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Does education do little to promote social harmony since it encourages students to question and criticize? The speaker claims so, however, as far as I concerned, I concede that education promotes social harmony while it goads students learning and thinking critically.

Admittedly, one purpose of education is to know how to question and criticize, inevitably, both of them will cause diverges and disagreements. For supporting example, college students have lots of seminars when they learn variety kinds of disciplines. Teachers give them a topic or a theme to discuss and hearten students to doubt and try to find flaws of them. By doing this, students present different opinions and attitudes, maybe some of them support one point while others stand on the opposite position. They try to persuade the opponents by arguing and debating, and quite possibly, ending up with an unpleasant result.

Aside from the foregoing proviso, I believe that questioning and criticizing are important ways for
students to study all sorts of knowledge and understand other people, consequently, making the society more harmony. Students are taught to gain knowledge critically, that is to say, they cannot only receive what they have learned but should develop their own points of view concerning the problems and form the value of the world. To achieve this goal, education helps them solving troubles by using unique means and sometimes, the opposite way. By doing so, students put themselves in other people's shoes and have a better understandings of others. Only when people think and act in other's positions can they have a profound awareness of difficulties and situations that others are coming across. Therefore, the society becomes more harmonious.

Another reason why I disagree with the speaker is that social development cannot without questions and solutions, many vital problems are doubted by society and then improved. There is a good instance for this case: pollution is an international problem but it gains little attentions at the first time, when scientists point out the emergency and denounce society does nothing to protect our environment, nations all over the world begin to know the harm of pollutions and adopt actions to solve environmental troubles. That is what we see today, people around the world start improving living conditions and go great lengths to avoid pollutions. It is not difficult to find that it is the power of questioning and criticizing. By pointing out problems and seeking ways to deal with them, human can make the society wholesome and better satisfied with needs of people.

To sum up, although sometimes education encourages students to question and criticize may cause some disagreements and inconsistentnesses, I concede that social harmony cannot go further without questioning and criticizing, just because they are necessary ways to achieve social harmony.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-28 at 13:30 ]

one way streetUID: 194590

第一次,希望各位高手多多支持啊!
我的宗旨:有拍必回的!!!

one way streetUID: 194590

帮帮忙啊！真的不知道写的怎么样啊！

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Does education do little to promote social harmony since it encourages students to question and criticize? The speaker claims so, however, as far as I concerned, I concede that education promotes social harmony while it goads students learning and thinking critically.

Admittedly, one purpose of education is to know(who know?) how to question and criticize, inevitably(最好放到will后面，去掉一个逗号), both of them(which) will cause diverges and disagreements. For supporting example, college students have lots of seminars when they learn variety kinds of disciplines. Teachers give them a topic or a theme to discuss and hearten students to doubt and try to find flaws of them. By doing this, students present different opinions and attitudes, maybe some of them support one point while others stand on the opposite position. They try to persuade the opponents by arguing and debating, and quite possibly, ending up with an unpleasant result.

Aside from the foregoing proviso, I believe that questioning and criticizing are important ways for students to study all sorts of knowledge and understand other people, consequently, making the society more harmonyStudents are taught to gain knowledge critically, that is to say, they cannot only receive what they have learned but should develop their own points of view concerning the problems and form the value of the world. To achieve this goal, education helps them solving troubles by using unique means and sometimes, the opposite way. By doing so, students put themselves in other people's shoes and have a better understandings of others. Only when people think and act in other's positions can they have a profound awareness of difficulties and situations that others are coming across. Therefore, the society becomes more harmonious.(后半段从by doing so开始，例子是不是有些牵强？带着question and criticize的眼光更倾向于不会理解别人)

Another reason why I disagree with the speaker is that social development cannot (从句里缺谓语)without questions and solutions, many vital problems are doubted by society and then improved. There is a good instance for this case: pollution is an international problem but it gains little attentions at the first time, when scientists point out the emergency and denounce society does nothing to protect our environment, nations all over the world begin to know the harm of pollutions and adopt actions to solve environmental troubles. That is what we see today, people around the world start improving living conditions and go great lengths to avoid pollutions. It is not difficult to find that it is the power of questioning and criticizing. By pointing out problems and seeking ways to deal with them, human can make the society wholesome and better satisfied with needs of people.

To sum up, although sometimes education encourages students to question and criticize may cause some disagreements and inconsistentnesses(inconsistency)这句的语法有问题，may前面的应该是个从句而不是完整的句子, I concede that social harmony cannot go further without questioning and criticizing, just because they are necessary ways to achieve social harmony.
第一篇写成这样挺不错了，整体结构比较清晰
建议把各段的TS写得更精炼一点，切中要害；多积累一些例子，要能很好的支持TS
句子都写长并不好，尤其是经常会犯逻辑、语法、语义上的错误，适当的把句子写得简练一些。虽然俺自己也写不好:)

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非常感谢Sunny!!!这么多天总算有人看了！
很宝贵的意见，我会仔细改正的! I cannot thank you enough!