Issue11 fantasy组，没限时，严重偏题！

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The suggestion for all nations to support a global university designed for the purpose of dealing with the persistence social problems by producing? students specialized in relating fields (Who says????)sounds admirable at first glance. However, by examining the functions of university and the ongoing processes of higer eduction, I would reckon that the fancy of global university is unpractical and needless in solving the worldwide difficult matters.

First consider the function of a university, certain notion that is widely accepted as a contributor of necessary training for individuals wishing to enter professional future careers, is unrealistic expectations in the so-called global university owing to the limitation of it. The primary obstacle that prevents the global university from providing adequate trainings to students lies in the adminstrative and political side. Choosing curriculum, for instance, may be quite a debate among nations. Developed countries might protest against underdeveloped nations demands on agronomy to shake off poverty , while the latter would inevitably ignore the technology of reduce contaminant discharge by automobiles. Ultimately, the divarications may impede the university to provide comprehensive courses and temper the original intention of education. Secondly, even if all the nations come to an agreement on what pressing problems deserve for the university's attention, the study and research focused only on those specific fields can not shoulder their students' personal enrichment for future career due to the narrow resource and onefold target.
的确这偏了

Next consideration goes to the existing higer education system, from which students receive progress upon creativity, insight, and analytical skills. University meet the basic requirement for the students in their future careers by providing diverse lessons covered several professions as engineering, teaching, law, medicine, and information science. The intellectually stimulating environment of a multiversity or college indeed serves for the cradle of social or scientific giants for hundreds of years. Take Harvard University for example, it has bred more than thirty Noble Prize winners over the last century which attested its unique role in nurturing the most outstanding talents. Harvard graduates also actively engaged in every continent striving to solve world's persistent problem such as global warming, medical aids for Africans, terrorism, and so forth. Additionally, a great deal of world's famous universities open wide to the international students, which enable multitude of young persons, keen, openhearted, sympathetic, and observant, come together and freely enjoy the veritas. The students with such an multicultural education background, as an American senior chemists once said to me, are more likely to be the leaders in their generation and play a significant part in impressing the world.

Furthermore, the endeavor of solving the world's annoying and urging social problem at international level is indispensable. Compared with relocating all the contemporary educational resources to abet a new educational institution, cooperation and communication between nations on the bases of the current higer education possess more merits, more convenience, as well as less squander. This kind of cooperation is proved to be feasible and has been accepted among many nations. A case in point is the Leadership for Sustainable Development Project sponsored by British government and implement through a joint effort of several universities in western countries. The project--aiming at preparing future leaders with sustainable perspective--has trained groups of personnels came from both developed and developing countries. Zhang Xubiao, a Chinese trainee of the project, has participated in several crucial decision concerning China's environmental protection and revolution of state owned enterprises as a consultant for the government shortly after he completed the one year study and came back to China.后两段越来越偏

To sum up, given the fact that human society is confronted with many pressing and stubborn problems, and that the globalization increasingly narrows down the borders of different nations, so long as each nation can hold on its own prominence and rationally distributes its intellectual and financial to the international or interregional educational cooperation, an affirmative harvest of promising generation can be anticipated. Consequently, it is unnecessary for us to support a specific global university, which embraced bundles of conundrum that wrecks its feasibility.

建议可支持
第一．世界各国尽管具体情况不同，但是存在很多共同的问题，共同探讨很有价值：很多问题有相同的根源；比较研究；不同角度看问题找办法。A global university could help to solve mutual problems that different country faced and help to find a common ground or reach a consensus in the human world. e.g. pollution, the depletion of atmospheric ozone.

第二．很多问题由于世界各国的看法不一致产生矛盾，共同研究利于增进了解：文化冲突；环境污染；战争。The global university also provides different nations with a platform that can learn the difference and standpoint of one another, and thereby contributes to the solutions and mitigating the conflicts.

第三．建立这样一所大学需要注意一些问题，才有利于产生真正有价值的研究结果，为世界造福：相互尊重观点；保持客观的态度。While, there are two sides for ever icon, a global university also poses certain risks which may exacerbate some pressing international problems. (1) 可能忽视地方问题neglecting the parochial problems. (2) Some of the problems in the global university, such as the unfairly distribution of the limited resource, may easily spell some discordance among nations.

第四．此外，全球性的大学还应当积极地吸收和听取各国的声音，尽可能的减少政治上带来的影响 Furthermore, the global university also needs to hear different sound and make every nation possible to gain a equal opportunity to participate in the solutions of the problems and at the same time, share the mutual fruitions of the research.

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有没有人告诉我如果反对该怎么写呢？

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可以写：
1、建立全球性的大学，有很多实际困难，操作起来不切实际。
2、除了建立全球性的大学，一样有很多其他方式可以解决社会问题。

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占座。。。明天早上来看。。。晚上总是很迷糊。。。

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The suggestion for all nations to support a global university designed for the purpose of dealing with the persistence social problems by producing students specialized in relating fields sounds admirable at first glance. However, by examining the functions of university and the ongoing processes of higer eduction, I would reckon that the fancy of global university is unpractical and needless in solving the worldwide difficult matters.(怎么开头都这么写，晕：)

First consider the function of a university, certain notion that is widely accepted as a contributor of necessary training for individuals wishing to enter professional future careers, is unrealistic expectations in the so-called global university owing to the limitation of it.（limitation 在哪里？） The primary obstacle that prevents the global university from providing adequate trainings to students lies in the adminstrative and political side. Choosing curriculum, for instance, may be quite a debate among nations. Developed countries might protest against underdeveloped nations demands on agronomy to shake off poverty（这个和选择功课有关系吗？） , while the latter would inevitably ignore the technology of reduce contaminant discharge by automobiles.（可以通过cooperation来互相exchange 对方的关注点啊） Ultimately, the divarications may impede the university to provide comprehensive courses and temper the original intention of education. Secondly, even if all the nations come to an agreement on what pressing problems deserve for the university's attention, the study and research focused only on those specific fields can not shoulder their students' personal enrichment for future career due to the narrow resource and onefold target.

Next consideration goes to the existing higer education system, from which students receive progress upon creativity, insight, and analytical skills. University meet the basic requirement for the students in their future careers by providing diverse lessons covered several professions as engineering, teaching, law, medicine, and information science. The intellectually stimulating environment of a multiversity or college indeed serves for the cradle of social or scientific giants for hundreds of years. Take Harvard University for example, it has bred more than thirty Noble Prize winners over the last century which attested its unique role in nurturing the most outstanding talents. Harvard graduates also actively engaged in every continent striving to solve world's persistent problem such as global warming, medical aids for Africans, terrorism, and so forth. Additionally, a great deal of world's famous universities open wide to the international students, which enable multitude of young persons, keen, openhearted, sympathetic, and observant, come together and freely enjoy the veritas. The students with such an multicultural education background, as an American senior chemists once said to me, are more likely to be the leaders in their generation and play a significant part in impressing the world.（讲社会的基础科学，技术架构对整个世界发展的影响，以及这种影响决定了大学的教育目的，但是没有把这段说清楚）

Furthermore, the endeavor of solving the world's annoying and urging social problem at international level is indispensable. Compared with relocating all the contemporary educational resources to abet a new educational institution, cooperation and communication between nations on the bases of the current higer education possess more merits, more convenience, as well as less squander. This kind of cooperation is proved to be feasible and has been accepted among many nations. A case in point is the Leadership for Sustainable Development Project sponsored by British government and implement through a joint effort of several universities in western countries. The project--aiming at preparing future leaders with sustainable perspective--has trained groups of personnels came from both developed and developing countries. Zhang Xubiao, a Chinese trainee of the project, has participated in several crucial decision concerning China's environmental protection and revolution of state owned enterprises as a consultant for the government shortly after he completed the one year study and came back to China.
（这段就说对了。。那些急迫的问题还不是要靠基础的科学来解决，他们不是孤立的：）

To sum up, given the fact that human society is confronted with many pressing and stubborn problems, and that the globalization increasingly narrows down the borders of different nations, so long as each nation can hold on its own prominence and rationally distributes its intellectual and financial to the international or interregional educational cooperation, an affirmative harvest of promising generation can be anticipated. Consequently, it is unnecessary for us to support a specific global university, which embraced bundles of conundrum that wrecks its feasibility.


我觉的：
应该先讲大学教育的目的
再讲大学教育目的的重要性
再讲重大的问题不是孤立的
再假设如果按照论点的正面会有什么后果

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个人感觉：其实你没有把你的例子和所要讲的东西结合起来，

比如Harvard的，如果它算是global university的话，那么就可以拿来支持你的观点，所以你得思考一下harvard算不算globall university

我也是讲反对的，你可以参考一下

贴一下我的提纲

ISSUE11
All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.
开头：concede题干。 My: 各个nations需要cultivate他们的学生将来能够devote到社会建设，并创造contribution.
1、从个人角度，高中毕业生不一定选择study in a global university. 举例：各个学生有不同的preference和ambition，他们根据自己的interests，advantage来选择学校，专业。
2、从社会角度，社会需要各种人who have various specialties and capabilities. 举例：软件公司－programmer，in the fields of manufactures－mechanics or electronics engineers
3、从国家角度，各个国家情况不同，有些不适合support the development of a global university. 举例：一些国家需要加强sci-tech， 同时，the development of a global university 的花费会很大
4、Admittedly, 一些well developed countries可以支持the development of a global university. 举例：发展民主，保护环境，解决污染等全球性问题。


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请假研究题库中，会看的，回复不及时的话勿怪啊！这一篇从你的提纲看，最后一段论点不错，前两段和我一样很容易偏题的。

另外，自己发现了自己的一个大问题，就是主题句过长，且不能清楚的抛出观点，大家引以为戒啊。（问了一个AW5.5的高中同学后的心得）

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虽然本人快考了，可是才刚开始准备作文。
关于这一次的狂跑题，出了冷汗的同时很欣慰——没有跑到考场上去啊
我的这段论述角度，我想，放在辩论赛的自由辩论里的某一句支持自己观点的辩词还可以，
但是，作为issue文章，远没有把握住有效的紧扣论题。
如果反对，我该说它如何不可行，如何不能达到目的，
而我环顾左右而言它仅说其他的方法的可行性是不能证明此方法的不可行性的。
不知这段反省各位感觉如何。
大家吸取我的教训啊，哈，虽然相信大家不会犯我这种弱智错误的。

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The suggestion for all nations to support a global university designed for the purpose of dealing with the persistence social problems by producing 生产不太合适吧，用cultivating students specialized in relating related fields sounds admirable at first glance. However, by examining the functions of university and the ongoing processes of higer eduction higher education，错别字，呵呵, I would reckon that the fancy of global university is unpractical and needless in solving the worldwide difficult matters.

感觉这段话的开头写的累赘了，不如把certain notion部分去掉，直接引出中心句来得简洁明了。First consider the function of a university, certain notion that is widely accepted as a contributor of necessary training for individuals wishing to enter professional future careers, is unrealistic expectations expectation，前面用is了 in the so-called global university owing to the limitation of it. The primary obstacle that prevents the global university from providing adequate trainings to students lies in the adminstrative administrative and political side. Choosing curriculum, for instance, may be quite a debate among nations. Developed countries might protest against underdeveloped nations demands on agronomy to shake off poverty, while the latter would inevitably ignore the technology of reduce contaminant discharge by automobiles. Ultimately, the divarications may impede the university to provide comprehensive comprehensive是全面的，这里应该是说折中的吧，eclectic courses and temper the original intention of education. Secondly, even if all the nations come to an agreement on what pressing problems deserve for for可以去掉，deserve就有应该受到的意思了 the university's attention, the study and research focused only on those specific fields can not shoulder their students' personal enrichment for future career 应该用复数了 due to the narrow resource and onefold target.

Next consideration goes to the existing higer education system, from which students receive progress upon creativity, insight, and analytical skills. University meet meets the basic requirement for the students in their future careers by providing diverse lessons covered covered是被隐藏的意思，楼主是想说覆盖吧，covering或者换成including好了 several professions as engineering, teaching, law, medicine, and information science. The intellectually stimulating environment of a multiversity or college indeed serves for the cradle of social or scientific giants for hundreds of years. Take Harvard University for example, it has bred more than thirty Noble Prize winners over the last century which attested its unique role in nurturing the most outstanding talents. Harvard graduates also actively engaged in every continent striving to solve world's persistent problem such as global warming, medical aids for Africans, terrorism, and so forth. Additionally, a great deal of world's famous universities open wide to the international students, which enable multitude of young persons, keen, openhearted, sympathetic, and observant, 好像少了个tocome together and freely enjoy the veritas 这一句好像没看明白~~~呵呵. The students with such an a multicultural education background, as an American senior chemists once said to me, are more likely to be the leaders in their generation and play a significant part in impressing the world. 这段论述的很详细，不过感觉好像抓不住重点，如果在开头加个TS可能更容易把握

Furthermore, the endeavor of solving the world's annoying and urging social problem at international level is indispensable. Compared with relocating all the contemporary educational resources to abet abet好像是贬义词吧~~~ a new educational institution, cooperation and communication between nations on the bases of the current higer higher，楼主好像都写错了 education possess more merits, more convenience, as well as less squander. This kind of cooperation is proved to be feasible and has been accepted among many nations. A case in point is the Leadership for Sustainable Development Project sponsored by British government and implement through a joint effort of several universities in western countries. The project--aiming at preparing future leaders with sustainable perspective--has trained groups of personnels personnel就是全体职员的意思了，不用复数 came from both developed and developing countries. Zhang Xubiao, a Chinese trainee of the project, has participated in several crucial decision concerning China's environmental protection and revolution of state owned enterprises as a consultant for the government shortly after he completed the one year study and came back to China.

To sum up, given the fact that human society is confronted with many pressing and stubborn problems, and that the globalization increasingly narrows down the borders of different nations, so long as each nation can hold on its own prominence and rationally distributes its intellectual and financial to the international or interregional educational cooperation, an affirmative harvest of promising generation can be anticipated. Consequently, it is unnecessary for us to support a specific global university, which embraced bundles of conundrum 用conundrum表达难题好像不太准确 that wrecks its feasibility.

楼主写的很用心啊~~
一定查了很多资料，还有字典。

而且文中很多长句，读起来还小有难度，呵呵~~~

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The suggestion for all nations to support a global university designed for the purpose of dealing with the persistence social problems by producing students specialized in relating fields sounds admirable at first glance. However, by examining the functions of university and the ongoing processes of higer eduction, I would reckon that the fancy of global university is unpractical and needless in solving the worldwide difficult matters.（我觉得这句就是你的论点了，下面从这两方面写就好了）

First consider the function of a university, certain notion that is widely accepted as a contributor of necessary training for individuals wishing to enter professional future careers, is unrealistic expectations in the so-called global university owing to the limitation of it. The primary obstacle that prevents the global university from providing adequate trainings to students lies in the adminstrative and political side. Choosing curriculum, for instance, may be quite a debate among nations. Developed countries might protest against underdeveloped nations demands on agronomy to shake off poverty , while the latter would inevitably ignore the technology of reduce contaminant discharge by automobiles. Ultimately, the divarications may impede the university to provide comprehensive courses and temper the original intention of education. Secondly, even if all the nations come to an agreement on what pressing problems deserve for the university's attention, the study and research focused only on those specific fields can not shoulder their students' personal enrichment for future career due to the narrow resource and onefold target.（这一段是写不可行吧，我觉得这第二点放在不需要里比较好，因为它的目的就是要研究什么社会问题，但是综合性的大学也有专门的研究机构，何必再建个这个呢）

Next consideration goes to the existing higer education system, from which students receive progress upon creativity, insight, and analytical skills. University meet the basic requirement for the students in their future careers by providing diverse lessons covered several professions as engineering, teaching, law, medicine, and information science. The intellectually stimulating environment of a multiversity or college indeed serves for the cradle of social or scientific giants for hundreds of years. Take Harvard University for example, it has bred more than thirty Noble Prize winners over the last century which attested its unique role in nurturing the most outstanding talents. Harvard graduates also actively engaged in every continent striving to solve world's persistent problem such as global warming, medical aids for Africans, terrorism, and so forth. Additionally, a great deal of world's famous universities open wide to the international students, which enable multitude of young persons, keen, openhearted, sympathetic, and observant, come together and freely enjoy the veritas. The students with such an multicultural education background, as an American senior chemists once said to me, are more likely to be the leaders in their generation and play a significant part in impressing the world.（我觉得这段怎样支撑论点看不出，倒不如先说既然是全球性大学，就要具有大学的特征，再说这些，如果只专注于某一方面的研究，不能称之大学，但是这属于unpractical and needless的那个方面呢，或许可以放在正文第一段定义一下大学吧）

Furthermore, the endeavor of solving the world's annoying and urging social problem at international level is indispensable. Compared with relocating all the contemporary educational resources to abet a new educational institution, cooperation and communication between nations on the bases of the current higer education possess more merits, more convenience, as well as less squander. This kind of cooperation is proved to be feasible and has been accepted among many nations. A case in point is the Leadership for Sustainable Development Project sponsored by British government and implement through a joint effort of several universities in western countries. The project--aiming at preparing future leaders with sustainable perspective--has trained groups of personnels came from both developed and developing countries. Zhang Xubiao, a Chinese trainee of the project, has participated in several crucial decision concerning China's environmental protection and revolution of state owned enterprises as a consultant for the government shortly after he completed the one year study and came back to China.（这段比较好，我要学习，前面还要把反对的论点说的更充分些，论点是什么，下面就怎么展开，就不会偏了吧）

To sum up, given the fact that human society is confronted with many pressing and stubborn problems, and that the globalization increasingly narrows down the borders of different nations, so long as each nation can hold on its own prominence and rationally distributes its intellectual and financial to the international or interregional educational cooperation, an affirmative harvest of promising generation can be anticipated. Consequently, it is unnecessary for us to support a specific global university, which embraced bundles of conundrum that wrecks its feasibility.