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我觉得自己开头还行，结尾有点仓促。论点在列提纲时想得挺深刻的，只是没能把它们写下来。现在想听听大家的意见，再作修改:handshake

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Technology is a necessary but not always a positive force in modern life.

提纲
技术本身是没有意识地为人类服务的，它将产生什么样的后果取决于它怎样为人所用
1. 技术空前地提高了人们的生活质量，带来巨大和深远的改变
2. 技术帮助人类实现了探索宇宙的梦想
3. 但是技术并没有也不可能代替艺术和情感道德的作用，对人性的进步产生什么影响
4. 同时，对技术的过度依赖和滥用会给人类的命运带来深重的灾难

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Ever since the Industry Revolution in the 19th century, technology has, step by step, built its state in our society, and now prevails in almost all aspects of our lives. Having tasted the sweet it brings to us, as well the pains we have been suffering, the identification of technology is becoming vague in our eyes. Is it good, or evil, or is it just chess in our hand? Whatever the case is, it is a fact that technology is the cause of amounts of controversies in modern world, and is far more than what I can describe it as in bellow.

To begin with, we need not to look no farther than the things around us in house or in office to see the progress and facilities technology has granted us. When driving work, striking deals on the net, or watching a movie, we are surrounded by the countless fruits of technology, and sometimes we even ignore a fact that almost every thing in our daily life is produced on the manufacturing line. Profound changes have taken place and no doubt we are on the threshold to a entirely new era when our life-style, and even our attitudes toward life have been greatly different from in the past. After all, it's technology that makes our lives more comfortable.

What's more, in our endeavor to fulfill the childhood dreams of the human race, technology has acted as a wonderful helper in the way we human beings search to find out the myths of the nature and the origin of mankind. The Discovery is now on its way back to the earth, having fulfilled its task of fixing the space buildings. The space above the tropic line is replete by satellites which send back thousands of photos of the planet we live on. And spaceship propelled by the light pressure from the sun on in its prototype to carry out new ideas and hopes of mankind to fly in and even out of the Solar System even the Galaxy. What our ancestor describes only in the fairy tales is now vitally in front of us, and no one will doubt the power of technology, and no one could conceive what we will achieve in the future.

However, technology is not the god that we should worship with all our hearts and spirits, for it's neither a panacea to cure the problems exiting in the world, nor it can contribute to the enhancing of humanity. While computer is leading the world into a more colorful world in which one is overwhelmed by the convenience and ease it creates, we don's tend to drop the world behind us, unless if someone can bring out sound proofs to persuade people to replace all the museums and galleries with computer centers where we can browsing online to watch the 3D pictures synthesized by the computer, or to stay on the web to enjoy music instead of going to a concert. Arts, including the delicate structures carved by the great architects, poems out of the rich and sensitive spirits of the literati, which are the fruits of human minds, and the mores, beliefs held by common people to support their faith in life and enhance their self-esteem, have little to do with technology, and on the reverse side, the amounts of information around us and the daily work which we are dedicated in, are in some cases actually obstacles on our way in search of truth.

Furthermore, technology is just a tool without mind and feelings in our hands, which can be taken advantage of by both the good and the evil. In facing of the disasters laid on the innocent people on Hiroshima by the A-bomb, it's no easy thing to recall to the fact that tens of the most famous scientists have signed on the treaty which give way to the use of nuclear power. And even to overly rely on technology could mean serious consequence, considering the case that an attack is conducted toward the system of the bank or the government, which will inevitable cause turmoil and result in a staganence of the social issues.

All in all, technology, in itself, is neither our god nor our devil. It's indispensable in our mundane life, but not the essence, say nothing of the whole, of our lives. Friend it may be under some conditions, we should turn a strict eye on it to prevent it from changing to an enemy.

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Ever since the Industry Revolution in the 19th century, technology has, step by step, built its state in our society, and now prevails in almost all aspects of our lives. Having tasted the sweet it brings to us, as well the pains we have been suffering, the identification of technology is becoming vague in our eyes. Is it good, or evil, or is it just chess chessman in our hand? Whatever the case is, it is a fact that technology is the cause of amounts of controversies controversial issues?controversy means dispute or the act or practice of engaging in such disputes in modern world, and is far more than what I can describe it as in bellow. 很好的开头段

To begin with, we need not to look no farther than the things around us in house or in office to see the progress and facilities technology has granted us. When driving work, striking deals surfing? on the net, or watching a movie, we are surrounded by the countless fruits of technology, and sometimes we even ignore a fact that almost every thing in our daily life is produced on the manufacturing line. Profound changes have taken place and no doubt we are on the threshold to a entirely new era when our life-style, and even our attitudes toward life have been greatly different from in the past. After all, it's technology that makes our lives more comfortable.

What's more, in our endeavor to fulfill the childhood dreams of the human race, technology has acted as a wonderful helper in the way we human beings search to find out the myths of the nature and the origin of mankind. The Discovery is now on its way back to the earth, having fulfilled its task of fixing the space buildings. The space above the tropic line is replete by replete with  satellites which send back thousands of photos of the planet we live on. And spaceship propelled by the light pressure from the sun on in its prototype to carry out new ideas and hopes of mankind to fly in and even out of the Solar System even the Galaxy. What our ancestor describes only in the fairy tales is now vitally in front of us, and no one will doubt the power of technology, and no one could conceive what we will achieve in the future.

However, technology is not the god that we should worship with all our hearts and spirits, for it's neither a panacea to cure the problems exiting in the world, nor it can contribute to the enhancing of humanity.华丽的长句，呵呵 While computer is leading the world into a more colorful world in which one is overwhelmed by the convenience and ease it creates, we don's tend to drop the world behind us, unless if someone can bring out sound proofs to persuade people to replace all the museums and galleries with computer centers where we can browsing online to watch the 3D pictures synthesized by the computer, or to stay on the web to enjoy music instead of going to a concert. Arts, including the delicate structures carved by the great architects, poems out of the rich and sensitive spirits of the literati, which are the fruits of human minds, and the mores, beliefs held by common people to support their faith in life and enhance their self-esteem, have little to do with technology, and on the reverse side, the amounts of information around us and the daily work which we are dedicated in, are in some cases actually obstacles on our way in search of truth.这段有点凌乱 好像

Furthermore, technology is just a tool without mind and feelings in our hands, which can be taken advantage of by both the good and the evil. In facing of the disasters laid on the innocent people on Hiroshima by the A-bomb, it's no easy thing to recall to the fact that tens of the most famous scientists have signed on the treaty which give way to the use of nuclear power. And even to overly rely on technology could mean serious consequence, considering the case that an attack is conducted toward the system of the bank or the government, which will inevitable cause turmoil and result in a staganence ? spelling  of the social issues.

All in all, technology, in itself, is neither our god nor our devil. It's indispensable in our mundane life, but not the essence, say nothing of the whole, of our lives. Friend it may be under some conditions, we should turn a strict eye on it to prevent it from changing to an enemy.

个人建议：文字很精彩，内容也展开的很不错， 不过对技术的negative force上论述的不是太有力，为什么不说一下技术进步带来的论理，道德，环境上的问题呢？

看了你的文章，我打算重写一下这个issue，晚上发上来给拍拍！

[ Last edited by 安卓美达 on 2005-8-8 at 18:18 ]

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hwyireneUID: 200039

谢谢啦
我本来列提纲时的确是打算把负面影响当作重点来写的，而且想到了很多东西，不过后来因为个人对文艺的东西很感兴趣，写到那些被现在的快餐文化排挤的精美的东西，一时感慨太多，就顺手写下去了，结果反而写得很乱而且耽误了正题。自己又是学理的，不想总是写被写了很多次的东西，比如环境等等。看来说写议论文时情绪激动，只有平淡而清醒时才能写好是很有道理的，呵呵

先把今天的作业写了，再修改这篇，你的我也会看的:)