Argument163

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题目
Argument163 The following is taken from the editorial section of the local newspaper in Rockingham.

"In order to save a considerable amount of money, Rockingham's century-old town hall should be torn down and replaced by the larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed. The old town hall is too small to comfortably accommodate the number of people who are employed by the town. In addition, it is very costly to heat the old hall
in winter and cool it in summer. The new, larger building would be more energy efficient, costing less per square foot to heat and cool than the old hall. Furthermore, it would be possible to rent out some of the space in the new building, thereby generating income for the town of Rockingham."

翻译： 为节省大量支出，Rockingham应该拆除具有百年历史的市政厅并用一些市民所提议的更大更节能的建筑来代替。旧的市政厅过于狭小，无法使政府雇佣的大量员工在里面舒适地工作。而且，旧市政厅冬天采暖和夏天制冷都很花钱。新的更大的市政厅将会更加节能，单位面积所需的采暖和制冷费用都比旧建筑少。还有，我们可以把新建筑的一部分空间出租，从而为Rockingham市增加收入。

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提纲
（1） 旧的市政厅过于狭小，是否是因为政府雇用了过多冗余的员工，以至于办公室显得拥挤，而不能舒适工作。
（2） 建立新的市政厅需要一大笔建筑费和装修费，以及各种各样的费用，比如采购新的办公设备，制冷制暖设备等等。而且，新建筑总的面积变大，即使单位面积采暖和制冷费用少了，总的费用可能更多。新建筑其他的费用也可能更多，比如照明、用水、维修等费用。
（3） 没有证据说明新建筑一定可以出租出去，即使能够租出去，能够带来多少收入也是需要重新考虑的。
（4） 即使真的需要建立新的市政厅，也不一定需要拆除旧的，因为旧的市政厅已经具有百年历史，可能是城市的标志建筑，具有历史意义，是需要保护的，这点也需要确认。

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字数：445 words
时间：查阅资料（15分钟）+提纲（15分钟）+正文（45分钟） = 1小时15分钟
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正文
In this argument, the arguer suggests to tear down the Rockingham's century-old town hall and build a larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed in order to save money. He supports his suggestion from three aspects: the first one is the old town hall is too small; the second one is the fee to heat and cool the old building is very high; the third one is the income to rent out some of the space in the new building can rise the income of Rockingham. His suggestion seems reasonable, but after careful examination, we can find out several flaws as follows.

First of all, the arguer does not show that to enlarge the town hall and to employ so many people is necessary. It is possible that the town has employed so many redundant people that make the hall crowded and the working environment comfortable enough. If so, what to do should be to cut down the number of employers, instead of building a new hall.

Secondly, to build a new hall needs a good number of building fee and decorating fee, in addition, to purchase new office equipments and new heating and cooling equipments will also cost much. Moreover, the total area of new building is larger, and even if per square foot to heat and cool costs less, it is very likely that the total cost of the whole building is not smaller, and even larger. What is more, the other cost of new building maybe higher, such as lighting, water, maintenance and etc.

Thirdly, there is no evidence to show part of the new building can be rent out. The arguer should verify whether the position of the town hall is popular for rent and whether the structure of new building can meet customers' needs. And even if the building can be rent out, the effect should also be considered and the rent may be too little to do help to the addition of the income of Rockingham.

Last but not least, granted that it really needs to build a new town hall, it is not required to tear down the old one, because the old one has century years history and may be the symbol building of the town with historical meaning, thus the old one should be protected and the new building should select a new position.

To sum up, the arguer is too cursory to make the suggestion because he fails to prove the necessity to build a new town hall and whether the new build will save money. To make his suggestion more convincing, the arguer should take the facets discussed above into account.

交晚了，实在抱歉啊，下不为例，呵呵~~

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提纲
（1） 旧的市政厅过于狭小，是否是因为政府雇用了过多冗余的员工，以至于办公室显得拥挤，而不能舒适工作。（这点我没想到，不错不错，学习）
（2） 建立新的市政厅需要一大笔建筑费和装修费，以及各种各样的费用，比如采购新的办公设备，制冷制暖设备等等。而且，新建筑总的面积变大，即使单位面积采暖和制冷费用少了，总的费用可能更多。新建筑其他的费用也可能更多，比如照明、用水、维修等费用。
（3） 没有证据说明新建筑一定可以出租出去，即使能够租出去，能够带来多少收入也是需要重新考虑的。
（4） 即使真的需要建立新的市政厅，也不一定需要拆除旧的，因为旧的市政厅已经具有百年历史，可能是城市的标志建筑，具有历史意义，是需要保护的，这点也需要确认。

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字数：445 words
时间：查阅资料（15分钟）+提纲（15分钟）+正文（45分钟） = 1小时15分钟
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正文
In this argument, the arguer suggests to tear down the Rockingham's century-old town hall and build a larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed in order to save money. He supports his suggestion from three aspects: the first one is the old town hall is too small; the second one is the fee to heat and cool the old building is very high; the third one is the income to rent out some of the space in the new building can rise the income of Rockingham. His suggestion seems reasonable, but after careful examination, we can find out several flaws as follows.

First of all, the arguer does not show that to enlarge the town hall and to employ so many people is necessary. It is possible that the town has employed so many redundant people that make the hall crowded and the working environment（not） comfortable enough. If so, what to do should be to cut down the number of employers, instead of building a new hall.

Secondly, to build a new hall needs a good number of building fee and decorating fee, in addition, to purchase new office equipments and new heating and cooling equipments will also cost much. Moreover, the total area of new building is larger, and even if per square foot to heat and cool costs less, it is very likely that the total cost of the whole building is not smaller, and even larger. What is more, the other cost of new building maybe higher, such as lighting, water, maintenance and etc.

Thirdly, there is no evidence to show part of the new building can be rent out. The arguer should verify whether the position of the town hall is popular for（to） rent and whether the structure of new building can meet customers' needs. And even if the building can be rent out, the effect should also be considered and the rent may be too little to do help to the addition of the income of Rockingham.

Last but not（the） least, granted that it really needs to build a new town hall, it is not required to tear down the old one, because the old one has century years history and may be the symbol building of the town with historical meaning, thus the old one should be protected and the new building should select a new position.

To sum up, the arguer is too cursory to make the suggestion because he fails to prove the necessity to build a new town hall and whether the new building will save money. To make his suggestion more convincing, the arguer should take the facets discussed above into account.

总的还是不错，这样练下去，到考试时一定不会有问题的！
还有就是最后一段可以再写详细点，可以一一写到。