issue51--这么高频，不敢不写了，有拍必回！欢迎讨论！

purple1228UID: 2116196

51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
提纲：partial agree
首先，从教育的使命来说，需要它很大程度的向人们的需要，兴趣妥协
其次，人们的需要，兴趣是人类进步社会发展的有力推动，所以教育应该满足人们的这些需求
当然，我们也要看到有些知识虽然我们没兴趣，以为不需要，事实上却会很大程度的限制我们后来的发展，所以，教育应该辨证的看待这些问题
With the development of human civilization, there is a growing public attention paying to the relationship between the function of education and individual needs as well as interests of each student. As far as I am concerned, on a balance, I strongly agree with the title statement that unless education can meets the individual needs and interests of each student, it would leave ineffective and boring for us.

To begin with, the function of education is to serve us to be nurtured with the fundamental knowledge left by the ancestors, to be conscious of our current situation, and to be evoked the energy deep from the our soul to strive for the destination of our own made. So, the emphasis put on the individual needs as well as interests cannot not be too much. It is the aim of education that determines the necessity of meeting the individual needs and interests.

Then, the individual needs and interests of each is the true engine to promote human beings since one is more curious and willing to know the issues which they have been attracted. As the saying goes, interest is the best teacher. Mozart, treated as one of the most famous musician and god given child, showed a great interest in music since he was only five. If the education given by his family has little to do with music, to what degree his significant work would be diminished? Interest is the voice deep from our soul which cannot be halted by the restraint of education. Thus, in order to be effective, education should take the individual needs and interests in account.

Admittedly, to make a complete one, will also need to be informed with the things that we might have little interests in--or at least think it unimportant and have little to with us. One need not look further to find things like that. Take Einstein for example, he showed no interest in mathematics in his childhood. With time going, however, he found the importance of it while engaging in the field of physics. Then, he turned back to study the former knowledge which he thought useless, but, now, considered as a crucial issue in his study. None could imagine how his contribution--if any--will be disturbed by the ignorance of the mathematics. In other words, the knowledge which is seemingly invalid may turn out to be a vital one that cannot be looked down.

In sum, education, as mentioned above, should be positive in meeting the individual needs and interests of each student, as long as it still sticks to make a balance on the general introduction of all the realms about our human beings, the world around us, and the relationship between our human beings, and between the world and humans.
晕，怎么突然觉得我有点偏题，对人们的需要和兴趣不加区分的讨论了…

foreveraUID: 202035

With the development of human civilization, there is a growing public attention paying to the relationship between the function of education and individual needs as well as interests of each student. 这句太罗嗦点了,改成more and more attention are paid to analyze the relationship between ....个人以为被动语态比there be的句型会好一点,还有后面的of each student就不要了As far as I am concerned, on a balance ms没有a吧,还有这里用这个连接短语吗?我觉得不用也更通顺点,因为前面有as far as i am concerned了, I strongly agree with the title statement that unless education can meets the individual needs and interests of each student, it would leave ineffective and boring 用名词形式for us. 开头写的还不错

To begin with, the function of education is to serve us to be nurtured 这个句子感觉有点问题.我也没找出来,读着感觉不爽.with the fundamental knowledge left by the ancestors, to be conscious of our current situation, and to be evoked the energy deep from the our soul to strive for the destination of our own made decision?. So, the emphasis put on the individual needs as well as interests cannot not be too much这个是再...也不过分的句式吗?我记不清了,如果不是换成那个也许感觉会好一点. It is the aim of education that determines the necessity of meeting the individual needs and interests.少点例子

Then, the individual needs and interests of each 前面有individual了就不要each了 is the true engine to promote human beings since one is more curious and willing to know the issues which they have been attracted. 长的原因状语放到前面结构会好看一点 As the saying goes, interest is the best teacher. for instanceMozart, treated as直接去掉就可以了 one of the most famous musician and god given child, showed a great interest in music since he was only five. If the education given by his family has little to do with music, to what degree his significant work would be diminished? to what degree应该说出来吧 consequentlyInterest is the voice deep from our soul which cannot be halted by the restraint of education. Thus, in order to be effective, education should take the individual needs and interests in account.

Admittedly, to make a complete one, 这句话有点多余 主语呢?will also need to be informed with the things that we might have little interests in--or at least think it unimportant and have little to with us. TS的提出最好简洁点One need not look further to find things like that. Take Einstein for example, he showed no interest in mathematics in his childhood. With time going, however, he found the importance of it while engaging in the field of physics. Then, he turned back to study the former knowledge which he thought useless, but, now, considered as a crucial issue in his study. None could imagine how his contribution--if any--will be disturbed by the ignorance of the mathematics. In other words, the knowledge which is seemingly invalid may turn out to be a vital one that cannot be looked down. 这段还是不错的

In sum, education, as mentioned above, should be positive in meeting the individual needs and interests of each student, as long as it still sticks to make a balance on the general introduction of all the realms about our human beings, the world around us, and the relationship between our human beings, and between the world and humans.



这一篇写的还是很不错的哦,结构比较清晰,就是注意一些小毛病.

呵呵...发个我很久以前写的....看看我的水平比以前是提高了还是降低了.....
这篇非常长的....有时间随便看看，没时间算了...HOHO
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[ Last edited by forevera on 2005-8-11 at 20:18 ]

sebarinaUID: 2108158

占座……

sebarinaUID: 2108158

累了~~~等我过两天写了这篇来拍！