issue130 就最后几天了，来看看吧!!谢谢了

vickycy6UID: 2107893

Issue130  
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How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
1 观点：我们已经有很好的方法了
2 教育分三种。智力教育
3 心理教育
4 体育
5 总结

不知道是不是可以这样写？！
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Throughout the history, the reform of education has always been widely discussed; in order to raise our children who determines the destiny of society, numerous educators have devote their lives into research a better way. However, have we not yet learned how to cultivate our children till today, as the speaker contends? In my view, we have found the optimal way to educate children, nevertheless, such way will also need to be improved forever.

The education for children involves three main aspects: intelligent, psychologic, and physical education. Intelligent education is the foundation for a sunshiny country tomorrow, as the saying goes, “science and technology is the first productivity”. Without comprehensive knowledge in such a competitive world, there will be no space for such a person to stand in. So we arrange the children begin to recognize words when they go to kindergarten, and send them to have a systematic education in primary school, middle school, and then take tests to university where advanced science and technology be taught. All these alone are all aimed at fostering children to become a erudite person who will be capable of undertaking the burden of construction our society.

Admittedly, on the way we find such a smooth and integrated way for children to complete such a difficult learning process, myriads of setbacks came with us. Take the education system in China for example, initially, we were taking the exam-oriented guideline which wish children would be more concentrate on study, however, the results turned out to be more and more cheating in the exam for what we concern is only the score on the paper. To avoid such unpleasant phenomenon, the educators advocate the policy: Education for all-round development. Since then not only relive the burden of students, but also the quality of the education obviously enhanced.  

Let us consider the psychologic education: this is the most difficult subject for educators to design a program to instruct children while such is the most significant for a person to well grow up. Even though an informed person achieved what he or she dreamed, while he does not have a healthy mentality, a little frustration will knock him or her down. Nowadays due to the increasing attention on the development of psychologic, psychologic station spring up in all kind of education system. Especially in university where reported having a growing number of mental problem, the government investigate a large sum of money into the study of psychology. As a result, despite the intense competition around the students, the healthy and mature mentality will help them come over all the hardship they meet with.

Besides an intelligent brain, a healthy psychology, a fit physical body is of the same importance. And our professional educators also make great emphases on the training of body. Morning exercise are required in many schools, and Physical Education are set as a required curriculum, and every year each school will take the sports meeting. Such measures are all set to warrant the continuing study for children because that a fit body is the capital for survive.

In sum, we human beings have found ways which also need permanent improvement to raise children rightly, not only for the hopes that they can bring us a better tomorrow, but also it is a symbol of the development of human kind.

真是感谢你的留言了!

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zrreignUID: 179980

Issue130  
------题目------
How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
1 观点：我们已经有很好的方法了
2 教育分三种。智力教育
3 心理教育
4 体育
5 总结

不知道是不是可以这样写？！
------正文------
Throughout the history, the reform of education has always been widely discussed; in order to raise our children who determines the destiny of society, numerous educators have devote their lives into research a better way. However, have we not yet learned how to cultivate our children till today, as the speaker contends? In my view, we have found the optimal way to educate children, nevertheless, such way will also need to be improved forever.

The education for children involves three main aspects: intelligent, psychologic, and physical education. Intelligent education is the foundation for a sunshiny country tomorrow, as the saying goes, “science and technology is the first productivity”. Without comprehensive knowledge in such a competitive world, there will be no space for such a person to stand in. So we arrange the children begin to recognize words when they go to kindergarten, and send them to have a systematic education in primary school, middle school, and then take tests to university where advanced science and technology be taught. All these alone are all aimed at fostering children to become a erudite person who will be capable of undertaking the burden of construction our society. 觉得你的词汇不错，用得都很好。可是句式上可能要改一改，因为我觉得太中国化，而且在一些描述性的句子上更是考人的语言功底的。比如你上面的我们从...到...都培养他们智力，那些句子我觉得不好。

Admittedly, on the way we find such a smooth and integrated way for children to complete such a difficult learning process, myriads of setbacks came with us. Take the education system in China for example, initially, we were taking the exam-oriented guideline which wish children would be more concentrate on study, however, the results turned out to be more and more cheating in the exam for what we concern is only the score on the paper. To avoid such unpleasant phenomenon, the educators advocate the policy: Education for all-round development. Since then not only relive the burden of students, but also the quality of the education obviously enhanced.  有些词不是那么准确，感觉是按照词典上有这个意思就直接用了。观点挺好的，我学习！

Let us consider the psychologic education: this is the most difficult subject for educators to design a program to instruct children while such is the most significant for a person to well grow up. Even though an informed person achieved what he or she dreamed, while he does not have a healthy mentality, a little frustration will knock him or her down. Nowadays due to the increasing attention on the development of psychologic, psychologic station spring up in all kind of education system. Especially in university where reported having a growing number of mental problem, the government investigate a large sum of money into the study of psychology. As a result, despite the intense competition around the students, the healthy and mature mentality will help them come over all the hardship they meet with.

Besides an intelligent brain, a healthy psychology, a fit physical body is of the same importance. And our professional educators also make great emphases on the training of body. Morning exercise are required in many schools, and Physical Education are set as a required curriculum, and every year each school will take the sports meeting. Such measures are all set to warrant the continuing study for children because that a fit body is the capital for survive.

In sum, we human beings have found ways which also need permanent improvement to raise children rightly, not only for the hopes that they can bring us a better tomorrow, but also it is a symbol of the development of human kind.

你很多词不准确阿，最后一段“我们人类 we human beings”都出来了感觉太中国化，大白话。不过还有很多词我都学习到了，谢谢你。另外，我自己认为应该讨论一下是否孩子融入社会的能力就决定了社会的命运，你说呢？

vickycy6UID: 2107893

恩!
提的要求好好哦
谢谢了
辛苦了!