再次 麻烦斑竹改改文章 谢谢 衷心的

lizhongweiUID: 2212984

167题 是关于在图书馆投资书还是电脑的问题

Having enough money to invest the libraryis an exciting thing to any universities. How to use this money is also adifficult choice. If one has to choose one between computers and books whenmaking investment, I personally believe that the best option is the computer becausecomputers not only provide students convenient but also save money for theuniversity.

First, a computer offer the students a veryconvenient way of study. With the computer one will have no trouble finding anydata of the library he/she wants to further my study by using the search systemand the digital information. If the library does not have enough computers,however, searching for the large amount of data is not an easy task for everystudent. one have to spend nearly half a day in the library wandering in thebook shelves, finding the right book he/she want from the reference stacks ,and even carry these books , perhaps weight for 20 pound in gross, commuting betweenthe library and his/her classroom. This, of course, is the waste of time andenergy. On the other hand, a computer would make us searching the informationin the library everywhere by using the internet, even out of the university, regardlessthe strict off duty time and the situation of the library.  And we even do not need to consider the overdueand fine by downloading the PDF digital books for the library’s website.

The second reason why invest money on thecomputer is the best choice because the digital system in the library wouldsave money for the university. Firstly, without enough computers, a library hasto buy many same books, such as the schoolbooks and fundamental reference bookswhich are needed for many classes, to meet the need of the students. Thesebooks would waste a lot of money in the university in the long run. But, if alibrary has enough computer and internet system, the university only needs tobuy the copyright from the publishing companies and provide the digital editionsto the students. Secondly, computer is a good assistant for the people; it isalso for the library, too. Almost all of the old libraries have the problem of theexpense of too many employees, and computers help, because with these excellentassistants, a library does not need a large number of staffs any more.

While, in comparing to the books, thecomputers also have many disadvantages, it is very fragile to the virus forinstance, I believe that the benefits are overweight the defects. If we takethe proper precaution, such as installing anti-virus software and making copiesfor the data, the students and the university stand to benefits.

alive1986UID: 2241739

太勉强了吧？用得着发那么多贴吗？

NETEMUID: 2283160

改作文向来是自愿的行为

指名拉人不妥

lintelleUID: 2297267

论题让你讨论选择哪个，你只管选择就好了，没必要提意见。最后一段有些跑题了。
另外绝对不能没有结尾段，外国人对essay的结尾是非常重视的。
语言还好，可以继续打造：低级问题没有，可以放心~:) 再多背点单词吧~

moondy74178945UID: 2231844

结尾很必要吗？
我觉得这个结尾写不好的话，还不如不写呢吧~
楼主这个he/she还是少写好，朋友告诫我不要写这个，so dumb......这是他说得原话~:funk:

lintelleUID: 2297267

要写的。我所有英语老师都非常仔细的教我们结尾和开头应该怎么相辅相成，但绝不能简单重复。他们对结尾的重视程度是超过你想象的。

moondy74178945UID: 2231844

:( 可是结尾真得很难写，感觉就像下棋的时候做棋一样。
要经过巧妙安排，之后在这一点上致命一击，文章结尾写得好的人都是牛人啊~

lintelleUID: 2297267

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-661675-1-1.html

楼上过去回复~:o
我现在就像赶鸭子一样，那个名单里头的人我一个一个赶过去回复……:mad

moondy74178945UID: 2231844

哦~没看见，呵呵，不好意思~