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The purpose of education should be to create an academic environment that is separate from the outside world. This kind of environment is ideal because it allows students to focus on important ideas without being held back by practical concerns.
提纲：
position：和社会接触的学术环境好
1.        可以为社会培养更多的促进社会进步的人才
2.        可以让学生更好的为今后的工作做好准备
3.        但教育不能过分的受功利主义的影响
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In our rapid-changed society, which needs more practical intellectuals than ever before, it is more wisdom to create an academic environment which has a close relationship with the practical concerns in our society, since an opening academic environment is more beneficial for the development of the society and better prepares students for their job in future. Besides, education should not be seriously affected by the utilitarianism in the society.

To begin with, the relatively opening academic environment provides more practical intellectuals for our society, which serves as the stimulative power to the social development. In this rapidly changed society, the practical concerns of the majority of the society just serve as the lighthouse in the sea. An education system without knowing the practical concerns is just like the ship on the sea which can not find the lighthouse and finally lost its direction. Only knowing which kind of intellectuals is needed by our society, can the education system efficiently cultivate the intellectuals, and thus better finish its final purpose--to impel the societal development. For instance, after China entered the WTO(the World Trade Organization), lots of the law schools in Chinese universities met the problem that the need of the intellectuals who can utilize the relative laws to protect the profit of the Chinese company in the world trade by enhancing the devotion to cultivate the students in the field of international economic law .If the Chinese universities were sent into the academic environment separated from the social concern, then how could we fetch up the lack the intellectuals in the international economic laws? And further how could the Chinese companies use the laws to protect their own benefits in the world trade?

In the second place, students, the majority of the education, could better prepare themselves for the future job in the relatively opening academic environment. Before enter to the society, accepting the education and learning the basic skill is quite necessary for the students. In the opening academic environment, which has the close relationship to the society, the students might clearly understand which skill are more money- made and which kind of the graduates is most popular in the society, and thus they might better prepare themselves to struggle their lives in society. For example, nowadays, using the Internet to collect the useful information is a basic and necessary skill for lots of jobs, and the students in campus have gradually familiarized with the Internet and mastered this skill. If the students were cultivated in the separated environment which never pays attention to such social concern, then after graduation, how can they find a job to feed themselves?

On the other hand, the education which is significantly influence by the utilitarianism of the practical concerns in society is also harmful. Our education should put infusing students the basic principles and systemic education in relative academic field rather than merely teaching them one or two popular skill as its first priority. Our society is developing so fast that no matter how popular and powerful the skill is, it would be out off time quickly. Only mastering one of two temporarily popular skills would not much helpful for students to support themselves in the society. For example, in contemporary disciplines of computer science, for most of programmers who can use JAVA (the most popular one programming language in the world), JAVA has not been advanced, when they accept education. However, depending on the basic principles of program they learn in universities, they can master this new language at quite a short time. So, the basic principles is more important the temporarily popular skills.

To sum up, the opening academic environment is more beneficial for the society and better prepares students for their job. While, at the same time, we must notice that the excessively influence by the utilitarianism education is also harmful.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-24 at 00:05 ]

mrealUID: 201732

我来~

mrealUID: 201732

In our rapid-changed society, which needs more practical intellectuals than ever before, it is more wisdom to create an academic environment which has a close relationship with the practical concerns in our society, since an opening academic environment is more beneficial for the development of the society and better prepares students for their job in future. Besides, education should not be seriously affected by the utilitarianism in the society.我以前经常被提醒不用刻意的追求句式的复杂，在这里我也想说，可以把带着如此多从句的长句变成更清晰的几个短句也许效果更好。

To begin with, the relatively opening academic environment provides more practical intellectuals for our society, which serves as the stimulative power to the social development. In this rapidly changed society, the practical concerns of the majority of the society just serve as the lighthouse in the sea. An education system without knowing the practical concerns is just like the ship on the sea which can not find the lighthouse and finally lost its direction. Only knowing which kind of intellectuals is needed by our society, can the education system efficiently cultivate the intellectuals, and thus better finish its final purpose--to impel the social development. For instance, after China entered the WTO(the World Trade Organization), lots of the law schools in Chinese universities met the problem that the need of the intellectuals who can utilize the relative laws to protect the profit of the Chinese company in the world trade by enhancing the devotion to cultivate the students in the field of international economic law .If the Chinese universities were sent into the academic environment separated from the social concern, then how could we fetch up the lack of the intellectuals in the international economic laws? And further how could the Chinese companies use the laws to protect their own benefits in the world trade? 可以做一个小结来归纳这段的观点。

In the second place, students, the majority of the education, could better prepare themselves for the future job in the relatively opening academic environment. Before entering the society, accepting the education and learning the basic skill is quite necessary for the students.这句话的主从句主语不一致，不能省略从句主语的啊~应该说Before the students enter the society,...... In the opening academic environment, which has the close relationship to the society, the students might clearly understand which skill are more money- made and which kind of the graduates is most popular in the society, and thus they might better prepare themselves to struggle their lives in society. For example, nowadays, using the Internet to collect the useful information is a basic and necessary skill for lots of jobs, and the students in campus have gradually familiarized with the Internet and mastered this skill. If the students were cultivated in the separated environment which never pays attention to such social concern, then after graduation, how can they find a job to feed themselves?

On the other hand, 这个似乎应该在只有明确的两方面的时候说吧，这里应该用比较明显的转折连词，个人意见，不过我觉得问题不大the education which is significantly influence by the utilitarianism of the practical concerns in society is also harmful. Our education should put infusing 这个用法有问题吧？students the basic principles and systemic education in relative academic field rather than merely teaching them one or two popular skill as its first priority. Our society is developing so fast that no matter how popular and powerful the skill is, it would be out off time quickly. Only mastering one of two temporarily popular skills would not much helpful for students to support themselves in the society. For example, in contemporary disciplines of computer science, for most of programmers who can use JAVA (the most popular one programming language in the world), JAVA has not been advanced, when they accept education. However, depending on the basic principles of program they learn in universities, they can master this new language at quite a short time. So, the basic principles is more important the temporarily popular skills.

To sum up, the opening academic environment is more beneficial for the society and better prepares students for their job. While, at the same time, we must notice that the excessively influence by the utilitarianism education is also harmful.

mrealUID: 201732

说说我理解的你的观点~
1，接触外界的教育可以时时满足社会需要。
2，可以帮助学生为涉足社会做好准备。
3，但是社会发展太快，学生应该被教授基本原理。
如果我没有理解错，你的b3应该是跑题了，如果坚持你的提纲的内容，应该就好多了~
还有，语言挺流畅，b1b2的观点没有问题，但是感觉论证没那么有力，你似乎比较倾向反证，但是有时正面论证更有说服力，可以尝试一下。
话说的有些多，呵呵，再讨论哈~