argment216 高频阿，"决战830拍砖组™"

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The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
'Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average.'
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By citing a series of the attractive data about the place called Clearview like climate and estate taxes, the argument concludes that Clearview is the most ideal place for retirement. However, close examination reveals that the argument is not convincing.

To begin with, the spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate doesn't mean that Clearview is a good place to retire. It is entirely possible that the people don't care about these factors when they make a choice for the retirement places. They consider other factors like the price of the house more than these factors. The argument doesn't compare this place with other place concerned with the natural environment and climate. It is possible that other places are much more beautiful and have a better climate than Clearview. If so, why the people prefer to other places?  

Besides, the fact that the bones and housing costs have decreased significantly during the past year and real estate taxes remain lower cannot prove that the trend will remain stable or even more beneficial for the consumer. Perhaps this year the bonus, housing costs and real estate taxes have increased rapidly, let alone in the future. In addition, the argument cannot make a comparison of these things between Clearview and other regions. The expenditures on the bonus, housing costs and housing cost might be much higher than other regions.

Next, we need query the promise of the Clearview's mayor. Is the promise enough reliable for the consumers? The argument doesn't provide any evidence such as effective measurement to strengthen the promise. Even if the promise is reliable, it doesn't indicate that the people who want to find places for retirement are interested in these factors. What they care most might be other things like the clubs and theatres for entertainment.

Finally, the argument cannot justify that the number of physicians will that residents Clearview will expect an excellent health care. The argument fails to consider other possibilities which might have influence on the health care. From the argument, we don't know the number of hospital, the price of medicines, the quality of the medical equipments and the skill of these physicians. Although the physicians are much more than the national average, it might be the case that the number of hospital is much less than the other regions. It also might be the case that price of medicines is too expensive to afford it for the people. And the quality of medical equipments also doesn't satisfy the local people. The skill of physicians is also important. Without good physicians, the serious disease of patients might not be cured.

To sum up, before any decision on the ideal place for retirement is made, more clear investigation about the relevant circumstances in Clearview is much useful. To prove that Clearview is most suitable for retirement, the argument should provide that the better evidence about the by making a comparison of the things mentioned between Clearview and other regions. We should also know the factors which really interest the people who plan for retirement.

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By citing a series of the attractive data about the place called Clearview like climate and estate taxes, the argument concludes that Clearview is the most ideal place for retirement. However, close examination reveals that the argument is not convincing.

To begin with, the spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate doesn't mean that Clearview is a good place to retire. It is entirely possible that the people don't care about these factors when they make a choice for the retirement places. They consider other factors like the price of the house more than these factors. The argument doesn't compare this place with other place(s) concerned with the natural environment and climate. It is possible that other places are much more beautiful and have a better climate than Clearview. If so, why the people prefer to other places?  

Besides, the fact that the bones(呵呵粗心好吓人哦) and housing costs have decreased significantly during the past year and real estate taxes remain lower cannot prove that the trend will remain stable or even more beneficial for（to？） the consumer. Perhaps this year the bonus, housing costs and real estate taxes have increased rapidly, let alone in the future. In addition, the argument cannot make a comparison of these things between Clearview and other regions. The expenditures on the bonus, housing costs and housing cost might be much higher than other regions.（这段可以把你知道的组织得更好些，特别是后面一个理由）
Next, we need query the promise of the Clearview's mayor. Is the promise enough reliable for the consumers? The argument doesn't provide any evidence such as effective measurement to strengthen the promise. Even if the promise is reliable, it doesn't indicate that the people who want to find places for retirement are interested in these factors. What they care most might be other things like the clubs and theatres for entertainment.

Finally, the argument cannot justify that the number of physicians will that residents Clearview will expect an excellent health care（看了几遍也看不懂，Ts这样不好吧，尽管俺水平有限，呵呵）. The argument fails to consider other possibilities which might have influence on the health care. From the argument, we don't know the number of hospital, the price of medicines, the quality of the medical equipments and the skill of these physicians. Although the physicians are much more than the national average, it might be the case that the number of hospital is much less than the other regions. It also might be the case that price of medicines is too expensive to afford it for the people. And the quality of medical equipments also doesn't satisfy the local people. The skill of physicians is also important. Without good physicians, the serious disease of patients might not be cured.

To sum up, before any decision on the ideal place for retirement is made, more clear investigation about the relevant circumstances in Clearview is much useful. To prove that Clearview is most suitable for retirement, the argument should provide that the better evidence about the（？） by making a comparison of the things mentioned between Clearview and other regions. We should also know the factors which really interest the people who plan for retirement.
（真能写，能不能少写点，多提炼下语言呢？结构思路什么的都差不多了。来晚了，抱歉！
以后把提纲也弄上来，予人方便，予己方便）