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Issue216  第4篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：113分7秒     414 words
从2005年6月30日20时33分到2005年6月30日22时113分

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Most important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.
提纲：
1 确实有许多成果是在研究问题时偶然得到的
2 偶然得到的成果还是少数，原因有
   [1] 偶然得到的可能性很小
   [2] 即使有偶然的成果出现，也容易被忽视
3  大多数的成果是人们有意研究获得的，这也是社会进步的主要原因

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It is true that when we seek the answer to one question sometimes we may meet an useful answer to anther fortunately, however these lucky answers take up a small section of the total amount.

Admittedly, many important discoveries come up when people were in quest for a irrelevance solution to the problem. In fact, when people seek an answer, it may take them a long way to go and on the way it may happen many things which can lead to an unexpected result very useful. For example, on the searching for India, Clumber discovered America which he thought was West India until his death; in a commonplace experiment, Faraday discovered the law of electromagnetic induction which is the main method of generating electricity today. Thus, it is possible that people may have additional harvest when they are searching for another answer.

However, the creations accidental are a small part of the total discoveries people have. There are two reasons: First, the chance of the appearance of the unexpected answer is small. If one does an important research, the plans which should result in the expected consequence are carefully designed and have little chance to lead to anything irrelevance to the research. Second, the researchers may be so involved in their work that the small evidence of the unexpected discoveries may be neglected. Sometimes, when an important discovery in science is published, there may come a scientist claiming that the result has come up by accident when he did some irrelevant research before then.

Furthermore, the large quantities of the discoveries are purposely which largely push the society forward. For centuries, human beings were seeking answers to their questions to go after their dreams, and as the important anticipated resulted were received, the society improved. It is not advisable to relay on the creations occurred by chance. People can not expect the doctor to invent a treatment by concerning something else but not the disease; people can not expect the designer to design a new type of a car by concerning something else but not cars; people also can not expect a scientist to institute a physics theory by concerning chemistry. Thus, although people gain a lot through accidental discoveries, they should put their heart in the seeking for the anticipated results.

To sum up, important creations may come up accidental but if people depend on these discoveries to improve their civilization which are largely developed by expected results of the researches, hardly any more progress would be made.

mrealUID??201732

今天来晚了，我来改吧：）

mrealUID??201732

issue216 V6站队 7.31

Issue216  第4篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：113分7秒     414 words
从2005年6月30日20时33分到2005年6月30日22时113分

------题目------
Most important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.
提纲：
1 确实有许多成果是在研究问题时偶然得到的
2 偶然得到的成果还是少数，原因有
   [1] 偶然得到的可能性很小
   [2] 即使有偶然的成果出现，也容易被忽视
3  大多数的成果是人们有意研究获得的，这也是社会进步的主要原因

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It is true that when we seek the answer to one question sometimes we may meet an useful answer to anther fortunately, however these lucky answers take up a small section of the total amount什么的总数？虽然可以理解，但是还是在具体说明一下吧~.

Admittedly, many important discoveries come up when people were in quest for an irrelevance solution to the problem. In fact, when people seek an answer, it may take them a long way to go and on the way it may happen many things which can lead to an unexpected result very useful这样表述不太明确吧. For example, on the searching for India, Clumber discovered America which he thought was West India until his death;我觉得这个例子不好，和要说的理不太搭，C并不是在发现印度的同时意外发现了美洲啊， in a commonplace experiment, Faraday discovered the law of electromagnetic induction which is the main method of generating electricity today.这个例子我觉得用在这里也值得商榷~~至少应该把与道理的关系说的再明确一些 Thus, it is possible that people may have additional harvest when they are searching for another前面已经用了additional这里再用another就不太好了吧 answer.

However, the accidental creations  are a small part of the total discoveries people have. There are two reasons: First, the chance of the appearance of the unexpected answer is small. If one does an important research, the plans which should result in the expected consequence are carefully designed and have little chance to lead to anything irrelevance to the research. Second, the researchers may be so involved in their work that the small evidence of the unexpected discoveries may be neglected. Sometimes, when an important discovery in science is published, there may come a scientist claiming that the result has come up by accident when he did some irrelevant research before then.最后这句如果作为例子听起来好像没有说完的感觉，应该再说清楚一些吧
Furthermore, the large quantities of the discoveries are purposely which largely push the society forward.这句话语病还是挺严重的，不如改成it is discoveries coming from scientists' specific research towards a chosen subject that push the society forward. For centuries, human beings were seeking answers to their questions to go after their dreams, and as the important anticipated resulted were received, the society improved. It is not advisable to relay on the creations occurred by chance. People can not expect the doctor to invent a treatment by删 concerning something else but not the disease; people can not expect the designer to design a new type of a car by concerning something else but not cars; people also can not expect a scientist to institute a physics theory by concerning chemistry. 再说例子~我还是觉得用在这里不太合适，没有直接说明道理Thus, although people gain a lot through accidental discoveries, they should put their heart in似乎不这么说吧，用concentrate on  the seeking for the anticipated results.

To sum up, important creations may come up accidentally but if people depend on these discoveries to improve their civilization which are largely developed by expected results of the researches, hardly any more progress would be made.

mrealUID??201732

思路我觉得没有什么问题，但是语言上还是应该注意一下，尤其是一些应该避免的语法错误，最重要的还是你的举例，我觉得没有什么说服力，还应该改进一下哈，拙见，呵呵，咱们可以再讨论啊~~~

dinddind2003UID??196353

谢谢啊，觉得你说的很对，我也正愁呢

dinddind2003UID??196353

那么你觉得我是例子用的不好呢，还是例子说得不清楚，还是例子说完后可以再分析一下？比如

People can not expect the doctor to invent a treatment by删 concerning something else but not the disease; people can not expect the designer to design a new type of a car by concerning something else but not cars; people also can not expect a scientist to institute a physics theory by concerning chemistry. 再说例子~我还是觉得用在这里不太合适，没有直接说明道理

这一段，我举的三个例子。

mrealUID??201732

说说你提出的这个排比的例子吧，我说的苛刻一点，有点像实在想不出例子然后硬套出来的，也就是说你举的例子并没有让别人产生共鸣，没有觉得“嗯嗯，的确这样”，你明白我说的意思吗？也许这样说的太严厉了，或者是我没有很好的理解你的意思，说的狠了点你别介意啊，呵呵~~~

dinddind2003UID??196353

恩，我的例子是从反面说的，那么再改改我再和你讨论啊