Argument145 Kito小组第四次作业，多谢拍转者~~

@amy@UID: 209096

题目
Argument145 A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person-often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed-and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.   

翻译：一项新的调查所收集的数据显示打呼噜的人比不打呼噜的人更容易长胖。我们知道很多打呼噜的人夜间也经常有数秒钟的呼吸停顿，这种现象被称为睡眠呼吸中断。这种呼吸的停顿导致本人醒来--通常十分短暂以至于不被察觉--并且会使本人在白天很累而无力锻炼。因此，所有打呼噜的人都应该比正常人少吃多锻炼。

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提纲
（1）这个调查不能说明问题，因为没有指明在哪儿做的调查，调查了多少人，多少人回答了，参与调查的人是否具有代表性。而且关于打呼噜与长胖的关系通过调查来说明是不合适的，它需要科学的研究，因为现象并不能说明本质，有可能长胖是其它原因引起的。
（2）没有证据说明睡眠呼吸中断会使本人很累而无力锻炼。
（3）即使打呼噜真的能使人长胖和很累，那也应该从根本上缓解打呼噜的问题，仅仅依照表象来解决问题是不科学的。  

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正文（418字）
In this argument, the arguer concludes that people who snore should eat less that the normal people and do more exercise. He supports his conclusion depending on a survey, which shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than people who do not snore, and an assertion, which point out that the sleep apnea can result in feeling too tired to exercise. The argument is well presented, but not well reasoned. It is easy to reveal how unconvincing the argument is.

First of all, the survey used by the arguer can hardly prove anything. The arguer does not list the necessary information, for example, where is the survey conducted? How many people are surveyed? What is the number of respondents? Are the respondents representational? So the survey is invalid. Moreover, it is not apposite to get the relation between snore and gaining weight by survey, however, it needs scientific research and study because phenomena cannot show the essence and the common accepted idea is not sure to be the truth. It is very possible that the increase of weight is caused by other reasons, such as, irregular life style or unbalanced nutrition. And it is also likely that snore have no relation to the weight.

In addition, there is no evidence to show that sleep apnea will result in tire. Because the wakening brought by interruption of breathing is quite brief and not easy to be noticed, so whether sleep apnea can lead to feel tired also need careful investigation. It is a hard work since human is complicated organism and many facets can be the reason of feeling tired. Moreover, the experiment itself is fairly difficult to conduct.

Finally, granted that snore can make people gain weight and get tired, it is not a wise idea that just to eat little and exercise more, however, to resolve the snore problem radically is proper. The reason that snore not only influence one’s healthy, but also hinder other’s rest, imply that snore should be treated as a kind of disease. Medicine counts for much, so religious attitude is prerequisite. Doctors cannot treat the patients merely thought the phenomena, by contraries, they have to find out the real causation and make the proper prescription.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because it rely on invalid survey and unscientific saying, what's more, we cannot simply resolve external problem, especially concerning people's health. The facets discussed above are needed to take into account to get the final conclusion.

@amy@UID: 209096

顶一下，怎么没人帮我改呢

leedgenUID: 160823

In this argument, the arguer concludes that people who snore should eat less that the normal people and do more exercise. He supports his conclusion depending on a survey, which shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than people who do not snore, and an assertion, which point out that the sleep apnea can result in feeling too tired to exercise. The argument is well presented, but not well reasoned. It is easy to reveal how unconvincing the argument is.开头写的真好，学习中

First of all, the survey used by the arguer can hardly prove anything. The arguer does not list the necessary information, for example, where is the survey conducted? How many people are surveyed? What is the number of respondents? Are the respondents representational? So the survey is invalid.就这样说调查无效好像有点绝对了，可以说这些信息不提的话，我们无法相信而已，个人愚见  Moreover, it is not apposite to get the relation between snore and gaining weight by survey, however, it needs scientific research and study because phenomena cannot show the essence （the essence can not be simply gained from phenomena这里该怎么改呢，我不太确定）and the common accepted idea is not sure to be the truth. It is very possible that the increase of weight is caused by other reasons, such as, irregular life style or unbalanced nutrition. And it is also likely that snore have no relation to the weight.

In addition, there is no evidence to show that sleep apnea will result in tire. Because the wakening brought by interruption of breathing is quite brief and not easy to be noticed, so （so 去掉，前面有because了就不能有so了）whether sleep apnea can lead to feel tired also need careful investigation. It is a hard work since human is complicated organism and many facets can be the reason of feeling tired. Moreover, the experiment itself is fairly difficult to conduct.

Finally, granted that snore can make people gain weight and get tired, it is not a wise idea that just to eat little and exercise more, however, to resolve the snore problem radically is proper. The reason that snore not only influence one’s healthy, but also hinder other’s rest, imply that snore should be treated as a kind of disease. Medicine counts for much, so religious attitude is prerequisite. 请问这里是什么意思，不懂啊，呜呜Doctors cannot treat the patients merely thought the phenomena, by contraries, they have to find out the real causation and make the proper prescription.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because it rely on invalid survey and unscientific saying, what's more, we cannot simply resolve external problem, especially concerning people's health. The facets discussed above are needed to take into account to get the final conclusion.

leedgenUID: 160823

看来互改顺序有点乱啊，大家好像都不是严格按照那个来的

@amy@UID: 209096

In this argument, the arguer concludes that people who snore should eat less that the normal people and do more exercise. He supports his conclusion depending on a survey, which shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than people who do not snore, and an assertion, which point out that the sleep apnea can result in feeling too tired to exercise. The argument is well presented, but not well reasoned. It is easy to reveal how unconvincing the argument is.

First of all, the survey used by the arguer can hardly prove anything. The arguer does not list the necessary information, for example, where is the survey conducted? How many people are surveyed? What is the number of respondents? Are the respondents representational? Until these questions are answered, the result of he survey is worthless as evidence to support the arguer's conclusion. Moreover, it is not apposite to get the relation between snore and gaining weight by survey, however, it needs scientific research and study because phenomena sometimes is not equal to the essence （这样改好不好呢？）and the common accepted idea is not sure to be the truth. It is very possible that the increase of weight is caused by other reasons, such as, irregular life style or unbalanced nutrition. And it is also likely that snore have no relation to the weight.

In addition, there is no evidence to show that sleep apnea will result in tire. Because the wakening brought by interruption of breathing is quite brief and not easy to be noticed, whether sleep apnea can lead to feel tired also need careful investigation. It is a hard work since human is complicated organism and many facets can be the reason of feeling tired. Moreover, the experiment itself is fairly difficult to conduct.

Finally, granted that snore can make people gain weight and get tired, it is not a wise idea that just to eat little and exercise more, however, to resolve the snore problem radically is proper. The reason that snore not only influence one’s healthy, but also hinder other’s rest, imply that snore should be treated as a kind of disease. Medicine counts for much, so religious attitude is prerequisite(这里我是想说“医学事关重大，严谨的态度是首要的“，不知道这样表达对不对？:lol). Doctors cannot treat the patients merely thought the phenomena, by contraries, they have to find out the real causation and make the proper prescription.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because it rely on invalid survey and unscientific saying, what's more, we cannot simply resolve external problem, especially concerning people's health. The facets discussed above are needed to take into account to get the final conclusion.

多谢leedgen，嘿嘿，我稍微改了一下下~~
现在的互改顺序确实有点乱了呢:(