannot guarantte to effectively solve the solution in that solving problems needs money and experience and other things. In addition, it is improper to demand all nations, despite of the economic level, to support the global university.

shanekunUID: 2104358

感觉楼主语言很流畅阿，transition 很棒，
不过有一个疑问，值得商榷：All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.

这里的help我想可以理解为赞同，支持，参与，也就是出人出力，并没有明确的表示文中所指的那样在每个国家都建一个阿，于是B3就有点偏了。。。

fircattyUID: 166248

没有啊，文中的global university全都是单数的，并没有说要在每个国家都见，b3是想说各国都要支持建，但有些国家没有能力支持，不过我开始想的就是资金支持，其他的到都没有考虑阿。是不是应该补充一下，就是说有的国家既不能出人也不能出力？
谢谢shanekun的赞扬，其实都已经写的才思枯竭了。不过还是被鼓励了，恩，努力！

fircattyUID: 166248

If all nations could successfully build up a global university,

肯定是这句有歧义，改成 if all nations support the development of a global university and build up it in a concerted effort,是不是好些了

sixsenseUID: 197669

今天实在太累了，明天一定看。
这几天边上课边准备作文实在太吃力。我专门买了小袋装Nestle咖啡和一打纸杯子，每天下午上课前来一杯，就靠咖啡来顶了。苦日子啊。

edgarluUID: 203648

issue11 世界性大学修改过，期待砖头，我拍的一向很认真阿~

11.All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.
提纲
1 世界性大学有好处，提供交流场所
2但未必实用，解决世界性问题需要经验和资金
3 各国支持不太实际，穷国家吃穿都成问题，怎么能支持建大学

When investigating the social problems in the world, people often find some similarity in different nations. So could all nations develop a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems mutually? Though the thought would be reasonable to some extent, the feasibility and the practical effects may be dubious.

I concede that building up a global university would undoubtedly supply a good environment for students and experts from different nations to discuss the common social problems with which people all over the world are confronted. For instance, the energy crisis, the environmental issues, the healthy problems are all the critical problems we should front. If all nations could successfully build up a global university, where the youth and professors from various countries could freely exchange views as well as share the technology to help control and solve the problems, people worldwide would benefit from it and many disputes can be easily avoided by plenty of communication and understanding.

However, global university is just a place fostering the preparatory person with ability to solve persistent social problems, which is far from solving the detailed problems in practice. On one hand, just like a student in a school of cook may know how many components should be put to cook, but he/she can not necessarily cook as delicious as a experienced cook. [just like a student in a school of cook who may know how many components should be put to cook, yet can not necessarily cook as well as an experienced cook does.] Social problems are often solved by certain research institutes and the governments with rich experience. On the other hand, solving social problems calls for a financial support, which is impossible for a university to afford consider that the first purpose of a university is educating [to educate]. Thus, the prospective function of the global university is incredible. [个人觉得这段论点和题目有些出入，题目本身说的也是engage students in the process of，谈得也是对过程的参与而没有说学校就必然解决社会问题 in practice。]

More importantly, even if the global university will be able to assist people to solve the most persistent social problems, nevertheless, it is impractical to require all nations to support the development of the university. As we all know, people in many poor countries are still miserable with hunger and disease, and what they are in urgent need is only ample food. For these conutries, money and energy payed for supplying  people with things to eat and wear are not enough yet, how could we request them to support a global university? Further, if the global university is built up and governed by few rich countries, how should we assure that it is designed to solve the world’s most persistent social problems rather than just be designed to solve the social problems in the rich countries and serves only for the few countries?
[这段TS没有能覆盖所有观点。对于第一层观点，我觉得support这个概念是很广，题目中未提到是financial support，也可能是道义上的support，比如说在问题严重的国家，政府为这些社会问题解决者的研究大开绿灯。]

In sum, it is true that by developing a global university, some the world’s most persistent social problems would be discussed and some solutions would be shared. But it cannot guarantte to effectively solve the solution in that solving problems needs money and experience and other things. In addition, it is improper to demand all nations, despite of the economic level, to support the global university.

我如果采用反对态度写这篇文章的话，倾向于从世界大学的可操作性入手，而非其实际解决问题的能力，如我之前所说，题目中只是讲此大学能使学生参与解决社会问题，对实际效果并未断言。
楼主本文语法几乎无暇，用词也颇见功底，本人获益良多。若为限时之作，可赞可叹。
新写一篇，有空赐教
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=305164

fircattyUID: 166248

谢谢edgarlu的细心的批改，我先消化下~~bow~~
你的文章我存下了
下午在贴

sixsenseUID: 197669

你的这篇文章我下了并改了几处语法, 后来小区宽带坏了三天, 没法上网贴. 今天用的不是我自己的电脑, 没办法把文章贴出来, 明天帖.

sixsenseUID: 197669

几天前的修改了，今天贴出来。

When investigating the social problems in the world, people often find some similarity in different nations. So could all nations develop a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems mutually? Though the thought[idea是不是更好一些] would be reasonable to some extent, the feasibility and the practical effects may be dubious.

I concede that building up a global university would undoubtedly supply a good environment for students and experts from different nations to discuss the common social problems with which people all over the world are confronted. For instance, the energy crisis, the environmental issues, the healthy problems are all the critical problems we should front. If all nations could successfully build up a global university, where the youth and professors from various countries could freely exchange views as well as share the technology to help control and solve the problems, people worldwide would benefit from it and many disputes can be easily avoided by plenty of communication and understanding.

However, global university is just a place fostering the preparatory person with ability to solve persistent social problems, which is far from solving the detailed problems in practice. On one hand, just like a student in a school of cook may know how many components should be put to cook, but he/she can not necessarily cook as delicious as a experienced cook. [这个例子不错，很形象]Social problems are often solved by certain research institutes and the governments with rich experience. On the other hand, solving social problems calls for a financial support, which is impossible for a university to afford consider that the first purpose of a university is educating. Thus, the prospective function of the global university is incredible.

More importantly, even if the global university will be able to assist people to solve the most persistent social problems, nevertheless, it is impractical to require all nations to support the development of the university. As we all know, people in many poor countries are still miserable with[suffering from] hunger and disease, and what they are in urgent need is only ample food. For these conutries, money and energy payed[paid，呵呵] for supplying  people with things to eat and wear are not enough yet, how could we request them to support a global university? Further, if the global university is built up and governed by few rich countries, how should we assure that it is designed to solve the world’s most persistent social problems rather than just be designed to solve the social problems in the rich countries and serves only for the few countries?

In sum, it is true that by developing a global university, some [of] the world’s most persistent social problems would be discussed and some solutions would be shared. But it cannot guarantee to effectively solve the solution[solution不是被solve的，是被develop出来的并被carry out或实现的。用solve problem也可以，但和后面就重复了] in that solving problems needs money and experience and other things. In addition, it is improper to demand all nations, despite of the economic level, to support the global university.
嗯，as usual, 逻辑清楚有条理.不错不错，继续努力。