Issue48 同主题第七次作业 大家来捧场亚

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
Outline:
1.赞同individual的作用，他们了解历史发展方向，不拘一格破旧除新
2.即使这些精英可以推动甚至决定历史发展方向，可是真正的发展的动力来自广大人民
3.精英其实是把握并迎合了人民的心理，所以决定权仍在人民群众

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that recent study of history has lay too much stress on outstanding ones. It is well known that the masses did not play a marginal role in the most significant history trends. With no regard of  profound contributions of groups of people, our understanding of history remains partial or even unwarranted.

First and foremost, when it comes to certain famous historic events, they are always correlations between such events with  those distinguished ones, such as American Revolution with Washington, The second world war with Hitler and so forth. The reason for this is that our study of history often pays more attention to these individuals. It is reasonable for the historians to study history according to such famous individuals' movements, which were crucial to propel development of those events. Consider, Planck and his great contribution of Planck's constants. He introduced the hypothesis that oscillation atoms absorb and emit energy only in discrete bundles instead of continuously, as assumed in classical physics.  Compared with the multitudes restriction of knowledge and hackneyed senses, such elites always overthrow antiquated notions and  profoundly understand the direction of development of history then propelled the progress of history considerably. Thus, it is useful for our historians to study history by means of greatness of those individuals.

I concede the individuals do not only influence but actually determine social advancement in some cases, however, it does not mean that we can overlook the vital influence from of groups of people upon our the historic progress. After all, the function of certain individuals simply indicate a true way for us, the main power of advancement stems from groups of people’s strive. For example, The Great Wall is the greatest building all over the world. Though it stems from certain ancient kings personal purposes, the considerable works were accomplished actually by thousands of hundreds of people. Lincoln, who is the main leader during American Civil War, simply cited abolishment of slavery. Lots of black servants were responded for the success of that war for their pursuit of freedom and hard striving against enemy. Without the masses significant contributions, it is impossible to gain such advancement of history.


Moreover, such famous individuals were actively actually fit for desires of the general populace ,which were just obscure or even error. That is to say, without personal efforts of particular individuals for leadership, the masses still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs. If we cast a look back at to the second world war, it is easily to find that rationality of Hitler's success. After the first war, German was in huge economic depression. Intending  to resolve their dilemmas suffering from those social problems such as poverty, violence and upset , most of German needs a hero who can help them health of body and soul. At the moment, Hitler seize this opportunity and satisfy the populace's needs successfully. Accordingly, without catering to the masses' wishes, it is difficult for those elites to affect history significantly.

In sum, what is harmful for historian to study history if they give no consideration to the masses' contributions. To make our study of history more comprehensive and reasonable, we should call for a balance between the individuals and groups of people .


[ 本帖最后由 chongxinlai 于 2007-3-2 22:41 编辑 ]

wangziyuan1986UID: 2266737

这句话表意有些模糊吧．尽管我也理解其中的意思＂without  the elites' efforts, the mass still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs＂
可否改成"without personal efforts of particular individual for leadership, the mass can still find another whose ideas were consistent with their needs.

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

原帖由 wangziyuan1986 于 2007-3-2 01:22 发表
这句话表意有些模糊吧．尽管我也理解其中的意思＂without  the elites' efforts, the mass still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs＂
可否改成"without personal e ...

谢谢ls的帮忙，说实话这篇写得极差，时间也长的很，以前写得时候都是要用ciba的，汗。这次干脆没用，不过在QQ聊天中。。。

chongxinlaiUID: 2235209

刚刚改了下

TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
Outline:
1.赞同individual的作用，他们了解历史发展方向，不拘一格破旧除新
2.即使这些精英可以推动甚至决定历史发展方向，可是真正的发展的动力来自广大人民
3.精英其实是把握并迎合了人民的心理，所以决定权仍在人民群众

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that recent study of history has lay too much stress on outstanding ones, for the reason that the masses did not play a marginal role in the most significant history trends. With no regard of  profound contributions of groups of people, our understanding of history remains partial or even unwarranted.

First and foremost, when it comes to certain famous historic events, human always make direct correlations between such events and  those distinguished ones, such as American Revolution and Washington, The second world war and Hitler and so forth. The reason for this is that our study of history often pays more attention to these individuals. It is reasonable for the historians to study history according to such famous individuals' movements, which were crucial to propel development of those events. Consider, Planck, Max and Planck's constants. He introduced the hypothesis that oscillation atoms absorb and emit energy only in discrete bundles instead of continuously, as assumed in classical physics.  Compared with the multitudes restriction of knowledge and hackneyed senses, such elites always overthrow antiquated notions and  profound understand the direction of development of history. With their own hard work, the progress of history were propelled considerably. Apparently, it is useful for our historians to study history by means of discovering and analyzing such elites' influence upon istory.


I concede the individuals did not only influence but actually determine social advancement in some cases, however, it does not mean that we can overlook vital influence from groups of people upon our historic progress. After all, the function of certain individuals simply indicate a true way of us, the main power of advancement stems from groups of people’s strive. Consider,  a variety of inventions such as telephone, television, electric lights and so on , are really popular  due to people's works instead of few elites. For example,  televisions are produced by lots of manufactures of television. The source of contents of TV stems from community.  But for the mass's endeavors, a television would be still in a laboratory and regarded as magic instead of being used by the mass and changing our daily lives.

Moreover, such famous individuals were actively fit for desires of the general populace ,which were just obscure or even error. That is to say, without personal efforts of particular individuals for leadership, the masses still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs. If we cast a look back at the second world war, it is easily to find that rationality of Hitler's success. After the first war, German was in huge economic depression. Intending  to resolve their dilemmas suffering from those social problems such as poverty, violence and upset , most of German needs a hero who can help them health of body and soul. At the moment, Hitler seize this opportunity and satisfy the populace's needs successfully. Accordingly, without catering to the masses' wishes, it is difficult for those elites to affect history significantly.
In sum, what is harmful for historian to study history giving no consideration to the masses' contribution. To make our study of history more comprehensive and reasonable, we should call for a balance between the individuals and groups of people .

mayuhorseUID: 198581

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that recent study of history has lay too much stress on outstanding ones, for the reason that the masses did not play a marginal role in the most significant history trends.（觉得这个因果关系不成立吧，用让步会好一点吧） With no regard of  profound contributions of groups of people, our understanding of history remains partial or even unwarranted.

First and foremost, when it comes to certain famous historic events, human always make a direct correlations between（of） such events and(with)  those distinguished ones, such as American Revolution and(with) Washington, The second world war and Hitler and so forth. The reason for this is that our study of history often pays more attention to these individuals. It is reasonable for the historians to study history according to such famous individuals' movements, which were crucial to propel development of those events. Consider, Planck, Max and Planck's constants.（没懂这句话意思） He introduced the hypothesis that oscillation atoms absorb and emit energy only in discrete bundles instead of continuously, as assumed in classical physics.  Compared with the multitudes restriction of knowledge and hackneyed senses, such elites always overthrow antiquated notions and  profoundly understand the direction of development of history. With their own hard work, the progress of history were propelled considerably. Apparently, it is useful for our historians to study history by means of discovering and analyzing such elites' influence upon istory.这段组织有点乱啊，特别时最后几句话，逻辑不是太清楚啊。

I concede the individuals did(do) not only influence but actually determine social advancement in some cases, however, it does not mean that we can overlook the vital influence from of groups of people upon our the historic progress. After all, the function of certain individuals simply indicate a true way of us, the main power of advancement stems from groups of people’s strive. Consider,  a variety of inventions such as telephone, television, electric lights and so on , are really popular  due to people's works instead of few elite's. For example,  televisions are produced by lots of manufactures of television(delete). The source of contents of TV stems from community.  But for the mass's endeavors, a television would be still in a laboratory and regarded as magic instead of being used by the mass and changing our daily lives.这个例子有点牵强啊，可以举Great Wall,American Civil War, Industry Revolution。

Moreover, such famous individuals were actively actually fit for desires of the general populace ,which were just obscure or even error. That is to say, without personal efforts of particular individuals for leadership, the masses still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs. If we cast a look back at to the second world war, it is easily to find that rationality of Hitler's success. After the first war, German was in huge economic depression. Intending  to resolve their dilemmas suffering from those social problems such as poverty, violence and upset , most of German needs a hero who can help them health of body and soul. At the moment, Hitler seize this opportunity and satisfy the populace's needs successfully. Accordingly, without catering to the masses' wishes, it is difficult for those elites to affect history significantly.

In sum, what is harmful for historian to study history giving gives(主语从句哈) no consideration to the masses' contribution. To make our study of history more comprehensive and reasonable, we should call for a balance between the individuals and groups of people .

james011137UID: 2280989

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim that recent study of history has lay too much stress on outstanding ones. It is well known that the masses did not play a marginal role in the most significant history trends. With no(without) regard of  profound contributions of groups of people, our understanding of history remains partial or even unwarranted.  不错的开头嘛

First and foremost, when it comes to certain famous historic events, they are always correlations between such events with  those distinguished ones, such as American Revolution with Washington, The second world war with Hitler and so forth. (between之后怎么只有一个东东,你想说的是历史事件和大人物有必然联系,不如说我们总是把大人物当成一个记录历史的符号,想起他们就想起那些重大历史事件,还照应下文)The reason for this is that our study of history often pays more attention to these individuals. It is reasonable for the historians to study history according to such famous individuals' movements, which were crucial to propel development of those events. Consider, Planck and his great contribution of Planck's constants. He introduced the hypothesis that oscillation atoms absorb and emit energy only in discrete bundles instead of continuously, as assumed in classical physics.  Compared with the multitudes restriction of knowledge and hackneyed senses, such elites always overthrow antiquated notions and  profoundly understand the direction of development of history then propelled the progress of history considerably. Thus, it is useful for our historians to study history by means of greatness of those individuals.  偶理工科,这例子我喜欢hoho~  

I concede the individuals do not only influence but actually determine social advancement in some cases, (递进的意思好像不够强,不如简单说有重大作用得了)however, it does not mean that we can overlook the vital influence from of groups of people upon our the historic progress. After all, the function of certain individuals simply indicate a true way for us, the main power of advancement stems from groups of people’s strive. For example, The Great Wall is the greatest building all over the world. (one of 吧..)Though it stems from certain ancient kings personal purposes, the considerable works were accomplished actually by thousands of hundreds of people. Lincoln, who is the main leader during American Civil War, simply cited abolishment of slavery. Lots of black servants were responded for the success of that war for their pursuit of freedom and hard striving against enemy. Without the masses significant contributions, it is impossible to gain such advancement of history.


Moreover, such famous individuals were actively actually fit for desires of the general populace ,which were just obscure or even error. That is to say, without personal efforts of particular individuals for leadership, the masses still could find another one, whose ideas were consistent with their needs. If we cast a look back at to the second world war, it is easily to find that rationality of Hitler's success. After the first war, German was in huge economic depression. Intending  to resolve their dilemmas suffering from those social problems such as poverty, violence and upset , most of German needs a hero who can help them health of body and soul. At the moment, Hitler seize this opportunity and satisfy the populace's needs successfully. Accordingly, without catering to the masses' wishes, it is difficult for those elites to affect history significantly.这个例子用的不错

In sum, what is harmful for historian to study history if they give no consideration to the masses' contributions. To make our study of history more comprehensive and reasonable, we should call for a balance between the individuals and groups of people .


总体思路不错,比我强多了..,   学了几个好词,  一些表达上可以更好,


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